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Susegad

@Susegad

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#31

I did no 1...

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What!!!!!

I meant comment.

I updated my comment and I am number 1🤣

Edited by Susegad - 11 years ago

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mhappy

@mhappy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#32

She was not feeling good

Her two months old nephew smiled at her

she looked into his eyes

she did not realize

she was smiling back at him

😃

this os

sweet and simple

no details of twists and turns

no web of words

so mundane yet so deep

just like a kid

wont speak any word

but will take away all your pain

👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

supeb writing

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snehapriya

@snehapriya

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#33

Amazing one.
Totally practical.
How arranged marriage start, the sweet part of marriage, changing year and views, how they drift apart, still miss each other.
Beautifully written.

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APARNA TAMBE

@aparna3011

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#34

beautiful os

how many difference may be there in both but not able to live without other

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Madhuri

@Madhuri53

Stunner

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#35

beautiul os...very well written...we should always give a chance to each other to express our views..and not destroy with misunderstandings and small small issues..

loved the happy end

happy birthday meenu

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DancinFireflies

@DancinFireflies

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Posted: 11 years ago

#36

mh-hmm.. well well, that was something. You know the poignancy which is characteristic of old melodies, this piece was somewhat like an old song. Simple, but deep. I can say I would liked more description, perhaps a detailed you-know-what scene.. since m officially legal now. it was a sweet, simple, easy on the eyes read.

Thing was, you wanted me to be honest.. so i will be painfully blunt. I would have liked it better had I gotten a chance to get inside their heads. you know, to me, stories are like canvasses.. you see.. this canvas had a beautiful sketch in black and white, but lacking in color. N i do love colors. Personally, I would have liked to see them fall in love and go through all of those silly-not-so-silly motions. i would have liked to know why they fought. It would have made them more real in my mind and I would have hungered for their HEA. Here it was over for me, about as soon as it began. You know what, i would have liked to read more.

PS: would u kick me if i thank you?

PPS: lubooo

Edited by DancinFireflies - 11 years ago