With This Taveez (1) .. MG New * new thd link p1 - Page 68

Originally posted by: watergirl68in

Hi

Thank you for the pm. I finally managed to read it today.

Right at the start you said you want to publish your work, if that's your plan, then I hope you will take in my nattering in the right spirit :)
So my 2 bits..You need to proof read before posting. Mistakes be it spelling or gramatic, however minor its jarring when one reads.

I will be re-reading the story after few more updates, then I will be able to comment on your story telling technic. Till then I will refrain from technical comment.

As for this update it was a fun read.

Regards
Watergirl

thanks
i will be more careful
this is not the story i would publish if i was so inclined
i have written an ff over a 1000 pages called the locket
that would be the only thing i would publish
perhaps you have me confused with someone else?

Originally posted by: dqno1

not so good
still hacking with coughs and feverish

Originally posted by: dqno1

thanks
i will be more careful
this is not the story i would publish if i was so inclined
i have written an ff over a 1000 pages called the locket
that would be the only thing i would publish
perhaps you have me confused with someone else?

Originally posted by: dqno1

update is ready but just too tired to do pm etc

Thanks for the likes and comments 😃

you outdid yourselves 👏

Hello 😊

Just read in above comments that you aren't keeping well. Take care Avi and hope you start feeling better soon 😊

Love you Avi.. Jaldi se theek hojao shabash 😃
Get well soon darling 😉

Part 3 was good!!
I guessed I have judged kiaran tooo bad in earlier parts! She really wants maan's happiness! That's sweet of her!
Raj is such an amazing being!
Poor Geet! She actually felt unwelcomed! Maan needs make up a lot to her!!
There chays were good! Actually cute!
Waiting for nxt update
Plz cont soon!
Tc!!

Lovely update, maan teasing geet is so funny and unlike he bring harsh to geet and blaming her here he loves to trouble her. Will geet agree to stay in outhouse and will she joins maan at work waiting to read more