Harry Potter and the Secrets Within/cmplt chap P10

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Michelle

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Posted: 16 years ago

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Great idea and a wonderful start. Very interesting so far. You have a few grammatical and spelling errors, nothing that spell check can't fix, and a few turns of phrase seemed a little of. But these were minor errors.

The story itself was wonderful and really intriguing! Update soon!

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missindia26

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Posted: 16 years ago

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Awesome start! Sounds really interesting! The children are so cute 😊

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Posted: 16 years ago

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Wow. Very good start.
Please continue soon. Will be waiting for more

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Zaria

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Posted: 16 years ago

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You're an amazing writer!!! Please write some more fast. The plots really intersting

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Aishwariya Majumdar(Ashy, ais, ashes of fire)

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Posted: 16 years ago

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Okay guys..here's the next part....enjoy!

The heir of Voldemort

The night was cold and the wind was shivering. A cloud of yellow mist covered the street of Spiner's End. Nobody was there for sure...because stories ran that once the Dark Lord roamed about this mysterious place. But now everything was over...he lived no more. But inspite of knowing the truth, peopleavoided this place for some unexplained reasons. But today, the view was different.
Through the dark bushes came a cloaked figure, man or woman, nobody could tell. The figure seemed to be covered throughout and was shivering, not because of the cold but for some other reasons. Then slowly the figure lowered its hood and revealed its manly head. He took out his wand and pointed towards a tall tree. He focussed at the point and cried out as sharply as he can, "Who goes there?"
Another hooded figure came from behind the tree. This one was quite tall and approached the male figure quite daringly. As they were almost an inch apart, the second hooded figure lowered the hood and revealed her curly thick black hair. "You came?" she said in a rough voice which wa almost like a hiss.
"I promised didn't I", replied the man with thick blonde hair.
"It has been years since we have met Draco", said the girl. "Never thought we'd meet again".
Draco Malfoy looked around to see whether they were truely alone.
"Is he safe?" he asked.
"He is in the Brroks Mansion", said the girl.
"Syrine, are you sure that what we are doing will benefit us?" asked Draco.
Syrine Lestrange lloked up at him and sneered. "You are just like your filthy parents, coward and afraid of taking chances".
Draco kept silent.
".....and that is the exact reason why your mother died...out of fear! Fear of being killed y the heir of Voldemort!"
"FINE! she did!" Draco could not take it anymore. Her cousin and estranged daughter of her aunt Bellatrix Lestarnge was seriously taking things far ahead. "Are we here to talk about why mum died? Or are we here to talk about the new heir?"
Syrine took a deep breath and begun, "He claims revenge immediately ".
"But that's not possible! Its insane and above all...risky.The ministry is taking extra measures of Hogwarts and the other magical dimensions. And besides, Shacklebolt and Potter are a part of this plan", said Draco.
"Its going to be tough. If only we knew about the Dark Lord's plan much earlier" sighed Syrine.
"Its not my fault. The night of the final battle nineteen years ago, the Dark Lord shared his plan with Snape and my da only. Snape was guilty of being a spy and was killed and my dad was sent to exile. I had to get that plan out of him somehow and the only way out was to banih him. The ministry was still fond of my dad. It was me who proposed his immediate banishment. It was the only way" said Draco.
"The Dark Lord's spirit is not at peace until Potter dies. I will not rest either. He killed my mother, the only one I had who was close to me. That filthy half-blood will pay for that!" shouted Syrine and her voice was echoed all around the place.
"Hush.....someone might hear you", warned Draco. "We can't afford to take any risks now".
Somehow, Draco shiverred and so did Syrine. "Valtore is very powerful. I'm afraid that he might be even a greater threat to us than Voldemort." said Syrine.
"How did the Dark Lord create him?" asked Draco. "Was it a potion or a dark magic?"
"Both" replied Syrine, looking into oblivion. "Its something that all wizards don't know about. You know that Snape was the potions teacher at Hogwarts and Voldemort was athe most darkest wizard anyone has ever known. Both combined and brought Voldemort into this world."
"But do you know anything about this entire process?" asked Draco, curiously.
"I've heard it. The potion which Snape used is called 'Molten Mangamo Solution' otherwie known as the MMS. Its made up unicorn hair and dead bones of snake and other things...I don't remember. Its so powerful that it can make anything which will have all your powers after you die...or more. Voldemort used a dark spell and stored all his magical powers into this creature now known as Valtore. And now he is our master", reported Syrine.
"our master?!" cried Draco. "That's outrageous! This stupid creature cannot be our master".
Syrine looked at Draco with scornful eyes.
Draco at once understood that he had saud something really aweful. He looked down.
"We need a schemer and we need extra potential to secure our way to kill each and eeryone we hate. Valtore may not be Voldemort, but he is our only hope. If we don't act now, the ministry is going to ind out everything and extra measures will be taken to secure the wizarding worl, especially Hogwarts", said Syrine.
"Hogwarts? That's your target?" asked Draco who feared for his son.
"Yes and especially when Potter and the Weasley children are a part of the school", said Syrine.
Draco did not say much but kept peace.
The wind blew rapidly and heavily.
"We should be going" announced Syrine. "Just remember, daty calm."
"One question, you said Voldemort gave all his powers to this Valtore." said Draco. "So, was that the exact reason why Potter was able to kill him at the final encounter?"
Syrine looked up at the sky, a storm was definitely coming. "I don't know" she said.
She covered her self with the cloaked and looked at Draco for the last time. Then she proceeded into the darkness behind the big tree. Within a few seconds, she was gone, leaving a fearful Draco Malfoy behind.

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Harry went to the mirror and looked at his scar. It was hurting a bit, but why? It did not hurt him for years, why now? He rubbed it slowly. But it continued to pinch him.
He looked at the letter. The words 'Beware' and 'Kill' pinched him in his heart and stomach. He needed someone to see this. But who?
"Ginny would be worried sick", he thought. "And so would Ron and Hermione."
Harry was really agitated. He could not explain this strange feeling which he was getting since morning. He could clearly sense that something was definitely wrong. But how could he approach anyone with this topic? Anyone much like himself would think that he was mad.
Just then, someone knocked the front door.
Harry was distracted.
He went towards the door and opened it. It was Ron. Red haired mummbled face and a grin always followed.
"Do you know why I hate being Hermione's husband sometimes? Its because I have to do almost everything she says", sighed Ron and sat on the couch.
"Well you can't deny the falling temptation", grined Harry.
Harry loked t the letter he received a few minutes a ago. He asked himself whether it would be safe to tell Ron about the warning. He had to tell someone. Finally he decided to do so.
Harry looked at Ron who was apparently looking at the Quibbler. "Strange, isn't it?" said Ron. "Almost after nineteen years, another mystery. Can you believe it? What do you think the reason for Narcissa's sudden death would be?"
Harry kept quite. He really wasn't listening.
"Hey, mate? You listening?" asked Ron.
"Um...Ron, I need to show you something", said Harry. "Something really very important".
Harry took out the paper and showed it to Ron. At first, Ron was convinced that it was the work of a prankster who looked out for people to crack jokes on. But then, as Harry told him that his scar was hurting again, a shade of suspicion replaced his happy face.
"This isn't nice, mate" said Ron. "This can be serious."
"But what can it be?" asked Harry.
"Do you think ............ he........" began Ron but Harry cut him short.
"That's impossible. I killed him remeber. There's no way he can regain life".
"Well.....then do you think its....I don't know...reincarnation?" asked Ron.
Harry stopped dead. "Reincarnation?"
Harry had definitely had not expected this. It was something beyond his ordinary compare. But, in all his life in the wizarding world, he had not heard about any such wizard or witch who reincarnated.
Was Voldemort the first one?

Edited by Miley_hp - 16 years ago

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Aishwariya Majumdar(Ashy, ais, ashes of fire)

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Posted: 16 years ago

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Thank you all so much for supporting me and reading my FF.

Edited by Miley_hp - 16 years ago

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Sakina

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Posted: 16 years ago

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hmmmm............that was nice....

i already know u write really well......but i didn't know u cud write THIS well!!!!

sory for not commenting earlier......did it now!!!

i'm highly impressed!!!!way to go!!!!

good job and do update soon!!!!!

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missindia26

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Posted: 16 years ago

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Wow that was very mysterious and suspenseful

Already hating Syrine but cant wait to find out more

Great writing update soon 😊

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Aishwariya Majumdar(Ashy, ais, ashes of fire)

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Posted: 16 years ago

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Across the Lake

The arrival of the students was marked with laughter. Harry and Ginny had told Albus that a half-giant and the school's gamekeeper who was also their good friend used to wait at the station for the children to take them to the legendary castle of Hogwarts. But James had informed that nowadays, two of the school's teachers, Professor Majenta who used to teach the children Charms and the Divination teacher, professor Quilt are responsible of escorting them to Hogwarts.
This really agitated Albus as he had longed to see this great friend who was often the topic of discussion at the dinner table back at home.
"Don't worry, professor Majenta and Quilt are really good. Wait till you see the headmistress, professor Mc'gonagall, she's really old but really wise", said James when they were at the station near Hogwarts.
Everyone was in their school uniform, black robes with the school emblem boldly printed on it. Except for the newcomers, everybody was wearing their neck tie with their house colours on it- Scarlet, emerald, bright blue and golden yellow.
James lead them towards the extreme front of the big lines which were formed. Albus noticed that as they proceeded forward, almost everyone wanted to talk to James regarding some issues like, "How was vacation?" or "Good to see you again" or maybe "You're looking great".
"I see you are quite famous", said Rose.
"I am always famous.Everyone loves me", said James, with a arrogant tone to mark impression.
"Or maybe they love you because you are Harry Potter's eldest son", came a girlish voice from behind.
They turned to look around. A tall (not as tall as James), slim figured, brown haired girl with radiant face was standing behind them and smiled.
"Emily?! How did......I mean...you are....I mean to .......say......when did you arrive here?" stammered James.
"I arrived with everyone," said Emily "like always...remember?"
James hit his head at the ack and said, "Oh! Ofcourse you did. So...how was summer?"
"Nice", Emily smiled. "And yours?"
"Fine like always", answered James.
Emily's attention was drawn towards the two other members of the group who were staring at them. Emily left no second to ask who they were. "James, are they your siblings?"
"Oh...the boy is my own brother but the girl is my cousin. Never mind them", answered Jmaes and pulled back Albus and Rose behind him to remove them from sight.
"That was not very nice of him", said Rose. "He completely refussed to let that Emily girl know who we are".
But Albus' mind was full of questions. He longed to go to the legendary castle and see evrything with his very own eyes. He completely turned a deaf ear to Rose and unfrotunately, Rose understood that and frowned.
"You aren't listening to me are you, Albus?" asked Rose.
"Rose, I'm really sorry but right now I don't want to be bothered about James and Emily. I want to explore this place, see everything and live evrything" cried Albus.
Just then, a stout and wrinkled face man with silver grey hair followed by a slim-figured and and jet-black haired lady approached and crid, "First years. First years! Please come up! No commosions people. The rest of the classes can go out of the station and board the carriages." siad the stout man.
"That's professor Quilt and that ladt is professor Majenta", whisphered James.
"Professor Majenta?" asked Rose. 'I've heard about her from my father. People avoid her a lot. Everyone says that she was once assocaited with You-know-who and when she found out that that the death-eaters were going to be defeated, she became a eloped from the Malfoy Mansion and stayed put ot her own hidding place till everything was okay again."
"Really?" asked James startled.
"Maybe", said Rose. "I don't know. Dad just repeated what he heard at the ministry."
"Well, I know one thing", said Albus. "If we don't follow the others fast, we are seriously going to be in big trouble".
Everyone started to go. James said good-bye to the two and joined Emily. Rose and Albus moved on. "Wait!" said Rose all of a sudden. "I've not seen Victoire and Teddy all morning. Where are they?"
Albus and Rose looked around desperately. Rose looked more for the two but not Albus. He was seriously hoping to get to the castle and see for himself what this historic place was like, where once his father killed the trecherous dark wizard whose name was not to be spoken of. But professor Quilt and professor Majenta were really giving them the speed. "Rose, we really should get moving. We'll fall behind. They'll find themselves, they are not newcomers like us."
Rose, giving up hope, followed Albus and the others to the black lake.
The black lake was huge and the dark night seemed to have made the lake even more scarier. Near the coast, there were numerous boats, each of which had a lantern and a stout bearded creature resembling a gnome like creature.
Everyone gathered near the boats. Professor Majenta cleared her throat to gain attention. It worked wonders.
"Listen everyone", she began. "You are all new here. So you won't be accompaning any of the older students back to the castle on the carriages. You will be travelling by these boats here. And as far as disciplines are concerned, you will be informed about the rules and regulations later when we arrive at the castle. Now, please do not waste any time and get in the boats, seven each boat".
Rose and Albus made their ways to a small quirky boat which was already occupied by a blonde haired girl, two husky-voiced boys (talking about the chocolate frogs) and a bulky boy. Rose and Albus stepped in. "One more to go", said the gnome with his weird voice. Many of the boats were already leaving.
"Room for one more?" came a sharp voice.
The boat-ians looked up. It was a jet black-haired boy with a pinkish lush on his face. Anyone would have called him handsome, but they were getting so late that the word was a very tough one to come up to their mouths. "Hurry up!" cried the gnome.
Soon Albus and Rose were crossing the boat. The blonde haired girl was just looking towards the dark front, the bulky boy ws apparently staring at her, the two husky voiced boys were still talking about the chocolate frogs. Somehow the silence felt very awkward. Just then the black-haired boy said, "Aren't you the son of Harry Potter? Brother of James?"
Albus was startled to have been recognised so early. "Yes, I am. Albus Severus Potter."
"Ah, the names of the two most famous Haogwarts legends, is there a reason?"
"Well, not exactly....but........" began Albus but Rose cut him short. Rose was not liking this stranger's sudden rouse of curiousity. "Why do you ask?'
"My father seems to know your", said the boy. "I am Alex, Alex Longbottom, only son of Hogwarts Herbology professor Neville Longbottom and Quibbler editor Luna Lovegood Longbottom."
Rose subsided. Apparently that was not the answer she was hoping for. She had never expected that the boy was the son of a professor. Before coming to the school, her mother had told her how to impress teachers with her unique intelligence and sharp looks. But now......
"Sorry about that," apologized Rose with utter reluctance. She hated apologizing, especially for things she had not done.
"Relax", said Alex. "If you are apologizing for just because I am a professor's son, then its of no use. I don't take it that way".
Rose turned around and soon what a sight she saw!
The tall-steep castle, entirely lit up with candles and light. In the dark sky, it was the only lighted thing that caught people's attention. And such a big one was a massive attention-gainer. The entire piece was craned with beauty and it radiated a warm good glow such as a dimly lited horizoned bulb.
Albus could not wait much longer. He was longing to go in and see the beauty himself. Everyone was staring at it with open mouths. Surely, there was something about the place that was totally unexplained.

Edited by Miley_hp - 16 years ago

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Aishwariya Majumdar(Ashy, ais, ashes of fire)

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Posted: 16 years ago

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Originally posted by: missindia26
Wow that was very mysterious and suspenseful
Already hating Syrine but cant wait to find out more

Great writing update soon 😊

Thanks....I really appreciated that you read.......