New SS: HAUNTED LOVE; Chap 4 on pg 24;(09/10) - Page 10

Uhh me faint ...thud ..
Ayush Maaneet ki life me hamesha ke liye hoga .. nahi ...
I felt whole Geet's visiting into Hosiyaarpur through Wall was like Fun2shh movie ..
But the whole story is different ..
Babaji ..
Geet didn't called her parents that Phone call and her parents anger all was planned by Those souls to trap Geet..
and if She didn't left that day in His car ... without telling Ayush ...
he might have killed her as well ...
Babaji I am scared of all this now...
how Maaneet will defeat Ayush ...
waiting for next part...

omg! This part was awesome n shocking. Geet married ayush who was dead 5 yrs ago, means she married his ghost..

Prologue
A very intriguing concept!
I have always wanted to read a haunted passionate story of Maaneet.
Geet is with a psychiatrist Neil discussing her nightmares about her dead first husband!!
She is participating in the discussion for the sake of her husband Maan wjho loves her a lot and cannot see her sufering!!

The charactersketch
Built furthur anticipation about the story about a Maan who has gone through a bad first marriage and now madly loves Geet after being apprehensive initially.
And a Geet whose first true love was her dead husband Ayush but now she loves Maan.
And AyushMaan who is a mystery, an enigma- loves Geet in a very overpossessive manner.

This gave me the impression of Ayush being some sort of abusive husband ( My thoughts after reading only the ch sketch)

Chapter 1
Geet is caught up in a chilling nightmare trying to escape a certain place with some boundary and the clutches of her dead husband. He tells her that this time he would take her away forever!!
Maan rushes to Geet, hearing her screams in the throes of a nightmare. He is tormented at his wife's sufferings and there is a lingering lament in him for being ignorant towards her during the initial days of marriage. But now he truly m loves her and wants her free of her internal burden.

During the session with the psychiatrist, Geet wants Maan to be present with her!
She regards her days with Ayush as the most beautiful moments of her life and Maan feels sad and jealous but is ready to bear anything for her sake.

The story is picking pace in a thrilling manner.

Chapter 2
Freaking Fantabulous!!
You are absolutely brilliant in building suspense.
Initially I was not interested in the idea of somr Ayush, but this chapter completely changed my perspective!
Right from the beggining of the chapter, Ayush had my full attention. Geet visits her estranged grandparents and falls in love with the rich and handsome, rock solid, tai chi performing Ayushmaan in a Mills and Boon-ish manner.
Every meeting with Ayush lights her aflame. He is passionate, aggressive and soon Geet marries him without listening to her parents. His declaration before marriage was chilling and he had staked his claim over her.

Meanwhile Maan is feeling upset and finds Ayush lucky of having her love even after being dead.
He thinks back of his first marriage to Pari, its materialistc nature and emptyness. With these few lines about Maan, you were equally able to shift back Maan in highlight and maje us feel sad for him. Especially him finding Atush lucky for having Geet's love. Lovely demarcation of characters.

You have given the elusive Mr. AyushMaan's description in such a manner that I cannot help but imagine him as GC, the early raw and angry Maan of Hoshiarpur days.
While even for Maan, I am imagining GC, the Maan of Ghsp after marriage, completely besotted and calm and caring.
The two conflicting facets!

Do not confuse me dear. Both are kinda equal in my eyes now. Ayush being the brewing storm in a raging ocean of passionate love while Maan being the tranquill riverbed where one can drown her miseries and envelop herself in his soothing love.

Later Geet discovers the entire thing as something really unimaginable.
Everyone in the village has died 5 years ago including Ayush and her grandparentss.
Was Ayush a figment of Geet's imaginarion??
Or was he a ghost, a restless soul in search of something??

Now presuming that Ayush did exist, it would be exciting to see these two clash for love!!
Brilliant storyline. Eagerly waiting for the next part!!

Awesome story line n updates
Each update has suspense n twists which makes me so excited to read more...ayush is dead already but how come she called her parents from dead village n her parents didn't know about village history n all r dead etc
There is sooo much to reavel...

so all this is ghost thing
and ayush is still following him

Sorry for late reply dear

I am scared to death now after reading this

That village is set on fire and all died 5 yrs ago

How her grand parents let her lively daughter marry to ghost i mean soul

My head is spinning after i read that

I would have terrified to death if i will be in geet position

That's why Ayush dint allowed her to go out

Thanks for PM dear