Enchantress [Completed!] - Page 30

Originally posted by: LovelyUmang5

ab itna accha buildup diya toh expectations toh hongi na..
plus main expectations unhi se rakhti hoon jo expectations pe khade utre..

Originally posted by: Flame_of_Forest

Part 5

scary and mystery quotient increased..
His GF did not know, or may be pretended to not know what happened in the restaurant..she did not seem to have affected much for his injuries.
He knew the kid's name.
and then what was that..Is he safe..another vision or something happening in real, or just his mental state of emotions..of fear and helplessness...of being tied up and released..of feeling light as if all the burden is taken out from his heart..

PS - one or two places it is first person reference, you may want to change it to third person reference.


and it is going great, so keep them coming !!!

Originally posted by: LovelyUmang5

Originally posted by: ardentfitzcy

Hey Spoorthi,

You know what I had read your comment on You are my Home about not having written in along time now and was trying to return to writing. Having found myself at that place quite a many times, I knew where you were coming from. I had thought I would tell you to write anything. A shot, a drabble, anything that to break the writing celibacy and put your creativity to some use but then it slipped my mind.

So I was really happy when I saw you posting something new.

And before I forget, I have read your one shot, Persuasion. The thread is closed so expressing my feelings here.

What a beautiful piece, it is, Spoorthi. The writing is so potent, it kind of sucks you in. And then when you read the lyrics of the song , you think that the song was especially written for it.

You've expressed Geet's pain but throughout there's this powerful reverberation of Maan's silence.

I was thinking ki yeh ladki chupa rustam hai she writes so well.

Mann khush ho gaya tha yaar, woh padh ke.

Now to this story, finally got around to reading the first part and it has definitely piqued my curiosity.

okay first let me tell you one thing I watch Korean dramas where there are a lot of drams based where the protagonists can see the dead and communicate with them. If you're free and want to give it a try, do watch Master's Sun. It's comedy, horror, romance, the three genres combined.

So I was saying, that because I have watched so many dramas, I was more excited to see that apna Maan bhi bhoot dekh sakta hai.

But on a serious note there's a lot of mental pressure and harassment that he must be dealing with, not to forget the social isolation. Nobody getting you, believing you.

It is mentioned it started in childhood so yeah point noted. Will wait to make more observations. But then a child facing such things whether it's his imagination or actually be can see the dead, my heart goes out for him.

I'm wondering if he also can't sleep well because of all of this?

Then there's the sour relationship with his father. Didn't get that part. Is it because he's not handling the family business?

There's a girlfriend in the picture too. Great. Six months anniversary..hmm. Do people actually count the days and note the dates when they met and all that. Yaar, humko toh kuch bhi yaad nhi rehta.😆

Okay, so might have missed points here, will add later.

The car and the inevitable accident it was headed towards. That part. Strange it was that he didn't take any effort to help or prevent it.

Spoorthi, you have grabbed my interest and now i am coming back to know more. That's why I love your writing and stories you don't pick up the easy way and the tried formulas. You are always keen on trying different themes bringing adding flavour to our Maaneet with that out of box thinking of yours.

Thanks for writing and sharing this with us.

Love ya.

Originally posted by: Nav2010

Very scary and interesting

Originally posted by: Keepdreaming

first time seeing his reaction to those dead ghost lol ghost dead hi hota hai anyways ...
actually I feel sad for his condition first seeing people dying then totally helpless to save ..its painful
his GF actually behaving like some alien not ghost I mean not care for his injuries didn't expect that ( hope not because of our previous sweet words against You)

Originally posted by: Keepdreaming

and yup his GF still mystery to me
kya cheese hai woh
tell you something when she saying those sweet love words don't know why I laughed on it
ghost ne toh pyaar pe phd kiya hua hai