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Posted: 14 years ago
Heyoooooooooo guys😉..............Howz you alllllllll.......Hope you are doing good.😃.....
So here is my next update.....I typed it with my eyes half-opened🥱......Hope you all like it......

Don't hesitate to comment....whatever you felt.........😃

Happpyyyyyyyy readingggggggggg
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Part 7

Reaching the haweli, awdesh looks around…Bahuji, comes out…
Without noticing her, awdesh opens the door for Arpitha…Arpitha with a feeling of gratitude and thanks, gets down and remains stunned finding herself in the haweli and not at her home…

Arpitha—"Where am i? I want to go home…"

Awdesh—"Arpitha… …"
Before he could answer her, he looks from the edge of his eye that Bahuji is quite shocked and her eyes are demanding him an answer already…

Awdesh holds arpitha's hand and forcefully walks her to his outhouse…
Arpitha follows him in great confusion…
Arpitha—"Leave me your hurting me…"
Awdesh turns around and finds that he actually has held her hand at the bandaged part and he truly was hurting her…
Awdesh leaves her hand and worry crawls into his eyes…
Arpitha—"Why am I bought here…Please tell me…Who are you…?"
Arpitha knew him as a stranger…a good stranger…His rude manners made her confused…
Awdesh didn't answer…He left her at the outhouse and headed towards the haweli…

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Bahuji—" Chulbul…Who is that girl? Why is she bought here?"

Chulbul—"Ji…..She…….Emmmmmm"

Bahuji—"What are you run out of words…or have you forgotten how to speak…Answer me damm…"

Awdesh comes in hurriedly…
Awdesh—"Bahuji…She is the engineer's daughter…"
Bahuji thinks for a while…
Bahuji—"Oh…now I get it…You kidnapped her and would demand money for an exchange… "
Awdesh stands before her expressionless…Thinks for a moment and decides…
Awdesh—"Yes Bahuji…"

Chulbul understands Awdesh's plan and tries to cover up…

Chulbul—"Yes Bahuji…that engineer has made a lot of money illegally…She is the apple of his eye…He would surely want to rescue her…Right Bhaiyaji…"

Bahuji—"I know…My babuaji will have a reason for what ever he does…"
Bahuji smiles at both of them and goes inside…

Chulbul—"Bhaiyaji…no problem…That engineer will never come and bhabi will always be before your eyes…"

Awdesh (worried)—"Hmm…At least till I finish that pappu and lal Singh…Chulbul…I can't see her worried…Take care of all that she needs…You will be responsible for it…"

Chulbul—"Yes Bhaiyaji…You don't worry about that…"

Chulbul exits……….

Awdesh—"I am sorry Arpitha Ji…I bought in all the trouble and I myself will clear them all…Till then, I am forced to do this…I am sorry…"


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Chulbul comes in to Awdesh's room…

Chulbul—"Bhaiyaji…Bhabi is not eating her dinner…and she is very much worried…"
Awdesh—"Go and get the food…"
Awdesh reaches the outhouse and finds Arpitha moving around in worry…Watching him come in, she stops…

Awdesh—"You…you didn't eat anything…"
Arpitha (stern and determined)—"I won't…set me free…I want to go home…"
Awdesh—"you will have no problem here…You will get all you want…please eat…you look very week…"

Chulbul comes in with a plate filled with food…he hands it over to awdesh and leaves…

Awdesh—"Here…eat a little…You will feel better…"
Arpitha folds her hands and faces away…

Awdesh smiles and comes near her with the plate…

Awdesh—"Potato is my favorite…Its really cooked well…have a look…"

Arpitha could smell the delicious dish…She weakens a bit…but again holds back on her word…

Awdesh comes in front of her…Watching her determined; he picks a piece of the roti and forwards it to her mouth…

Arpitha rudely hits his hand causing the food to fall on the ground…She again turns around facing away from him…

Awdesh smiles and he gets determined too…He again comes in front of her and tries to feed her…

Arpitha gets a little soft and again rejects…Awdesh doesn't lose to here…He again picks up a piece of roti and forwards it to her…

Arpitha this time watches him and the roti held in his hand…Awdesh gestures her to have it…

Her tummy was actually growling…Arpitha hesitatingly opens her mouth and takes in the roti…Awdesh smiles at her…
Arpitha hadn't eaten anything since last night…and he was true…The potato dish tasted yummy…

Awdesh feeds her the entire food…she eats up all the food with great love to it…

Watching her eat happily, he takes a breath of relief…She is very childish…Stubborn, but not for long…You show a little care and love for her, she melts like ice…She is very fragile and the most beautiful…

His thought was interrupted….

Arpitha (food stuck in her throat)—"Ahemm….Ahemm"

Awdesh quickens and hands her the glass of water…

Arpitha (A little better)—"Ahemm…gh..gh…"

Awdesh gently pats on her head, trying to help her…
Arpitha finally gulps in the piece of food stuck in her throat with the water…

Awdesh is still trying to help her…with his hand on her head…

Settling down, Arpitha raised her eye and saw him…his eyes had a similar worry and concern that she saw earlier…earlier when she fainted at the mela…This time, it was crystal clear…

Arpitha—"you still didn't answer my question…?"

Awdesh takes back his hand and prepares to leave…

Arpitha—"I asked you something…Please tell me…"

Awdesh—"Arpitha ji, your safety is at stake…Till I find that every thing is fine, you have to stay here…There is no other option…"
Arpitha—"But why…Who wants to harm me…?"
Awdesh stands silent…

Awdesh(facing Arpitha)—"Please don't ask me any further…but can tell you only one thing, your safety is my primary concern…even a scar to you…I won't forgive myself…"

Arpitha is moved to his words…She stood still like a statue…He cared for her…That feeling gave her tears of joy…

Awdesh left the room, without turning back…

Awdesh—(thinking to himself)"Why Arpitha…in spite of telling myself a thousand times, I still become week before you…You have become something in my life that I can't deny now…But I can't accept that…no…"

So.............like it......Didn't like it..................Anything maybe..............do tell me...........

Haan agar pasand agi ghava tho like wa button press karthey jana....Samajh gayey..........😆😊😉

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Posted: 14 years ago
Hey Sunaha 🤗
I didnt realise tht u've updated ur FF with the last 2 parts. Read them all once agn n they are jst Awesome. Ur getting better with each one. Pat -3 is my favooo😳😳 Loved it. And i also liked the scene where Avi is actually standing n Arpi thiks its her imagination. 😳 😆 😆 So Sweet !!
Ur doing a fabulous job sweetie. Plz carry on n give us more such lovely mesmerising scenes of Avita😳 😳
And i must compliment u fr the OS. While i was watching yesterday's epi, i kept thinking of u. Everything u said matched jst perfectly with the epi.👍🏼 I also said tht in the updates yesterday. Wonderful Imagination 😳 😳
Thanx😃
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Posted: 14 years ago
sunaha i hv to log off now

i hv pressed like wud read and comment later

and i echo nandini words above

ur os scene was shown yday and all were thinking yes we have read this bit
hehe
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Posted: 14 years ago

True CB,

This girl needs applauds. I was like, how cud she imagine everything, put to words n give us bfr the cvs. Bt it was a beautiful scene, wonderfully shot, brilliantly acted. My heart ws filled with emotions, specially when Avi enveloped Arpi in his arms, tight 😳 😳 😳

Edited by _nandini - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
@Nandu and cb di....i myself was shocked yday....
good to hear nandu tat u luv my ff...wil try to give you many more...
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Posted: 14 years ago
wah wah wah sunaha.
kya likhti ho tum maza aa gaya👏
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Posted: 14 years ago
hi suhana
i am read ur ff
you are a great writer pls continue fast
i love to read it 😃
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Posted: 14 years ago
Heyyy Sunaha....

Again an awesome part 👏
Loved the scenes between them....when Avi feeds Arpi 😍

Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease continue super fast 🤗
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Posted: 14 years ago
Hi Suhana, well written come up with part 8 quickly eagerly awaiting.
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Posted: 14 years ago
from your fan no 1 hope you like it or else
don't worry i wont do that i am good girl....so finish it

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