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Posted: 11 years ago
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It was nice n emotional part!
Waiting for the next!
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Posted: 11 years ago
#12
first thanks for a long part
it was an emotional update
Aarush is a kid but still he understands his mother's pain
OMG maaneet have or had a daughter too where is she and what about nandini it hurts them
aww the proposal was so cute love it
the way u write it feels real and u express all the emotions very beautifully
I just love them
nd my most favorite line of the update is "No matter in how many pieces you are split in, I'll be always there to glue you back!" how true nd sweet it was just love it
waiting for next one😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Chapter 3(A): A kiss in the moonlight.

"But it's already so late, Maan," she griped to his successive ventures of dining out. "Geet," Maan whispered encasing her palm in his, "You haven't even had a proper dinner. No more ruckus; we are going out and that's my closing word."
Geet took the weight off her feet and lounged on the bed, penciling in loops on the sapphire bed-sheet, her gaze capsized on the large blue expanse and spoke in the most handpicked style doable, "Fine, but don't have the nerves to complain that I take too much time to prime myself." He eyeballed her, seeming bamboozled, a scoffing sneer lop-stuck on his face, "Who the hell is getting ready? We are having dinner in this attire only." Geet sent a fleeting look down her and gawked at him, the wind taken out of her sails. She was garbed in a beige nightshirt and bell-bottoms. As the matter lapsed down, she looked up to him, appalled, "Dining in a restaurant in pyjamas? Are you out of your wits,
Maan?" He grinned at her retort; lest, he had anticipated worse of her. Bobbling his head positively, he walked out of the room, before muttering, "Have a look on my son and enlighten him that his parents are going out for a starry-eyed dinner, in pyjamas..."
"Right," Geet shrieked before flinging the cushion on
Maan, which luckily -for Maan- hit the doorframe. "Ha! You missed the target!" Maan jested back, bringing in a glower from Geet.
Descending the stairway, he budged into the kitchen, walking towards the sideboard. Opening its undersized door, he peeked in, seeking out a huge bowl, fenced in two gigantic lunchboxes. Fishing it out, he attempted to unbolt the burly bowl, with it doing so, but together with
Maan being flexibly directed on the floor. "Ouch," he carped, his hands robotically massaging his knee, alleviating away the temporary twinge. "This dinner appears to be pricey," he gagged.
Watchfully taking of the lid of the pot, he aimed at flawlessly carrying out things, this time. Drawing on a slivery slotted spoon, he crammed the gigantic bowl with a lukewarm stew of Ratatouille and cautiously locked it up with its hinged cover. He glanced at the wooden plate rack, on the extreme end of the marble-table; the plates stood coyly in their unruffled positions only to be perturbed by the removal of two of their followers. "Two?"
Maan speculated, "One will be ideal, as mom used to say, by eating in the same platter, love nurtures... Err... It must come off." Keeping back the slotted spoon in the utensil crock, he inched his way to the car, shelving the bolted bowl in the boot and hurried inside. "Geet," he voiced out, "I'm calling Arush's babysitter." Down-hilling the stairs, Geet let out a startled huff before adding in a muddled tone, "Babysitter? When did we take one on? I can't recall, when...What are you speaking Maan?" Maan sighed, overlooking Geet's words and said, "I am giving a bell to Nandini." Geet walloped her feet down the lingering steps and emerged, snappishly in front of him, "Nandini? Babysi... She's not Arush's babysitter! You... Fine! I am waiting in the car," she uttered hurriedly, receiving Maan's glower.
Easing himself into the driving seat,
Maan turned the key. The engine came to life immediately and in next to no time they were on the boulevard. Maan lobbed away apologetic looks to Geet which were adroitly disregarded by the receiver. The drive was convoyed by an eerie silence and frequent sighs. Geet kaput the hush, "Where are we heading to?" Serenely, Maan replied, "To having diner." Geet puffed out a lungful of air, and looked away, crossly. The car was brought to a standstill and Maan ordered tenderly, "Ferme tes yeux; C'est une surprise." (Close your eyes; it's a surprise.) "Ah bein oui! It has all been a surprise from the commencement. Diner in a nightdress..." a sarcastic reply bounced off to which Maan smirked.
Alighting the car,
Geet was dazed. She sensed herself moseying on a sheet of tiny pellets of sugar being pressed against her skin. Opening her eyes, she was bewildered at the sight. She looked back at a smiling Maan and immediately flip-sided her steps back to him, in his arms. "Thank you," she whispered, recalling the memoirs of them, a year ago. It was the same beach, where they had rendered themselves for their first rendezvous. She dipped her toes into the frothy, icy water and instantly felt a chill up her spine at the cold temperature of the weak little waves, her hand padlocked in Maan's. Digging her feet into the viscous wet sand, her wriggling toes occasionally stubbing a pebble painfully, she watched the damp sand concealing her feet, moving in time with her toes, hidden by the sludgy mud-like substance. She drew her feet slowly from the gooey sand, hearing a loud, squishy noise as her newly grainy feet emerged.
Ecstatic, she glimpsed at
Maan's beaming face eyeballing him a thank you'.
"You remember?" he looked at her shimmering eyes, warmly kissing her hand. "Yes," she replied, sincerely, lingering on the length of the shoreline. Taking the expanse of her palm in his, he lugged her gaze to his at a mere tug onto him. She smiled, lock, stock and barrel in rapture.
"Geet," he whispered, his face was only inches from her and the warmth of his breath lit her up like a candle. A rush of heat started in her chest and slowly spread throughout her body, reaching every last limb. She could feel his eyes watching her every move, from the slight twitch of her lip to the way her shoulders rose and fell as she sucked in air. He leaned forward slowly, his hand brushing the hair out of her face and in an instant his lips were on hers. They were rough and smooth, they were ideal. He moved them around in circles and her heart puffed out. His breathing was deep and loud in her ear.
It was a kiss, a kiss in the moonlight.

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A/N Hope that you liked this chapter! Replying to comments and PMs now; there will be a delay in the notification- my apologies! =)
Edited by PlumesOfLexis - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#14
Hay sweety!
I've tried to follow ur story but sorry to say most of it goes above my head!😕
It's almost like sitting in a chemistry class n having no clue what's going on. .

Anyway will be waiting for the next!


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Posted: 11 years ago
#15
nice update dear
i m not able to understand nandini's part here, in last update geet was sad hearing about her nd in this update she didn't reacted anyway
maan surprised geet by taking her to the place which is their meeting place
love geet reaction on reaching there and maan was happy seeing her happy
plz don't mind but i think u r going to much in deep to show what the character is doing

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Sometimes that is all a surprise needs !...a refreshing breath of air, wispy breezes, cool splash of water and whispery silence... And u just added to it your own element ... Which makes it so much better: snuggling warm bodies in the most comforting of all clothes ..pyjamas enclosed within eachother's arms sharing the delight of warm love in a kiss ... A soothing read ... A small recluse of a chapter amidst the confusion of figuring out characters yet ... However on a side note may I add that there wasn't a mention of moonlight,like inclined in the title 😆 😉 or was there 😳 ?! Hehee waiting for more.
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Posted: 11 years ago
#17

Chapter 3(B): Puddle of muddled recollections

We are not Ranchoddas Chanchad, neither Prerajulisation nor Farhanite. We are just a lot of eccentric teenagers, being the oddball out in everything.

One being a confused and susceptible teenager, the second one being destructive and perilous as a whirlwind, the third one being Squealer'- gainsaying each and every statement of the fourth and youngest one, who literally gives up the ghost for an actor.

The Mental Group.
IIT.
Second year batch.
First file.
Second and third combined desks.

Deepu.
Tuffs.
Aaeesaaeed.
Sallu.


Pinki, Nandini-I hope I have been flawless in spelling the name-, Anvesha Khurana, and the extraordinary Geet Handa- I do egg on you all to perceive the extraordinary' and stifle numerable sniggers as well as the verity that I am, really, flaunting myself; I know, I am pompous-.

We are uncomplicated, unruffled in our way and as chilly as a cucumber. I do not reminiscence the day when we actually became acquaintances, to good friends and best of friends. I can feel the nostalgia brewing in me as I go back to the days when we were having-and are still having- fun, real fun. I just can't stop thanking, ad infinitum, to have you people as my friends! I just want to make this preponderant' that I love you people! You have been the greatest friends till date.

Ranbir Kapoor.
Hoping that that the exhilaration has sunk in, Pinki, I think I might continue now. *Coughs*
P.i.n.k.i.; a hushed, timid, introvert, girl, in fact the only shy one in our small group- lest that's what she appears to be. I can already see a pair of two little eyes gawking at me, but, anyway...
I always have this thing, kind of, hip-hopping in my mind, I wish you were here since the commencement! But no worries, Der aaye, durust aaye! :P Yeah; I'm learning hindi!
I can still recall that day, that wonderful day, when the sun had set the azure, pristine sky ablaze, you had taken a seat just in front of me and Aisha had just left the class stating some stuff about the Toofani express- Nandini- Tuffs.

"Do you think Tuffs is like this?"

"We must stop her you know."

"She is destroying her life."

"God is so cruel!"

"Ye kya ho gaya bhagwaan?"

"Nahiii! Ye nahi ho sakta! Kyuuun?"


*Golmaal Hai... Sab Golmaal Hai*

That was when we became acquaintances. I still have that day etched in my mind! That small, shy, little girl, who was seated just in front of me and who used to pick up all my "giri huwi cheez'" was in fact a DHAMAKA! Plop! Truth dawned upon us, and the day she turned into a sherni always roaring "mummmi"and setting a perpetual example of watching a horror film in a chilled state, it was too late... We were already best buddies!


Nandini.
Nnna-ndiee-neaee -I do request a notice the tamil intonation along with my sardonic voice-. What a person you are! What a person! Fishing out the recollections, from the -in-sane part of my mind, which undeniably has been doted by you -Thank you, for the openhandedness, even though, I would have been fine, far better than fine, without it- I can only say "Keyyy?"
Where do you crop up with such words that leave only a phantom out of me? Seriously?


"Question pour un champion!" [Question for a Champion!]

Who is that one queer and relatively thin-yes, I am being sarcastic- person who subsists in this pitiless word by articulating "Keyyy?" in a whole tamilian way of speech, instead of "What?",in a husky English cadence?

I am sure, even Gloomy would know the answer and she would come, woofing a "Woof-Wooof-Wooof", her tone mounting in intensity and strength, becoming as violent as you are-correction, no one can be as peaceful as you; yes, sarcasm in bubbling in me as I put these words to paper-, with each "Woof" representing your name, going: "Nan-Nandiii-Nandiiiniii" the last syllables intoned as though an asthmatic patient were exhaling a huge puff of air.

I have never been shaken in my life, never before, until you stormed in. Even Shammi Kapoor sir, who happens to be your idol -Yeah, Shake it, Shake it, Shake it! Shake it like Shammi!- would be swollen with pride to see you shaking, ME. Tell, me something, you have you chair, haven't you? Then why, why on earth do you stuff your maxi ass-sorry for the language; courtesy is good at times- on my chair? Why?

Splits of laughter ripped open and ricocheted in the expanse of the room. "Those days were so fanatical, weren't they?" Geet voiced out, responded by a nod and a few sniggers dropping out of Nandini's mouth.

"You were, so nutty, Geet!" she bounced back. "That, was me!"

"I miss Anvesha, a lot; don't you?" Nandini, looked up, her eyes moistened and replied, with and emotion that was indecipherable, like a scrawled handwriting of a two year-old, "I miss everyone."

There was a silence, filled with muffled sounds and an air of resolution which Nandini dismantled, "You know, Geet, the only difference between us is that you took the right decision in love, whereas I took the wrong one, in love."

"No, Nandini; it was Arjun who aggrieved you, and Anvesha. It wasn't your blunder, at all. He seemed to be so in love with you, that even, I was misled."

The refute was ignored by a gloomy reply, "Each one his own fate; you can't do much, can you? I am just happy that you have made the right choice and have got Maan by your side. At least you have someone to blend your splintered pieces back to you. Life is a puzzle, Geet and you should always have someone by your side, to unite the broken pieces of the puzzle, drawing it into a picture, anew, each time." Sliding off the lock key of her mobile, she glanced at the time and sunk it into her purse. "It's getting late, I think I should leave."

Geet smiled, devoid of glum emotions and said, "Stay here for tonight Nandini, let's revert to our world of reminiscences; let's revive school time, please, Tuffs?"


*

"Papa, why is mama taking so much time and laughing so much?" Arush questioned his father, irritated. He needed both his maman and papa by his side to be submerged by the world of dreams!
"Let her, Arush, she hasn't done so, heartily for a while..."

*

A/N I feel that this chapter may be incomprehensible in some way, so if anything lies not understood, please voice out the queries. Looking forward to reading your views/reviews/comments.
Sorry for any typo!


Footnote: Owing to revisions, I was not able to tack up regular chapters. I'm afraid that this might continue until November. Just as I was able to squeeze in time and scrape through a chapter here, I think I shall be able to do so for the remaining months and hence leading to even tardier chapters.
I'm really very sorry guys!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Babaji!
did i really ask for a update...
This time i didn't even try to complete reading the chapter!
i was laughing my heads off...😆

No No before u conclude some thing let me clear u!
i Didn't understand a tiny mini bit of it!😕

God girl!
Care explain in Simple English!


Pretty Please😳


Still Waiting for the Next!
Edited by sporthy_smile28 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Waiting for the next part!
N this time I've lots of doubts regarding the story so when u r online n r planing to update do let me know!

Hmm even beter u just change the status in the title I'll be glad to eat ur head before the next part😆
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hello people! I'm having exams and being utterly freaked out here! So, next chapter will be in two weeks, when my exams will be over and I'll be in a perpetual holiday!
Sorry for the tardy notice and update.
Thank you for hanging by!
-POL

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