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zafi

@zafi

Inactive

Posted: 13 years ago

#21

loved it. 👏👏👏👏👏Please Continue. 😃

The serial is not giving us what we want so it's great that you have taken us to the part quickly. 😃

One request, Please make Khushi Intelligent and brave enough to share what she knows about shyam with Arnav and don't make him hate her or doubt her too much. Thanks.😉

Update soon please.😊

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LyssaPie

@LyssaPie

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 13 years ago

#22

Great start!

But i must say can you please write like this

Khushi: (whatever she said)

Arnav: (whatever she said)

It's easier to read.

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LoLo

@LoLo

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#23

Little confused as to which "he" you're referring to and when. I guess I have to read it again. Not sure how I feel about Shyam cornering her though. Something tells me he's going to be scared out of his wits at first. He's a fast thinker, but he wasn't expecting to be exposed ever, let alone like this. He can't even talk his way out of this. I'll wait to see what happens next, hope you keep writing.

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--Nargis--

@--Nargis--

Sparkler

+ 5

Posted: 13 years ago

#24

Please do continue!!!😃

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-GreenEnvy-

@-GreenEnvy-

Beginner

Posted: 13 years ago

#25

niceee can you please pm me? as malluangel sorry im too lazy to login to that one [lol]

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chandarani1

@chandarani1

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

#26

pls do update again!!!! dont make us wait too long!!!!! wish this all happened in this serial but i guess we are asking for too much... u have indeed captured the scene so well , its intensity nd the tension that i imagined each and every moment right before my eyes so plsss do continueee and keep writing such wonderful masterpieces:-))))))

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HeadOverHeels

@HeadOverHeels

Inactive

+ 7

Posted: 13 years ago

#27

Originally posted by: LyssaPie
Great start!

But i must say can you please write like this

Khushi: (whatever she said)
Arnav: (whatever she said)

It's easier to read.

I'd love to but that's really not the style I write in. I usually go with more descriptive scenes, and depth to the dialogues, instead of just simple dialogues which don't convey much. I suppose I lean towards a more book style than script style.

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-GreenEnvy-

@-GreenEnvy-

Beginner

Posted: 13 years ago

#28

Originally posted by: HeadOverHeels

I'd love to but that's really not the style I write in. I usually go with more descriptive scenes, and depth to the dialogues, instead of just simple dialogues which don't convey much. I suppose I lean towards a more book style than script style.

i hope you dont mind this, but honestly i love how you right, it makes the experience wayyy better, it reads like an actual book real story...the other way is just i dont like it :\