What hurts the most. [[One-Shot.]]

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Gulaal: 19 years old.
Kesar: 20 years old.
Talli: 19 years old.
Gulaals father: 46 years old.
I never re-read something. So sorry for the errors.

Gulaal's POV:


3:19am. Lying fully awake on my bathroom floor. Tears falling out as if my eye lids were the shutters trapping the tears to breathe as if they were a living thing. I lent against the wall bringing my legs to my chest. My hands were the locks of the gate around my knees. The salt liquid keeps on flowing and flowing. The distance between my mother and I is too far away. She left me to rot in hell whilst she is up in heaven. The pain she has left me is more than unbearable. I slam the door of the mini cabinet and shuffle my hands around seeking for a sharp object. With bearly having clear vision I felt an Gillette Venus which I threw across the room hoping for the blade to fall out. I crawled towards the blade which fell into the bath tub. I grabbed an face towel on the way back to when I was placed before. I positioned the blade parallel to my wrist right after I stuffed the towel in my mouth. I looked down at the deep cut, with in seconds I was dabing the cut down with the towel that was 1st in my mouth. Whilst weeping I begged for the bleeding to stop, as soon as it did I rushed towards the 1st aid kit and aided myself.

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"Hey, Gulaal! Tum kaisi ho?" My best friend Kesar said to me with a warm smile on his face. I looked deep into him eyes and followed then as he sat besides me on the bench. I replied with the fakest smile on my face putting amounts of effort into making it seem believable "Hey". Kesar put his hand in his poket to reach out for some gum. He took the strip out and rolled it and then placed it into him mouth and asked "Loner, why are you sitting by yourself?" and then laughed. Because Kesar! I don't feel like socialising. Can you please go away? Is what I really wanted to say but I replied with "Talli is coming any minute" Kesar placed his left hand on my shoulder and shock me, "I swear Gulaal! Talli is never going to leave you. Why do you keep hanging around with her" I knew Kesauda was joking so I just laughed appreciating his humour at this moment of time. Talli came and said "Fine, if you're going to be mean like that Im not going to give you this box of fries I brought for my dear friends" She laughed and sat besides me aswell. She took out her burger and started eating it. I envied the fact that she awalys had a big apatite but she never gained weight.

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I stepped into my house to find my father staring at my with blood shot eyes. He walked towards me whilst he clenched his huge fist. The expressions on this guys face were indescribable "Tum ek ghanta late ho". I replied with nothing but terror in my eyes"M..mein..mein Kesar aur Talli ke sath thi" I held onto my bag really tightly "Mujhe maaf kar do papa" I see this old man fake laughing as he said "Maaf? HAHAA. Maaf?! You think I am going to forgive you Gulaal?" He came up close to me letting his drunken breath on me. You tugged my hair and within a second had full control of me. "Why do you think I gave you a phone? Ek phone bhi nai kar sakti" I gasped with nothing to say. My whole body was numb. He let his hands free causing me to fall back, he grabbed my neck and slapped me round the face.


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"Ha bolo Gulaal" He was on the other end of the line. "K..kesar, ek favour karoge mere liye" I whispered trying not to cry . "Haa, Gulaal. Why not? Tell me" He genuinely replied. I continued to whisper and said "Mein tumhe- can I spend the night at your place tonight" He excitedly said "SUREEE" I hung up.


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"Gulaal, you don't have to sleep on the floor. You know that right?" Kesar said shyly fixing his kurto. I smiled at how sweet Kesar is and said "No, I dont mind sleeping on the floow" Kesar ran and jumped on his bed "The bed is big enough for two people, you know that right?" He said that with a big cocky smile whilst patting where there is some room. I rolled my eyes in defeat and jumped in bed with him, I faced him and said "Night Kesar" Kesar and I just laid besides eachother in silence and Kesar broke the silence. "Gulaal" he said in a serious tone. "Mhhmm" I replied. Kesar brought his hand up to my cheek and kissed me on my forehead and then looked me in the eyes and said "Good night" with the biggest smile on him face.

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I opened my eyes to find my father beating Kesar up. I rushed over to where they were but as I got closer my father felt the breeze of me coming towards me. I rushed towards me and slammed me against the bed. I was used to the pain so I make a fast recovery. I looked towards Kesar. He was unconscious. Yet the idiot was still beating him up. I thought to myself what'd he do ever do? I ran up to Kesar and guarded him. I took all the beating that were meant to be for Kesar because of me. He didn't deserve any of it.

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"Excuse me, are you here for Kesar?" I looked at the Doctor and he replied saying "Sorry for the loss, we couldn't save him".

Okay, so basically I thought I was getting somewhere with this story but I forgot
what I was going to write, so this is what I came up with at the end.
I know it's not even that great and I should jus stick to
VM's but yeah..
Please like and comment.

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Nirmohi..😲that was really interesting and intriguing.⭐️.👏why confused..OMG ise end kyun kiya..I like your style in VMmaking⭐️..never saw you writing more than one liners😆.but OMG that was brilliant👏.that was very interesting.👏..I wish..you pls continue this may be an FF are kesu ko tune kyun maar diya re...

pls continue na😳

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: manzilmukul

Nirmohi..😲that was really interesting and intriguing.⭐️.👏why confused..OMG ise end kyun kiya..I like your style in VMmaking⭐️..never saw you writing more than one liners😆.but OMG that was brilliant👏.that was very interesting.👏..I wish..you pls continue this may be an FF are kesu ko tune kyun maar diya re...

pls continue na😳



Thanks a lot Piyu! :') I just wanted to try something out. :P Your comment is wow! 😳 Hahaha, well I've killed Kesar off so I can't continue this. ROTF. I'll let it continue to be an one shot ;) Thank again...! 😛
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: arti07

nirmohi is it a ff ?????



...it's an one shot, Arti :P It means its an stand-alone story created as a single issue...in this case post. ahaha. Allow competing with you. 😆
Edited by Gulaalfreak - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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nirmohi . that was so cool👏, never thought u could write so well.
but why did u kill kesar for😭. kya sad ending thaa.
get kesar back to life and please continue😳.
and if that was a one shot then please make more one shot's😆.
btw, why such a sad dp 😊
Edited by rimjhim1 - 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: Gulaalfreak



Thanks a lot Piyu! :') I just wanted to try something out. :P Your comment is wow! 😳 Hahaha, well I've killed Kesar off so I can't continue this. ROTF. I'll let it continue to be an one shot ;) Thank again...! 😛

Oye yaar take kekta maiyya avatar...😉get it...Now you bring back kesar...I mean like..The doc was confused and gave some wrong information..about some other patient...I request ..u plscontinue👏 ..😳na..see I chewed up arti 's brains when she decided to axe her FF ...Filled her thread with so many ghatiya shayari.🤢..that she had to open a new thread...Do you want me to do the same with you😆...Beware now🤣

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Posted: 14 years ago
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too painful

but i loved ur way of writing

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: rimjhim1

nirmohi . that was so cool👏, never thought u could write so well.

but why did u kill kesar for😭. kya sad ending thaa.
get kesar back to life and please continue😳.
and if that was a one shot then please make more one shot's😆.
btw, why such a sad dp 😊



Thank you Rimjhim! =D and now you know im amazing. :'] I can do anything. 😳 lmfao. okay. OTT there. I killed him off because the tone of the One Shot is meant to be sad and depressing. And to make it even more ":O" I killed him off. ahaha. Awww, the love for Kesar is amazing to see. How am I meant to bring him back in a one shot? part 1 and then 2? :S maybe. :P ahhaa. I don't want it to be a typical indian soap. Ohhh he comes back alive. and everyone rolls their eyes. ;)

Oh and do you like my dp now? ;)
Edited by Gulaalfreak - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: manzilmukul

Oye yaar take kekta maiyya avatar...😉get it...Now you bring back kesar...I mean like..The doc was confused and gave some wrong information..about some other patient...I request ..u plscontinue👏 ..😳na..see I chewed up arti 's brains when she decided to axe her FF ...Filled her thread with so many ghatiya shayari.🤢..that she had to open a new thread...Do you want me to do the same with you😆...Beware now🤣



Oiii, actually..I don't mind. I hardly get comments anyway. Muahahha. 🤣



Edited by Gulaalfreak - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: nneeiill

too painful

but i loved ur way of writing




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