Hi Osheen,
I find it a lil odd to introduce myself so late into the course of your story but I didn't want to let go of this chance to write my thoughts out to you
So here I am, Mishti. I am an avid reader on IF and I have been a fan of both your current works.
There is so much that I can say but I'm not quite sure how to begin..so lets start at the very beginning
Yeh dard, yeh aansu,
Dil ki chubhan
Sab reh gai ansuni
Mai roi toot ke, tu sun na saka
Tere dil me tha kya wo keh bhi na saka ~Geet
Chaha nai maine kuch, par dard-e-jigar mila mujhe
Teri bhi kya khata thi jo tujhse bhi juda na raha yeh
Na kaha maine kuch ke lafzo ka aasra na tha
Aur tu apne hi gam me bolke bhi bezuba reh gaya. ~Maan
This is such a beautiful prose to mark the beginning of your story !! And what I have just noted is that it has both Maan and Geet's perspective in there.
Bezuba for me is one of the few ffs where words form expressions oof emotions without really using them as expressions!! ( I do think a lil on the deep side ) but what I meant is that in actual sense Geet is bezuba so her every action you described were expressive words that she signed.. like just a flicker of her eyes expressed her words.
But in real essence Maan is the real Bezuba whose actions and words never really tangibly expressed much to anyone.. Even his words of remorse never really expressed how torturously he has been living through this betrayal. And this helplessness is really what drove him to seek her safety first and her liberal expressions gave her the will power to seek for his love.
But truly the real essence of bezuba lies in your effortless writing... you remind me of Muskaan in a lot of ways..its like the progression of a story or sometimes the turns in character portrayal have such sharp edges so accurately written that it takes just a few words to get gist of the plot. A prime example is the prelude you wrote at the beginning and what I mentioned above.'
I am feeling quite embarrassed to write after so many chapters have gone by but I'm unashamedly looking forward to the climax ahead.
Hoping to stay on for the rest of this ff and follow your other penmanship.
Mishti
1.2k