Wo Piya Aaye Na // updating - Page 2

Created

Last reply

Replies

74

Views

11.4k

Users

45

Likes

328

Frequent Posters

alekhika20 thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail Networker 3 Thumbnail
Posted: 11 years ago
#11
Congrats on new story.
Updt soon.
Waiting.
Sonia.KN thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 5
Posted: 11 years ago
#12


I was thinking to write prologue for this story even had written few lines. But for a moment my mind stuck somewhere this is not anything about super humans or extra ordinary people. But related to some where normal people you,me or anyone around us.Yes with the twist called Fiction. A normal human,a common man in depression..suffering from harassment of many kinds. Who might have faced or facing unexpected incidents in life. Those episodes directly hit mind heart n soul turning that normal person to something abnormal/mentally unstable for life long or some time depending upon conditions.That persons forgets almost every thing But not that particular incident or happening responsible for his/her condition .What happens next lets find out...

Starting with Chapter One

Will give in small portions as much as I can write

Chapter 1

'Doctor Doctor ...' a middle age woman in nursing attire screaming rushed inside the room.As per the conditions around this was a hospital and that room Doctor's cabin.

Inside Cabin

'Doctor Verma...plz come fast..that patient !! that patient !! wo Hoshiarpur waali...' breathless she completed

'Woh woh kya Anu...what she did again ?' Surprised lady doctor Verma questioned nurse Anu but looking at her condition she decided to check the patient first instead off questioning nurse Let it go challo..let me handle her first..? whole staff is not able to handle a single patient...?' and she leaves. Nurse followed her tried to complete.

'But Doctor she is really strange' nurse complains making face...

'Strange...I think you might have forgotten Anu this is hospital not for Normal people' Irritated with nurse Dr. replied back and especially not for physical ailments but for patient with Mental Disorders n every patient with such disorder is strange..ok ...aur challo aab' she said

Outside Hospital Lab whole staff has been eye witnessing this drama.All of them trying to knock at the door which somebody has locked from inside and this somebody was the same patient for whom Dr Verma was here.

Making way in between gathered crowd Dr. Verma reached at the door.'Dr. Verma dekhiye na...she again did same and the lab assistant Rahul who was with her..she locked him inside washroom before locking lab's main door.' Lab technician Mrs. Kiran said in one go.

'What she locked him in washroom?'

'Yes Dr...luckily Rahul's mobile was in his pocket n he ringed me. He has been trapped there what to do?If she not opens the door...otherwise we have to take help from carpenter to unscrew the door screws' Kiran narrated whole incident.

'Okey wait you all leave the place..wo darr gayi hai itna shor sun kar...Jaante nahi tum sab...just leave ..and you Ram,Suraj (ward boys) and Kiran stay here for my help' she gave instructions.

Dr Verma gently tapped at door Sab challe gaye..koi nahi hai yahan...just me plz open na door'

No response...'plz open it' she requested

'Nahi nahi.Tum Rahul ko bahar nikaal dogi..and he with other people will give me shock again...You are a liar just like others' girl inside room screamed..'fir mujhe uske pass bhej dengay mujhe nahi jaana'

'No I promise you...I will fire all from job...main..main tumko uske pass nahi bhejungi..I will take you to my home with me' Dr. Verma assured her

'Sachi tum sach keh rahi ho...' a cheerful assured voice came from inside this time

'Ha Geet sachi ...I promise'

'Babaji walla promise'

'Ha tumhare Babaji walla promise' Dr.stamped what assurance she demanded.

Just within a jiffy she opened the door.


Sonia



As I mentioned above I will give chapters in small bits too give more regular updates coz sometimes due to less words or when trying to give long updates these short ones remains without posting.


Plz tell me if it is okey you liked it or not...Comment to encourage me...A different concept and a different approach


Note: According to rules of contemporary writing rules.Verb changes according to situation intentionally...


Click

Page 1<------

Chapter 2 ------>

Edited by Sonia.KN - 10 years ago
ambeern thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail Networker 3 Thumbnail
Posted: 11 years ago
#13
Awesome start
eagerly waiting for nxt
gill123 thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail Networker 2 Thumbnail
Posted: 11 years ago
#14
Geet in mental hospital she is a mental patient nice start waiting 4 next part
sangeeta33 thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail
Posted: 11 years ago
#15
Awesome start i Loved it continue soon
angel_smily thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 11 years ago
#16
nice part
geet is in mental hospital
eager to know more
continue soon
thanks for the pm
_SnowFlakes_ thumbnail
12th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 11 years ago
#17

Superb update !!!!!

Geet in mental asylum 😲 abt whom she was saying "Phirr mujhe une pass bhej denge" ..

waiting for nxt .. cont. soon ..
6n6s6k6i6r6a6n6 thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail Networker 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 11 years ago
#18


Geet from Hoshiarpur is a mental patient in this Hospital...

she bolts Rahul inside washroom so that he can't give her shocks...

this Dr. Verma seems like a good doctor who cares for her patients and patients also believes on her words because when she gave promise to Geet that she will fire all from job and will never send her and she will take Geet her home Geet believed her and opened the door...

very very interesting update...

waiting for next part...

short updates are ok with me...i just need regular updates😳😃...short updates are very easy to read and understand also...


Edited by 6n6s6k6i6r6a6n6 - 11 years ago
bhanu_rekhag thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 5
Posted: 11 years ago
#19
Very interesting n amazing start
Twilightsparkle thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 11 years ago
#20
congrats for new story the title brought me here
i love that so much

sparkle

Related Topics

Geet - Hui Sabse Parayee Thumbnail

Posted by: Mg13

1 years ago

MANEET FF SAAJAN | UPDATED PART 50 ~ Updating....

hey guys... here is my new thread...my previous threads got removed so links will not be opened... so will pm you update link soon.. wait for a...

Expand ▼
Geet - Hui Sabse Parayee Thumbnail

Posted by: Vaidhumom

3 years ago

💗MG SS O RE PIYA #3 - Important note on page 19 dated 26th Jan 2025

WORK IN PROGRESS... . REQUEST YOU TO LIKE AND COMMENT ONCE I ANNOUNCE THIS THREAD IS READY I AM SO GLAD TO REACH TO THIS LEVEL. I CANT EXPRESS...

Expand ▼
Geet - Hui Sabse Parayee Thumbnail

Posted by: priya_21

8 years ago

Sangini.. Piya ki mein Banugi S#2 pt 5/pg46/23 sept

Prologue Chachu am not going marry with gaav ki chori Maan her name is ge Maan : chachi aap hi smjhayo na I mean mein thehra city ka

Expand ▼
Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".