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-lakshmi-

@-lakshmi-

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Posted: 11 years ago

#641

Originally posted by: Kalpana_Writer
Ok! Here it is!
Main mere future story Daras Deewani ke title track ke liye gaana soch rahi thi toh yeh gaana ban gaya!

Jis Din Na Dekhun Tujhko
Raaton Ko Roti Jaaun
Jis Din Main Dekhun Tujhko
Naachun Main Jhoomun Gaaun

Aanhon Mein Aansu Bhar Gaye
Jab Tukhko Tadpat Paaun
Hoton Pe Muskaan Aayi
Jab Tujhko Hasta Dekhun

Bhai Main Paagal
Hui Main Baawri
Haan Hoon Hoon Main Teri
Teri Hi Jogan

Deewani Deewani
Teri Daras Deewani
Deewani Deewani
Teri Daras Deewani

How is it?

for a person whi is a non poetic like me... sab samajh aa gaya... and i read the whole that means i liked it😃

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893213

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Posted: 11 years ago

#642

Yo!

How are all the chit chatters..😆

Was going to sneak out of office but boss ne kaam thama diya..😕

so HHBB for now...😃

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Kalpana

@Kalpana_KaCy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#643

Originally posted by: -lakshmi-

for a person whi is a non poetic like me... sab samajh aa gaya... and i read the whole that means i liked it😃

That is coz this is not a poem, It is a song!😃 I even have a tune for it but recorder in my phone is horrible! Warna achcha khaasa aawaaz hai mera! I could have sung and put it up as title track for Daras Deewani!😆

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singh24

@singh24

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Posted: 11 years ago

#644

Originally posted by: Kalpana_Writer
Ok! Here it is!
Main mere future story Daras Deewani ke title track ke liye gaana soch rahi thi toh yeh gaana ban gaya!

Jis Din Na Dekhun Tujhko
Raaton Ko Roti Jaaun
Jis Din Main Dekhun Tujhko
Naachun Main Jhoomun Gaaun

Aanhon Mein Aansu Bhar Gaye
Jab Tukhko Tadpat Paaun
Hoton Pe Muskaan Aayi
Jab Tujhko Hasta Dekhun

Bhai Main Paagal
Hui Main Baawri
Haan Hoon Hoon Main Teri
Teri Hi Jogan

Deewani Deewani
Teri Daras Deewani
Deewani Deewani
Teri Daras Deewani

How is it?

😃 mast bana hei BB..

lekin plzzz,, ess stanza ko thoda rymic bana do...

last line match nahi ho rahi..

agar mei galat nahi hu to...plzz mind matt kerna..😊

Bhai Main Paagal

Hui Main Baawri

Haan Hoon Hoon Main Teri

Teri Hi Jogan

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-lakshmi-

@-lakshmi-

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Posted: 11 years ago

#645

Originally posted by: dqno1
Yo!

How are all the chit chatters..😆

Was going to sneak out of office but boss ne kaam thama diya..😕

so HHBB for now...😃

hey avi

neend aayi... sone ki tayaari...

have a good day😃

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Kalpana

@Kalpana_KaCy

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+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#646

@ BD!

It was not supposed to rhyme! Plus, paagal ke saath kuch rhyme nahi kar raha tha which would show the girl's plight!

Also, tuen aisa hai that the line seems perfect! Mera recorder bahut kharaab or would have sung, uploaded it just so that you guys could enjoy!😆

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singh24

@singh24

Inactive

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Posted: 11 years ago

#647

Originally posted by: dqno1
Yo!

How are all the chit chatters..😆

Was going to sneak out of office but boss ne kaam thama diya..😕

so HHBB for now...😃

😆 OK , no prob dear...

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-lakshmi-

@-lakshmi-

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Posted: 11 years ago

#648

sone chale??? neend aayi

GN babie and BB

pic doondne ka mann nahi hain aaj,... adjust karlo

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893213

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Posted: 11 years ago

#649

Originally posted by: -lakshmi-

hey avi

neend aayi... sone ki tayaari...

have a good day😃

GN dear😃

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singh24

@singh24

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Posted: 11 years ago

#650

Originally posted by: Kalpana_Writer
@ BD!
It was not supposed to rhyme! Plus, paagal ke saath kuch rhyme nahi kar raha tha which would show the girl's plight!
Also, tuen aisa hai that the line seems perfect! Mera recorder bahut kharaab or would have sung, uploaded it just so that you guys could enjoy!😆

😛 try karo.. socho kuch to milega word jo set ho jaye..😃