Hello :)
Congratulations on your story :) It reads very well :) It's an interesting concept for Annika and Shivaay :)
I was a bit concerned about the overlaps with VERITAS, however. I'm not sure what's happening here, but I thought I would point out what I saw :)
Reckless Abandon: Anika held onto Shivaay tightly, whispering his name with a reverence he'd never heard in her voice.
VERITAS: Instead of wiggling away as he'd half-expected her to, she held him tightly, muttering his name with a reverence he'd never heard in her voice.
Reckless Abandon: "Do I always make you feel this way, Annika?" ... ... It was a reaction that was so primal.
VERITAS: "Do I always make you feel this way? he whispered his question in her ear. Her reaction was primal, her hips shifting against his hand as she whimpered.
Reckless Abandon: The idea was to introduce Annika to pleasure, to ease her into the actual penetration.
VERITAS: This was about her, about easing her into sexual play, about introducing her to pleasure.
(This next one hurts me the most because there is a very personal reason why this line is in VERITAS)
Reckless Abandon: "Shh, it's fine." Shivaay wickedly teased, "It tastes like chashni."
Veritas: "Ssshhh. It's fine. Tastes like chashni.
Reckless Abandon: As Shivaay moved off of Annika, she moaned in displeasure as he left her for a few moments, wanting to feel his weight on her again. All she heard was his swish of his boxers coming off and crinkle of foil and then plastic.
VERITAS: Khushi mewled her displeasure when he left her. For a few moments, the only sounds in the room were the swish of his pants as he discarded them and the crinkle of foil and then plastic.
(You clearly stopped even trying to pretend you weren't copying at this point!!)
Reckless Abandon: This was all so surreal, like a fantasy come true. ... The pain from the scratches on his back assured him that this was all real and Annika was really before him.
VERITAS: It felt surreal, like the most vivid of dreams, but the slight sting of her nails on his skin assured him that it was real.
Reckless Abandon: "I know Annika, I'm I'm sorry ... etc (sorry, it's hard to copy word for word!! I do not seem to have your talent for it.)
VERITAS: "Sorry, sorry, sorry, he rested his forehead on hers, "Tell me. Khushi gave another small sob. Guilt bubbled inside him. You should have waited, for her sake.
Reckless Abandon: "Please don't go."
VERITAS: He started to ease away, keeping his movements as slow and gentle as possible, but stopped when she spoke. "Don't go. Khushi tried to hold him closer, as if truly afraid that he'd leave her.
Reckless Abandon: "I'm not going anywhere, I'm right here with you"
VERITAS: "Ssshhh, he soothed, "I'm right here with you.
Reckless Abandon: "For now, a tear rolled down Annika's cheek and into her hair.
VERITAS: "For now, a tear rolled down her cheek and into her hair.
Reckless Abandon: Being buried inside her, this woman who held his all in her arms, was simply enigmatic.
VERITAS: He felt the world tilt on its axis. Being buried inside her, this woman who held all of him in her hands, was life changing.
Reckless Abandon: "I can't ..." "Don't worry, I've got you."
VERITAS: Too soon, she tightened around him, her skin flushing with the beginnings of her release. And though he wasn't ready for it to be over - would he ever be? - he slipped his hand between them to encourage her.
"I ... I can't ... she gasped.
"I've got you, let it come.
Reckless Abandon: Annika plummeted with a sharp cry ...
VERITAS: She plummeted with a sharp cry, her hand tightening around his as she gave in. He let go too, moving into her with purpose until he joined her in oblivion.
Reckless Abandon: DO NOT COPY THIS POST AS IT IS EXCLUSIVE TO INDIA FORUMS
VERITAS: *weeps in the corner*
My dearest, my dear, my wonderful, amazing LordLuminous (are you the same as the LordLuminious on Tumblr, I wonder ...) I understand inspiration strikes where it will, but if you were inspired by VERITAS then could you not have thanked me or linked to it or mentioned me or sent me an ask to let me know?
My bitwa and his chashni are very sad.
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