SS: Koi Apna Sa...Chapter 11 Pg-22 updtd - Page 16

Originally posted by: MR21

Kesar dream...ofcourse gulaal hi hogi na...i liked how his dream n her waking him up are happening simultaneously that he is so lost after waking up as he felt he is still dreaming abt their current position...yep Kesarji is all flustered to see her so close😳he is all gone na after seeing her like this so close to him...but he has to feel embarrassed na...gulaal thinking to wake him up maughtyly...she is being so lively na only because of him...she is able to live her life without any issues n sorrow now...but after seeing his reaction she is so shattered na...but she is thinking he is regretting...even he is not happy with the glass piece incident...warna kya kya nahi hojaatha...offo she is now avoiding him n good that he is able to see the not so happy face of hers...he is so lost that he is not getting her attention...he always needs her full attention only on him...i lked kesar n his father convo too...typical father-son convo...Thank you atlast talli asked him...good na that atleast eh know that some thing is wrong with gullu...but loved his reaction for talli words...he can never ever hurt gulaal...n also i liked how he felt bad that may be gullu shared abt her feelings to talli n not him...he is so much possessive na...i wish just as talli said he himself realize it soon...don't worry Ramya he will very soon😊offo he is so restless na when she is not even picking up his calls...ha ha his first question abt why did she not even looked at him properly...but his prediction is correct n i liked how even after gulaal said that she dont want to talk abt that...he still talk abt it n made it clear for her that he will never ever force this relationship on her without her wish...but I loved gullu for admitting that what ever happened is in her wish...this made both of them happy shappy n me too happy shappy...I too am happy shappy with the fact that it made you smile😛

looking forward to read the next chapter now...do update soon...

Originally posted by: kalika.j

@Mini,



kalika

Originally posted by: manzilmukul

Mini First of all my apologies for my SUPER late response..awww no problem Piu😃Hope you understand .But First of all take a BIG JHAPPI 🤗YES!! Although I wanted MORE PAAP!! But the way you wrote the opening dream sequence was beautiful👏Kesar in his blissful sleep dreaming about the beautiful serene place with a cherubic woman with her khule baal..Arey SLEEPING BEAUTY ..Koi tujhe ye bataye ki biwi bagal mein hai and u r dreaming lol😆..That woman has to be none other than Gulaal.😳Bhondu k antennas had yet not started working but they are gonna WORK..That too PRETTY SOONhehehe ya Piu they will work pretty soon...kya karein banda thoda slow hai😆Well well Now the AHEM AHEM moment..I read it so many times...Feeling PAAPI already so m waiting for some more chii😛awww thank you so much.This makes me feel so much better.But Honestly Gulaal's reaction and her hurt is quite relatable too coz Her insecurities are already making her believe that she would be rejected upar se bhondu mal is all in his ajeeb reactions...hahaha ajeeb is right...but I am so happy that you were able to relate to Gulaal's feelings.You have created and portrayed the anxiety and confusion as well sa awkwardness pretty well and finally the phone call which depicted their MOMENT as their MARZI...Finally at least Gulaal considers it to be a TURNING POINT in their relationship..From here where will these two move on..I am all geared up to watch now...Please updated REALLY SOON!! Mini..Loved the update
P.S-Please I am loving your TALLI😆😆me too Piu...I love her a lot😳
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Originally posted by: arti07

mini again a chapii without chii me katti awww katti math hona please...Do read the next chapter I am sure it will make you happy😳okay jokes apart actually i loved the epi love how the things ae wrapping up loved the morning scene kesar u were dreaming ahem ahem about gulaal and she heard chooo chweet and the little blush moment was cute and this moron will never understand sooory who the hell say sorry to his newly weded wife iska kuch nahi ho sakta bechara thoda slow hai...use thoda time do...I am sure his brain will start working properly very soon😆and then gulaal is sulking mode should be breakfast burn kar dena tha and yohhooo kesar noticed it and he is restless and now this lord of fool wanna take advice from the most intellegent girl in the planet the great talli koi aur nahi mila but thank god she is sensible here haan re meri Talli Rani kaafi samajhdaar hai...not like her counterpart from the show...urgghhh 😡and hey bhaggu kesar didnt realize he is in love pakka fool hai he will realize soon enough and then gulaal overlooking him is one thing he cant bear love the direct question he asked and the reply was a suprise package haila kesar ka kya hua hoga he must have fainted i so wanna know whts gonna happen after this tiny confession plz bring the chappi soon

arre Kesarji hai na woh saare matters ko thoda complicate karne mein vishwaas karte hain.So instead of fainting or celebrating the chotu confession he will try something else hehehe but I hope you will like the result😳

and not to forgot awesome chapii

Minnuuu 🤗.. barson baad I am here😳.. I so missed this forum and the bond over here.. the chapter is superb .. loved it a lot.. esp the telephonic convo of Gulsar towards the end.👏. it was really surprising for Gulaal to reveal her mind there.. eagerly waiting for the next update.. Tuesday... zara jaldi aajaanaaa

Originally posted by: enchanted23

Ok I have been apologising on all threads I guess, I owe you one as well, Sorry for my delayed comments,I have been bit tied up lately'

Aditi phir se sorry😡...I will pretend that I did not read the above statement...ok😆

The starting of the chapter was so beautifully penned down, loved how you are trying to make him realize what he is not quite able to fathom in his awake state his growing attractions towards his new wife and then finally when he does wake up he is not able to differentiate between his dream and reality'..wow awesomely written'.Thank you so much.By now you must have guessed I love my dream sequences 😆I try to put them in all my stories😳

And that withdrawal though sudden is not w/o reason, he still has to come to terms with the fact that she had to pay the price for his mistake, his mistake of trusting Dushyant, his mistake of leaving her alone even momentarily, his mistake of breaking the promise made to her on pretext of intoxication and his acknowledgment of his father's words of wisdom'so no I don't blame him cause he still has to realize his love for her, all consuming, encompassing love that will rise beyond these promises, hesitations, anxiety, awkwardness, reluctance and Gulaal though bit disappointed will have to accept and understand where this stems from'the disillusion that she feels actually has lot to do with her expectations, though not wrong she needs to be the first one to make that move here, as he already did the day he got married to her and now the journey needs to begin from her side first those first few steps is all he needs, to reciprocate, to gain that confidence, to believe n his dreams, to acknowledge his love for her'..awww you have written it down so beautifully and I hope you get to read this in the next chapter because this is what it is all about in the next one.I don't know how you read my mind but Gulaal indeed will take the first step.Hopefully you will like it😊

I loved the father, son eye convo,a stern look and immediate acknowldement of mistake and promise to make amends that was nicely done,also the realization that something was not right in the way she looed at him,he is already able to read her mind all he needs is that lil push and the realization of what she means to him will dawn soon after'yes exactly completely agree about that little push😳

I loved making up over the phone and his blurting of what was in his mind,he just cannot coverup what's disturbing him can he? Typical Kesar..chalo now that they both have acknowledged what happened the night before was not just reaction to alcohol,I am looking forward to some paasionate romance between the two'hmmm passionate ka toh patha nahi but I have tried to put in some romance.I will wait for your comments on that😳

Lovely update Mini,I hope you can bring the next chapter pretty soon partner'big hug for this lovely update'.🤗

Originally posted by: nneeiill

hi mini..

finally read the chappi

andi absolutely loved it... awww Saamya thank you so much😊

i love how u describe the scene from both kesar and gulaal's pov..i think i have said this earlier too.. yes I think you have

i felt so bad for gulaal..aww she thought kesar rejected her...ye gullu bhi na..she has no clue how much fida apna kesar ji is already... yes bechari but hopefully things will change in the next chapter

loved the tension which was created coz of unspoken words and unexpressed love...and

itni samajdhaar talli is such mai shocker but am loving her..how she is worried about her didi and actually decides to question kesar about it...it was a good scene again

arre show waali Talli bhi samajhdaar hothi if only Gullu and Sudhi had not tried to brainwash her at every given chance😡 awww Thank you...I am so happy you liked it.I was not very sure if everyone would like it or not.

phone convo was so cute..hahah kesar ji apne dil ki baat yuhi bol diya karo...gulaal toh bolne se rahi...anyways misunderstandings are cleared so yay for that

hmmm don't be so sure about the misunderstandings clearing up bit Saamya...don't forget we are talking about the duffer couple na but hopefully they will sort it out😳

ab jaldi lao next chappi pls

Originally posted by: without-fathom

And the dilemmas set in 😆 It's funny how many pieces of love stories - books, movies, narratives, et al - one grows up being exposed to, how many versions of it, and how pedantic one eventually begins to think of oneself over the subject - yet when it truly comes to cause, for real, the fundamental crisis remains unchanged. Loves me... loves me not! 😆

so true...the cause is as simple as that but it creates havoc in a person's life na😆

Doubt just knows how to be as persistent as hope! I'm glad Kesar managed to blurt potential misunderstanding clearing explanation, even without knowing how and why, like most boys do 😆 For all the labels of "chatting" that women acquire, the real talking matters, are only ever verbally addressed by the boys 😆 Girls are far too much, far too often the Galool kind 😆

sachiii Guys never complicate things...they never overthink.It's always us girls who do that and yes I too belong to the Galool variety😆

bechara Kesar he didn't even realize what was happening na but now in the next chapter it's his turn to twist things up for a change...hopefully it will be convinving.

The bit with Talli was cute! And Kesar coming all my fantasy cricket team just scored a ton happy to the breakfast table soon realizes today may not be the sunniest morning of all times since Adam after all 😆

hahaha Jzee I loved reading this...too funny😆

I just found myself chuckling, a lot, throughout the chapter. Makes me think what kind of a sadist I am, but confusions on the making of a love story... are just fun to read 😆

hehehe what can I say yaar I too love to write this emotionally complicated stuff so what does that say about me?

Thanks for the update Mini, and sorry for the delay as always - will look forward to the next =))

Originally posted by: alanta

Minnuuu 🤗.. Roshni🤗sachiii it has been a long time.I am so happy to see you here😃barson baad I am here😳.. I so missed this forum and the bond over here.. the chapter is superb .. loved it a lot.. esp the telephonic convo of Gulsar towards the end.👏. it was really surprising for Gulaal to reveal her mind there.. eagerly waiting for the next update.. Tuesday... zara jaldi aajaanaaa