Shivika TS : One Day To Live - Page 2

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Posted: 8 years ago
#11
awesome update yar...
I really loved it...
I was holding my breath while reading this...
I really loved the way you portrayed Shivaay's emotions...
The realization of him that he can't lose her for anything...he wants her to be with him for ever and ever...
I really loved the scene where he said that she was a girl who broked the glass of his car and slowly slowly she had broked all barriers of his heart..it was amazing
It was just perfect
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Posted: 8 years ago
#12
Something that flicks a string to heart and gives you the opportunity to live by reading and breath emotions, and this is exactly what I felt while reading. somewhere I read in between the lines without even the lines. Amazingly written and heartfeltly expressed.
Pitched on the right flow of the story and a ver subtle way of transition from one scene to another (from the gun shot to the Fake mother).
I loved it, beautifully written
Thanks for such a piece.

Warm Love
Diva_Vineet
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Posted: 8 years ago
#13
Lovely update
Waiting for the next one
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Posted: 8 years ago
#14
Loved it!! Waiting for more!!😛
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Posted: 8 years ago
#15


Thank you dear 😳
Glad you loved it ❤️

Love
Lisa
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Posted: 8 years ago
#16

Originally posted by: -Rhea-

This is so so so beautiful. Beautifully written. ❤️ Absolutely loved it.
"...this vulnerably tough girl who once broke my gaadi ka shheesha and had slowly broken all my barriers including the one that lead straight to my heart."
Ahhh. I simply loved loved this line. ❤️ Eagerly waiting for you to continue. :")


Aww Rhea, your comment really melted my heart. I am so so glad that you loved it. I felt so happy reading your comment as just before that I read your update on Letters 😆 It feels so good to be appreciated 😳 I was really skeptical about this line but then many people liked it.
Thank you so very much. Will update soonish 😊

Lots of Love
Lisa
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Posted: 8 years ago
#17

Originally posted by: YeHoKyaRahaHai

Lovely story.

Can't wait for the next chapter.


Thank you so much Amri 😳😊 * If I am not wrong , it is your name right?*
Will try to update as soon as possible, though it won't be anytime soon as I have not written it
Thanks for the feedback ❤️

Love
Lisa
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Posted: 8 years ago
#18

Originally posted by: LoveToWrite

Res

Give me a bit time Lisa:-)
Will revert back soon.


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Unres

Dear Lisa🤗🤗

An amazing start to your TS. Very beautifully penned down. I must not forget to appreciate the details you have kept in consideration to put every time [which I lack terribly😆]. It came out wonderfully.😳

I usually do not even scroll down if its written in first person. No offence to anyone, but I don't know what it is, but I prefer only third person. But you have managed to make me read till the end🤗

At first, I thought its based entirely on Gunshot track, but then it being a nightmare wasn't something, I expected. The first paragraph of description when the bullet hits her was written so well, high on emotions, I would say👏

I loved some lines very, very much. Mentioning the same, below.


'A nightmare that could completely tear away my perfectly weaved world.'
'However, a very real nightmare '
'Yesterday was bliss. Pure Bliss, when our relationship had broken all its barriers and stood in its raw, naked glory.'
'We had crossed all the thorns thrown in our way; we have completed one chapter of our life by leaving behind all our prejudices, misunderstandings and our ego just to begin another chapter. Now only the petals and fragrance of the roses were left for us, for our whole life'


[I was pleasantly surprised at first, reading the nightmare lines because this is exactly what I was writing around a week back. No no, not on this, that is again AU track but nightmare thing is common, so this reminded me, that I have something to write. I will go back to it, after writing this comment. Thank you😳 Otherwise, I had almost forgotten about it]

God, I am not even watching the show since weeks now. So have no idea of what's going on but the words you mentioned here, 'Raat ka rishta'..'raat ko idhar maje aur din me udhar' made me go


Lovely!

Much Love
-Harshada




Dearest Harshada 🤗❤️

I can't even express my happiness right now! Every time I read your comment and believe me I read it at least a 10-20 times😆😳 I have this humongous smile on my face which nobody could wipe off. I am even glad that you at least read a amateur's work like mine. Thank you so so much 😃❤️ Well the details I give generally turns out to be boring and unnecessary but glad that it worked out in this *Are you trying to say something bad about your work ?😡 Don't you dare! They are the BEST. It's not your lack of details rather your simplicity which is endearingly fresh and the sweetness it brings which matters: And that is exactly why it is loved by everybody 😳 [Shouts ME]Then who needs details ?*

Thanks once again for appreciating and taking out time for commenting.😊

Trust me, that was the exact reason why I was surprised in the first place as I knew ( read from your comment on some one's fiction) that you do not read from first person view and then I saw your Res I was like she seriously read it and even commented ? WOW. I felt so special that you made an exception to that rule for me * Shrieks while doing a victory dance* I still don't believe my shot was worth to being read till the end by you.

You even took time to point out your favorite lines make me feel go Aww all over again. I exactly did not want to make this emotional as I suck writing such stuff but then again my frustration won and weaved itself out.

Were you talking about the Love and Memories? ( God I remember now I still have to Unres there, completely gorgot) Glad that at least my shot did something good. I screamed like a banshee when I saw that you had one more work up your sleeve. Well it is a compliment that I can at least write something like you be that a line.

Well even I am not exactly following the show since few days due to the afternoon slot's timing being given to some other show and partly due to this NT track but then I read the updates and thought this is what a bar dancer who is given prompts by Pinky will say right ? And this is the worst that can happen. A bar dancer for a mother and a married man whom we don't know for a father and if Shivaay can accept this , then he can accept anything regarding Annika. I wanted to show how Shivaay wholeheartedly accepts her and of course for my own satisfaction when Pinky is bashed severely by Shivaay for hurting Annika. Apologies if I overdid it. Though I read from the updates, NT did mention something like this.

And see there, I got into a rant again . Sorry.

Anyways as I was saying, I don't know how to thank you enough. It feels really good to be appreciated especially from a beautiful person like you. You really did wonders to my Euphoria level.

THANK YOU!

Love you loads and loads ❤️,

Lisa

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Posted: 8 years ago
#19

Originally posted by: water9786

Awesome and amazing start dear. Totally loved it.

waiting for next update.
Update soon...


Thank you so much Chaaya !❤️😳
I am so glad that you loved it.
Even I am hoping to update soon 😆

Love
-Lisa
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Posted: 8 years ago
#20

Originally posted by: nikki.171

This was beautiful. Especially the last few lines...

this vulnerably tough girl who once broke my gaadi ka shheesha and had slowly broken all my barriers including the one that lead straight to my heart.





Aww !😳 Thank you so much ! You guys are so sweet 😃
The last line was not exactly planned but really glad that everybody liked it 😛

Love
Lisa

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