The Broken Wall|Shivika OS [Maybe]|

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hello folks! I am not the most active member of the forum but still I stalk the forum every freaking minute. No kidding,I swear .I have read each and every post especially the stories/fanfics . And I must say we have very good writers/analysts like Pritz,YehHoKyaRahaHai,Yellowmellow,Geet.a,Twerping,napstermonster,A.C,Allyson,
FrozenK.,Letitgo,SanyaEterna and many others whom I have forgotten to name. Guys if you are reading this I want you to know that I really love your posts or stories. I really appreciate the time you take out to create them 👏. Thank you so much. I know I am not as good as many of our writers but I did try to give some words to my thoughts for our Shivika❤️ I absolutely adore them to the moon and back !

Be aware : This is my First work Published (except some quotes) and I am rather surprised at myself for writing and publishing a fanfic. I am not an experienced writer.So if it is bad ,Dirty Water is welcome and if it is too bad then maybe a Chameli or Lady Gaga ( I really loved that name !😆 Lady Baba and Lady Gaga , a match made in heaven , No ?) would be welcome too.Thanks for reading this 😃.

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The Broken Wall

Lifeless.Empty.Silent.Hollow.Colorless.Dull.
These exact words could be used for Shivaay Singh Oberoi whom the world saw as the shrewd businessman or the"corporate shark" as they liked to call him behind his back . As after all a human also has some feelings but feelings and Shivaay...It was as if these two words could not even exist side by side, at least in this world. Maybe it was possible in any alternate universe where fish were flying and birds were swimming and the tiger was afraid of mice ! But in this world ,no chance of the Shivaay Singh Oberoi having "feelings".It would actually make a good joke, No ?
But , they did hear of how much he loved his two brothers and what happened to those who dared to hurt them even the smallest bit.
They shuddered when they heard the consequences of those victims .
But they heard and hasn't everybody told them not to believe what is heard but to believe what is seen. And they had not seen anything which showed that he had feelings for his brothers or anybody for the fact.They didn't even want to test though. After all , rumors could be true right ?
For the fact even his marriage with the daughter of the khandaani family Kapoors was a marriage of convenience or rather a deal of million crores and many takeover of factories. Not to forget , to continue the tradition of marrying high class ladies,to ensure the reproduction of the Oberoi species and maintaining a respectable...er rather the most respectable rank in their social circle. But no , no feelings attached at all.
So we can safely say that Shivaay Singh Oberoi has no feelings inside him and many doubted whether he has a heart ? But heart is after all a very important organ and it has a very vital function so it must be there.
Hence proved that the corporate shark was rather a shark who had no feelings.

Until She came.

Shivaay

Lifeless.Empty.Silent.Hollow.Colorless.Dull.
This is how the Oberoi Mansion felt since she left.

It was 4 days,7 hours,36 minutes and 18 seconds.
Approximately 103 hours.
Approximately 6216 minutes.
Accurately 372978 seconds.
Oh , no make it 372979 seconds.
As the seconds were ticking away and she was absolutely nowhere to be found.
Not that he counted but come on , his calculations skills were far better than his Paanika.He internally chuckled, after all SHE had a reason to call him Calculator Singh Oberoi.
He reminisced fondly as he remembered all the names she had given him.
Calculator Singh Oberoi
Stone Singh Oberoi
SSO
Bagad Billa
Billuji
Ah , his heart clenched in pain and threatened to break into a million pieces remembering her Billuji, oh how he wished to hear it now.
If only he could hear it now,somehow! It would be like a drop of water to a man dying of thirst. If only...
But where was SHE ?
WHERE THE HELL WAS SHE ?
It was for the first time , his mind and his heart were asking the same question.

Only to find NO Answer .

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Thanks a lot for reading this 😃
Chameli(s) are being awaited!
And guys I am a new member so will not be able to reply to every one of you ! Am Sorry 😭 But will try to reply every one of you. And of course I will read every Comment twice or thrice and go crazy over them. Havn't proof read.
Thanks ,
Love
Lis 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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First of all, thank you so much for your kind words! Much appreciated:)

Loved the opening chapter, and The Broken Wall is such an apt title! I am guessing this is exactly how Shivaay will be once she leaves from the mansion.

Is this just a oneshot or is there more to come?😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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That was so beautifully written <3 I could feel the emptiness that he is going through.please do write more on them :)
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Oh wow this is so good...very real...hope u continue...❤️
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Interesting start
Please continue
Looking forward to read more.
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Thanks a lot 😃
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hi there,
First of all thank you very much for adding me into the list of such amazing writers - even though I am sure I don't deserve it, but thank you nonetheless!
And secondly, this was awesome! You should definitely write more! I was able to feel both, Shivaay's hidden feelings and the apparent denial in the first part. As well as his aching desperation and pain in the second one! Very well written, poignantly so. No melodrama at all but simply a pathos of very real pain!
Bravo my friends and do write more!
I want to know where Anika went and why she left four days ago. SO do think about continuing! Love this!

Love,
A.C.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Firstly, thank you so much for your appreciation! Really means a lot!
Secondly, this was beautifully written! I could really feel the desperation of Shivaay as his Paanika was away from him! Really nice!
Thirdly, the title is so apt! The Broken Wall of Shivaay Singh Oberoi!
Please do write more and send me all the PMs😆

-Sanu
Edited by SanyaEterna - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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It seems like a promising start. :)
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Posted: 8 years ago
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If u think u r not gud enough then u r wrong😊... u should definitely write more😃...loved reading this😳... absolutely amazing👏

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