Agaslie TS: Saviour *Part-1 Updated on Pg-2* - Page 2

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Here's the link to my first story on Agastya-Imlie. Please koi yeh mat puchna ki kab complete hoga😭

Hey guys! I know the initial plan was to post it as an OS but it became a bit too lengthy, so i thought I should update it as a TS. Here's the first part. Do let me know if you liked this or not. (I genuinely have no idea what I wrote). Eagerly waiting for your comments on this one

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PART-1

"Ab var-vadhu pheron ke liye khade ho jaayein"

"Rukiye, Pandit Ji!", came a raucous, yet familiar voice, shuddering the walls of the Chaudhary Mansion.

Recognising the very familiarity of the voice, Agastya, at once, lifted his head to look at the intruder. His teary, melancholy eyes, now a bit dazed as he saw her, walking straight up to the altar, with fire in her eyes.

Well, it was never a task for him to read her eyes. Atleast that's what he believed! And, today? Today they seemed to lack something; the eyes that always carried a pool of emotions in them, eyes that held the power to rip apart his heart into a million pieces with a lone tear, lacked spirit today. She had a blank expression on her face & that broke something inside him. He was devastated! Her stoic face & dreary eyes did what her tears might not have done.

What was she upto now? Would she slap him again in front of the world like she did on their 'almost' wedding day? Well, he did deserve that, he too felt like slapping himself not once but multiple times after that. He wouldn't mind a slap today as well if that somehow reduces her pain. Sigh. But wait. The way she's marching in..what if in anger, she ends up pushing him into the Agnikund? His eyebrows twitched at the thought. Brushing it off, he brought his gaze back to imlie.

She strode up to the centre of the hall, now standing a few yards away from the dias.

Agastya was confused. Why did she stop there? Ohh! So, she had brought along goons with her. Jhumri bhaiya & Gopi bhaiya, the bar-guards, they must be standing outside. Two claps in the air & they would barge in. But this sherwanii..is so tight. Ughh. How was he supposed to fight off goons in it?

Agastya was lost in his thoughts when the words she uttered next, broke his trance, bringing him back to reality.

"Yeh saadi naahi ho sakti", Imlie declared. The guests gasped in shock as all eyes turned to her. Agastya & Binni rose up from their seats.

The Chaudhary family was exchanging incredulous glances, their expressions a mixture of disbelief and anger at her audacity.

"Kaahe? Tu koun hoti hai ee shaadi rokne wali?Tohka manaa kiya tha na ki dobara iss chaukhat par paao mat rakhna.. Tu phir chali aayi?" Dadimaa asked, her tone icy with reproach.

"Arey aap isse baatein kya kar rahi hai Ammaji, ise toh dhakke maarke bahar nikaliye yahan se", Alka chimed in, with gritted teeth.

Before anyone could make a move, Imlie burst into a pool of melodramatic tears, bawling & sobbing loudly.

With each sob, her cries grew louder & louder, leaving the entire audience utterly confused.

"Hai Radharani, yeh kaisi kahaani...Ab kaa batayein apna darad apni hi zubaani", she continued to sob dramatically.

Agastya's heart pounded in confusion as he stared at Imlie, his mind racing with a million questions. Out of all the potential outcomes, he was definitely not prepared for this!

"E Imaliya, ye kya tamasha laga rakha hai, sidhe sidhe bolna kaa hua?", Chachiji asked.

With all the subtlety of a runaway train, Imlie rushed forward, throwing herself into Chachi's arms with an exaggerated sob.

"Ab hum kaa batayein Chachiji.. Iss aadmi ne humka kachu bolne sunne layak choda hai kaa...", she wailed melodramatically, pointing her index finger at Agastya.

"Matbal..Tu kehna kaa chahti hai?", Dadimaa intervened.

Imlie pulled out from the hug. "Hum jo kehna chahte hai dadiyaa *sniff* oo bolne se achha hum gaake suna dete hai, kaahe ki oo sab *sniff* humse toh bola nahi jayega..na baba na", she replied, dramatically shaking her hands to signal a "no".

"Jo bhi hai imlie bitiya, Tu befikr hoke bol"

"Han han tu darr mat beta, tu bol"

"Hum sab tere saath hai"

Concerned villagers came out in her support, their voices filled with worry as they saw her distressed state. Hmmm..Imlie ki adaaon ka teer, nishana chukh jaaye..aisa ho sakat hai kaa! She lauded herself with a silent pat.

With a sudden burst of energy, Imlie wiped away her tears, straightened her posture, and with a mischievous twinkle in her eye, she began to sing.

"Tauba meri tauba nigahein na milaaun..

Aise kaise sab ko kahani main bataun..

Kya kya hua mere saath re..

Koi bhi to aaya na haath re..Koi bhi to aaya na haath re

Pehle to julmi ne pakdi kalaai..Phir usne chupke se ungli dabaai

Pehle to julmi ne pakdi kalaai..Phir usne chupke se ungli dabaai

Choodi tooti... "

She paused.

"Ab aage ki kahani bhi hum gaake sunae ya aap log samajh gaye", she asked, with an oh-so innocent face.

The room erupted into chaos as whispers and murmurs swept through the crowd.

Agastya's jaw dropped in astonishment as he stared at Imlie, who was now putting on a performance worthy of an Oscar nomination.

"Gattu ee ladki ka bol rahi hai.. Tu chup kyun khada hai? Kachu bol na...", Dadi asked vehemently.

"Dadimaa main kya bolu..mujhe khud kuch samajh nahi aa raha yeh kya bol rahi hai. Aisa.. Aisa kuch nahi hua hai humare beech", he tried to explain when Imlie interrupted, "Kaa!! Hai Radharani *sob*..aaj tak safed jhooth bas suna tha, aaj ooko dadhi moochh sahit pagdi pehne dekh bhi liya. Kaise bol sakat ho tum yeh..Arey tum akhrot ka chilka ho..bhulakkad bhediya naahi. Yaad nahi oo din ka hua tha... Truck ke upar"

"Truck ke upar?"

"Ee ka bol rahi hai!"

"Kya hua tha truck ke upar, bhabhi? "

"Truck ke upar wohi hua tha Chutki, jo nahi hona chahiye tha.. Jiske wajah se aaj humka yahan bin bulaya mehmaan banke aana pada. Ab kal ko agar kachu ulta sidha hogya, toh hum kiske paas jayenge bhala", she said, with a flourish worthy of a Bollywood heroine.

As soon as she said it, Agastya's mind took him back to that day. It was a memory etched in his mind, a moment of tender intimacy that had forever changed their relationship. The way she pulled him closer with a mischievous smile, caressed his face with sheer seductiveness, her warm breathe against his lips as she whispered words of sweet nothings. In that moment, Agastya felt a surge of electricity shoot through him, his heart racing with anticipation. He knew she could sense that too, despite being blindfolded. He knew she too wanted it. And, so in broad daylight, under the scorching sun, they surrendered themselves to the fiery passion that burned between them, atop the roof of a truck, amidst a sea of golden haystacks.

But they didn't take the final step. Though every fiber of his being yearned to consummate their love, he knew that this was not the time nor the place. With a gentle touch, he pulled away from her embrace, his heart heavy with longing. He wanted her to experience the full beauty of their love, to see, feel, and enjoy every moment without reservation. Consummating their love while she was blindfolded felt like depriving her of that experience.

"Arey! Tum chup kaahe ho gaye, kuch..yaad aagya ka?", Imlie asked, fluttering her eyelashes.

"K-kuch nahi hua tha uss din. Mujhe toh yaad hai par shayad tum bhul gayi ho.. Humne toh bas kiss kiya tha usse kya-", oh fu*k. Agastya closed his eyes in embarrassment.

Ab aaya na oonth pahad ke niche. Imlie had a victorious smirk on her face.

Shocked gasps echoed through the hall.

Binni's eyes widened as she watched the scene unfold before her. She was frustrated. The situation was veering ofcourse, deviating from her meticulously laid plans!

"Bas Annapurna Ji! Bahot ho gaya. Aap iss bacchi ke saath itni na-insaafi kaise kar sakti hai. Arey kal ko agar kuch oonch-nich ho gayi, toh kya hoga iska. Aise mein, aap apne pote ki kisi aur se shaadi karwana chahti hai", a woman from the crowd, raised her voice.

"Hum aisa nahi hone denge, Annapurna ji. Maaf kijiyega lekin yeh sahi nahi!"

"Han han, yeh galat hai"

"Ek minute...Ruko tum sab..", Anjana Kaki came forward. Turning towards Agastya, she said, "Beta, tum batao. Kya tum sachme yeh shaadi karna chahte ho? Kya isme tumhari marzi hai?"

Agastya felt a surge of courage welling up inside him. He could no longer suppress the torrent of emotions swirling within him. He had enough. With a deep breath & tears welling up in his eyes, he said, "Bilkul bhi nahi!"

Imlie let out a breath of relief as she heard it. A contented smile playing on her lips. Tears threatened to fall from her eyes & this time too, it didn't go unnoticed by Agastya.

He threw off the garland, the floral adornment tumbling to the ground in a cascade of petals. As he descended from the dias, he saw his Dadimaa seated in the front row, clutching her head with both hands. Rushing to her side, Agastya knelt before her, his voice trembling with emotion as he began...

Aage ki kahaani in Part-2. Stay tuned!

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The song reference:

https://youtu.be/ti3-y50DsMk?si=qT2oqH0ka4ZE8i3M

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I LOVE THIS SO MUCH!!!!! ❤️🔥

You captured every character’s essence and way of speaking so perfectly!

I felt shy reading the truck wala part, this is so good honestly!

KASH yeh hua hota. This was where the show ka downfall began. Shreya, i hope you were the screenplay writer. This was perfect. Just like how our show was. I could literally imagine Imlie pulling off this charade and Agastya refusing the wedding and explaining to Dadi.

Cant wait for part 2. If possible could you also give a full fledged happy ending to Agastya Imlie??

How I wish Imlie actually pulled a stunt like this in the show... This is quintessentially her way of dealing with things... Rona dhona and being a silent spectator is so not ger style...

Can't wait to read part 2

Dil le lo Shreya ❤️🥹

Tumne toh ek ek character ke nuances ko deeply study karke, ekdam same to same characterization daal diya re.. I guess, that's why the entire thing is appearing so realistic..

I feel, this one ,right here might give me some closure on Agaslie...

Request for a hot con, and a happy ending pls...

P.S - Clearly you burnt the midnight oil for this today... Great minds get active during the wee hours 😂😜

I am a night owl too 😂

Omg this was so good lol the Agnikund and tight sherwani thoughts of August

Imlie ka truck ke upar jho hua wo batane ka tarika bahot kazuallll tha (the song)

And the truck scene ufff

Totally enjoyed reading this.. Do update next part soon

The truck scene had more explicit details than what you guys read but I scraped off a good chunk of lines during the final edit, thinking y'all might not like it ..now I'm regretting my decision lol

But thik hai. Will compensate for it in part-2

@Kashish.. so glad you liked it..me feeling shy now

@Ren.. This was where my mind went when imlie had a conversation with bulbul before going to Chaudhary mansion. Kaash aisa hua hota

@Gags.. hann behen. Truly burnt the midnight oil for this. And, now the brainrot is real

@mrs_darcy_shree..I know right! It is truly an imlie thing. Don't know who hit the writers on their head that they made her a silent spectator to all the commotion.

@kavya.. Hehehe.. Kaafi kezual tha i know

Will try to update the next part soon.

Originally posted by: YourSia

The truck scene had more explicit details than what you guys read but I scraped off a good chunk of lines during the final edit, thinking y'all might not like it ..now I'm regretting my decision lol

But thik hai. Will compensate for it in part-2

@Kashish.. so glad you liked it..me feeling shy now

@Ren.. This was where my mind went when imlie had a conversation with bulbul before going to Chaudhary mansion. Kaash aisa hua hota

@Gags.. hann behen. Truly burnt the midnight oil for this. And, now the brainrot is real

@mrs_darcy_shree..I know right! It is truly an imlie thing. Don't know who hit the writers on their head that they made her a silent spectator to all the commotion.

@kavya.. Hehehe.. Kaafi kezual tha i know

Will try to update the next part soon.

@Bold - Kyaaaaaaaaaa 😱😱

U removed hot stuff?

This is cheating. You are cheater!