SS:Haayeee Devi Maiyya *update Chp3 - pg6

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Hey all I'm writing my 1st ever SS or FF? I don't know myself, what has happened to me I wanted to write one from a long time but never thought i would be seriously into it...!!!

It could be utter nonsense I think it is but please do give me suggestions, critisms are welcomed but just don't throw chappals or tomatoes at me on my 1st post itself!!!

All the characters in this are the same except two who will be introduced in the 1st Part (Aditya aka Adi & Jia) if I introduce any new characters later will let you all know!
**ProLogue**
My story is set in a background after the six months of contract marriage of Arhi (Arnav & Khushi) and after all the truth was out in front of Gupta and Raizada family. Leaving everyone stunned except Anjali who tried to protect her husband and always forgave him just because she loved him immensely and fought with her family on not divorcing Shyam, and that Shyam would change.😲
A month later...One day Khushi was packing her bags, herself and Arnav had their last talk for that day arguing and asking her to stay. Arnav wanted her to stay and forgive everyone including him but she was adamant on leaving. 😕

Khushi: Arnavji hume jana hi hoga thode din hume akela rehna hai...
Arnav: Damn it!!!! kabhi toh meri baat suno tum...
Khushi: Kabhi toh aap humari baat suniye na... (angrily) then she sighed in relief made Arnav sit on the bed while she was kneeling on floor.
In a loving way holding Arnav's face in between her warm palms looking straight into his eyes and said arnau mujhe jana hi hoga thode waqt k liye par mai vapas aajaungi jaldi...
Arnav: Sachi aoogi na? Nahi toh mai kisi aur se shaadi kar lunga haan laughed arnav 😛
Khushi: Screamed her lungs out "How dare you??" mere samne jhut se bhi aise mat socho..mai ja rhi hu aur aap aisi ghatiya baate kar rahe hai?? 😭
**Khushi almost had a dizzy spell** keeping her hand on her head trying to control herself.
Concerned arnav, khushi are you alright??
Khushi: Yes!!! I'm just let me go now will you?
A: Ok fine!! Do what you want... but just remember I LOVE YOU a lottt!!!!❤️
K: Hmmm...*in her mind* ( I love you more) and her *hEaRt* going *DhaK DhaK*
Arnav: Aisa kyu lag rha hai ki i wont be seeing you around? My heart is going *DhaK DhaK*
Khushi: In shock!!! But didn't utter a word!! Smiled and then...🤗 hugged each other tight...🤗

Suddenlyyy...the alarm clock fell and Khushi screamed and woke up sitting up straight and said...Haayeee Deviii Maiyyaaa mujhe yeh subhe subhe kya hogayaa hai...Shocked OMG its 7 am damn it!!! Its Friday!!!! Laad Governer ne meri neende abh tak udaa rakha hai...hayeee Devi Maiyaaa!!!😕 However, Khushi started her day with a sarcastic laugh😆
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After reading this SS Prologue if anyone want to suggest me a Topic name it would be welcomed as I'm not sure what it should be named properly 😔
Hope you'all at least like reading it... please hit LIKE if you liked it and please do comment...and do tell me if I should continue or not???😊😕
~INDEX~
SS: Haayeee Devi Maiyyaa (in English)
*Chapter1* - Pg2 "The Drama Queen" (Mommy) & "The Maha Dramebazz" Kidss!!
*Chapter2* - Pg3 "A BIG DAY OUT" (mommy & kids with a tadka of Nk's mischief)
*Chapter3* - Pg6 "Love is in the air"(Nk & La + Arnav and Khushi)
My Other work:
FF: Journey of my Life
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Awesome Start 😳
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Posted: 13 years ago
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awww thank you so much. thanks for your sweet comment 😊
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Fantastic start. please continue soon. :D
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Great start dear. Continue soon
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i didn't understand a word written in hindi...😒

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@Black_Paradize & dmg4Kash & lollipop4u sorry I can't reply to everyone of you as IF is showing that I might be spamming😲 Anyways I want to thank you all who commented and encouraged me to keep continuing 😃
You really don't know how much each comment here means to me
Will Update Soon 😉
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SS: Hayee Devi Maiyya (Translated in English)

Enjoy!!!!😉 (hope you like it)
**ProLogue**
My story is set in a background after the six months of contract marriage of Arhi (Arnav & Khushi) and after all the truth was out in front of Gupta and Raizada family. Leaving everyone stunned except Anjali who tried to protect her husband and always forgave him just because she loved him immensely and fought with her family on not divorcing Shyam, and that Shyam would change.😲
A month later...One day Khushi was packing her bags, herself and Arnav had their last talk for that day arguing and asking her to stay. Arnav wanted her to stay and forgive everyone including him but she was adamant on leaving. 😕

Khushi: Arnavji ( I would have to go I've to live alone for some days.)
Arnav: Damn it!!! Just agree to me at least once in a BlueMoon
Khushi:Sometime you could listen to me...(angrily) then she sighed in relief made Arnav sit on the bed while she was kneeling on floor.
In a loving way holding Arnav's face in between her warm palms looking straight into his eyes and said arnau (I would have to go at least for sometime but I would be back soon.)
Arnav: Really? You would come back right? If not, then I would get married to some other girl said Arnav while irritating and laughing at Khushi. 😛
Khushi: Screamed her lungs out "How dare you??" Don't talk in this manner in front of me at least and do not think of it even as a joke in your mind... I am going and your talking all sorts of rubbish here???😭
**Khushi almost had a dizzy spell** keeping her hand on her head trying to control herself.
Concerned arnav, khushi are you alright??
Khushi: Yes!!! I'm just let me go now will you?
A: Ok fine!! Do what you want... but just remember I LOVE YOU a lottt!!!!❤️
K: Hmmm...*in her mind* ( I love you more) and her *hEaRt* going *DhaK DhaK*
Arnav: Why am I getting a feeling that I wont be seeing you around? My heart is going *DhaK DhaK* .
Khushi: In shock!!! But didn't utter a word!! Smiled and then...🤗 hugged each other tight...🤗

Suddenlyyy...the alarm clock fell and Khushi screamed and woke up sitting up straight and said...Haayeee Deviii Maiyyaaa What has happenend to me early morning??? OMG its 7 am damn it!!! Its Friday!!!! Till now Laad Governer is controlling my sleep leaving me sleepless at night???? .hayeee Devi Maiyaaa!!!😕 However, Khushi started her day with a sarcastic laugh. 😆
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At the moment especially for shokofa 😃
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Recap: Suddenlyy.. the alarm clock fell and Khushi screamed and woke up sitting up straight and said... Haayeee Devii Maiyaa mujhe yeh subhe subhe kya hogya hai 😲 OMG its 7 am what the!!! Uff its Friday!! Laad Governer ne meri neende abh tak udaa rakha hai... Haayee Devi Maiyaaa!!!

However, Khushi started her day with a sarcastic laugh😃

Abh aagee..

Chapter 1 "The Drama Queen" (Mommy) & "The Maha Dramebazz" Kids!!

Few minutes later...

Kidsss...Wake up its past 7 o'clock already you would be late sweeties and then do not blame me if you get to school late ...(A concerned voice calling out... Just like an alarm clock)😛

Boy: Mom please let us sleep in at least for one day. We would love to spend some time with you.

Girl: *whispers* to her brother yes Thanks aditya.

Mom aditya is right we have not spend time with you properly for a while now.

(Jia and Aditya were Khushi's twin's and they were Four year olds. Jia is just a few minutes younger than her brother Adi.)

Khushi: 😲 Jia its adi bhaiya not aditya beta...and please both of you talk to me in Hindi this English is so Laad Governer's business it kills me yaar. So please avoid it at least not at home kids.

Both (Adi & Jia) sorry mamma...But who is Laad Governer???😲

Khushi said ohh no one giggling softly and entered their bedroom (they share one bedroom to sleep as Jia is scared of sleeping alone just like her mother) but loves to share the room with her brother sleeping underneath on a double bed and Jia on top in a Single bed attached like a Bunkbed.

Khushi: ohh my cupcakes, my cookiesss (trying to maska maar both of them to get going to school.)

Adi: sat up greeting good morning maa to khushi and kissing her on her left cheek

Khushi smiled greeting Adi and greeting him back on his forehead and she greeted the same way to Jia who later tucked her head in the quilt protesting not to go to school today.

Khushi: But baache today is your last day anyways then you have your Summer Holidays for almost 2 months.

Par maa it won't be the same na Jia said while getting off her Bunk bed, because won't be able to bunk or wagg right bhaiya?

Khushi raised her eye-brows to ask who taught you about bunking and all. But just forgot what she was going to say instead said Ufffooo jao hum aap dono se naraz hai aap humari baate hi nahi sunte ho[:(]

Ohhooo maaa come on cheer up said Jia and Adi kissing Khushi's cheeks simultaneously. Khushi hugged both of them in love & joy and said now come on hurry up and get ready.

Both stamping their feet in anger, however in a playful way, saying we would complaint this to daddy. That you always trouble his strong little man and little angel (both turning around as they said this sticking their tongue out and indirectly teasing their mother), they left laughing from there!

7:20am

Aditya yelled saying mom please make us something good for breaky right? sorry mera matlab hai please nashte mai kuch acha banaoge na app?

Yes love, opps haan beta said Khushi smiling..

The house had a pin drop silence for a while after that, Khushi wondered if they have sneaked into the bed again Ohh noo she thought.

7:30 am

Suddenly there came a voice echoing loudly Khushi was freaked out for a second dropping a Aluminium Spoon she was holding on the floor as the voice said, "Khushi Kumari Gupta..(Jia *whispers* nahi nahi just nodding her head) Khushi bitiya mai Devi Maiya hu, tum apne bachon pe itna atyachar mat karo" it came from the Pooja Room (where khushi had actually placed a big DM Idol) and some giggles boomed as the sentence finished. For a second Khushi was stunned but later she knew it was Jia and Adi's shararat!!

All three were laughing hard having good time then Khushi said Haayee DM!!! Hume maaf kardo mera matlab hai in dono ko maaf kardo inki nadani k liye. Khushi actually scolded both of them for calling her name and said aap dono ko pta h humne kabhi humare amma babuji ka naam nhi liya is tarah se! Aur tum ho ke ufff!!!

Mai in dono ka kya karu DM aap hi bataeye she mumbled softly.

Just the slight upset of their mother annoyed them as they had heard what she had actually mumbled to DM. Though they both loved her immensely, they just could not see khushi upset towards them. Hence they had their breakfast fast without complaining or letting her complain they got up to get going to school.

Adi said Chalo maa, let's go holding his sister Jia's hand. Khushi was little bit upset with the change in their behaviour so she thought that she would annoy them more just for fun. So she was pretending not to listen. Then Jia said maa abh kya hua chalo bhi drame mat karo na! Dad calls you right "The Drama Queen"😛 Khushi still was silent and Adi got angry tone he said, " Dekho Khushi agar tum abhi nahi ayi humare saath toh hum humare Chachu ko bulayege aur unke saath chale jayege!!" 😛

Khushi eyes stunned with the way Adi spoke to her she was like "what the" but before that Jia said maa please don't even think of saying "What the" I have heard it is a bad word grinning towards khushi.

Jia Pointing her index finger towards the ceiling and wiggling it towards her mom saying naughty naughty😛

Khushi gulped down her saliva hard and then after a big silence of all three staring at each other they bustard out laughing, and khushi concluded as today is the last day of your school I would love to tell you that you are not attending school and just bunking it with me..!! Both the kids ran towards Khushi saying yayyy maaa your the best hugging her tightly. Khushi said you two are the best kids in the world too..."The Maha Dramebazz" Kids❤️

Jia: Maa I wish daddy was here too I miss him a lot Adi said me too Choti..!!!

Khushi ohhhooo toh aaap dono ko sirf papa hi chahiye apke saath humari toh koi zarurat hi nahi hai shayad??? (khushi acting) the kids were like no hume toh basss "The Drama Queen" (Mommy) chahiye humare saath!!!

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Precap: Khushi was driving while Jia and Adi were talking to each other secretly sitting in the back seat :

Jia: bhaiya i called up daddy today but he was busy as usual, but I left a message!!! I am sure dad would call on mamma's mobile and fire her!! Hehehe
Adi: but choti mum left her mobile at home itself?? 😲

Jia and Adi..(Ohhh Nooo) both screamed

Khushi freaked out and slammed her foot on brakes in the middle of the road!!! (creating a Traffic Jam)

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Hope you all like it! please do hit like and comment. It encourages me to continue!!! Good, Bad reviews everything's welcome but do comment if you can!!! Thanks for reading if you cannot comment please hit the LIKE button!!!😃Thank you!
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Loved it. It's awesome. Please continue soon. :D

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