Love n Uljhan (Part#7, pg.38) updated! 19/3

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spoorthi

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Posted: 9 years ago

#81

Originally posted by: Flame_of_Forest

Yes, I could feel it for Maan's emotions,
what I meant was story has something more, deep..may be because the context is different, but yes the feelings are same.
I have updated my comment on page 8 :)

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spoorthi

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Posted: 9 years ago

#82

Originally posted by: Flame_of_Forest
this is a beautiful update..
Maan is completely transformed over the years...from the drunken state and a mess of life into a disciplined and meaningful one.

now I get it when you said about the 'she taught him'...
she has greatly impacted him to be a better person and to live a better life...

sometimes some people come and touch one's life to change it.
she is that person for him.
probably he had been doing all the things as she wanted him to do, it is for her.

back then in his first meeting with her, he could make out the difference of attitude between Meenal and the women, his memsahib..Meenal's accusation angered him, not for himself though the accusation was about him too, but he felt it for her.

it is really getting interesting about the bond between the two...something which cannot be precisely named..there is respect, there is love..there is a boundary.

and now in the present, after he has achieved something in life, a job, a home, he is searching her..there is desperation and vulnerability in his request to Kailash.
he is trying to compose himself with the hope of meeting her again..
but where is she now..he said he is guilty about something.

the whole marriage is giving a feeling of kind of fiasco..but she still stuck to it.

and after YMH, here comes the punching lines again, 'a passionate traveler...' superb!
keep them coming..

PS - Edited again after the song addition..;)

the guilt part OMG u noticed
i'm sure i would be murdered when we reach that update🤢

nervous as hell to post the next part😳

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spoorthi

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Posted: 9 years ago

#83

Originally posted by: Flame_of_Forest
waiting..

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but i'm reading!!😛

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Flame_of_Forest

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Posted: 9 years ago

#84

Originally posted by: sporthy_smile28

😃

but i'm reading!!😛

me reading and waiting..😆

when is the next turn for writing 😛

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spoorthi

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Posted: 9 years ago

#85

Originally posted by: Flame_of_Forest

me reading and waiting..😆

when is the next turn for writing 😛

maybe tonight
if the story in my hand turns boring then😉

2 teen updates tho line me aa hi jayenge!😎

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Flame_of_Forest

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Posted: 9 years ago

#86

Originally posted by: sporthy_smile28

maybe tonight
if the story in my hand turns boring then😉

2 teen updates tho line me aa hi jayenge!😎

😆

I am going to read one story which you suggested...😊

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sanum23

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Posted: 9 years ago

#87

i m confused maan now left his past habits

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979861

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Posted: 9 years ago

#88

Hey I like this story so u better update it fast.
The first chapter was intriguing.
It raises so many questions.
The young Khurana boy, he has a bad reputation. Then there is this memsahaab who is kind enough to take a stranger inside her house.
I dont blame Radha for being cautious. Nowadays, we cannot trust others easily.
But then sometimes a small kindness might become a life changing moment for some.
I dont know if you've been told this or not but your writing carries with itself a unique freshness and simplicity. I like the plots you choose. Different from the mainstream ideas. I am looking forward to the story. :)
With warm regards
Fitzcy

Edited by ardentfitzcy - 9 years ago

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979861

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Posted: 9 years ago

#89

Hey
the first chapter was interesting. It had me scrolling down and wanting to keep reading. I see a complicated relationship in the future.
The family is greedy. Wants money n more money. The girl despite being a modern woman of 21st century, yet she has to go with the wedding inspite of knowing that the dowry demand would leave a large dent on her family bank account.
Inspite of all desh badh rha hai, we cannot change systems like dowry. Trust me I have seen the parents of highly educated girls giving dowry. Having spent so much money on education...lets not get diverted.
Menal- hypocrite, charcterless woman. Thats my initial judgement.
Maan - well he's got attitude. And the circumstances have improved hopefully. Is the woman behind the improvement or success of this man is Our own memsaheb.
Where is the sober husband of our memsahib? Doesn't look like he is around much? Remains out due to job?
I want to read more.

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979861

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Posted: 9 years ago

#90

This is such a beautiful beautiful story. Please go on writing.
I like the stories where a man rises from misery/poverty and attains success. Even if it takes amny falls to actually rise.
Maan has transformed.But there is something in the past that has him chained- the kind Memsahib n also something more that we are yet to witness.
And before I forget I loved that dialogue home one. Bang on it was.
Menal, well lets not talk about her. She has already gotten on my nerves. And she better stays away for me. Or I will slay her.And I am very much sure she is going to give me plenty of reasons to kill her.
Badi aayi gehne maangne wali bhaiyaa se chal bhaag yahaan se :D :D
I am loving it.
Keep up the good work

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