MG SS-Aashiqui#2, Epilogue/pg-51/June 28 2013

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ritzy09

@ritzy09

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Posted: 12 years ago

#61

Sweet part dear but i thought u sepnt lot f time talking about the ring's price which slowed the pace. I would have liked more focus on her career and how he goes about it. But I undretsand especially if this ring is going to be a reason for any MUs going ahead so it is ok...

reading past and present together is still a little confusing for me. Also they portray two different emotions and reading them togther takes away the depth from both. I will suggest you either finish past first or give it as large chunks of flashbacks at appropriate points in the story...

Just my suggestion dear. Please don't mind. I like the story and will read it anywyas so but just thought of sharing my POV.

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Pooja Verma

@impoojaverma

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Posted: 12 years ago

#62

lovely update

d way they both met n come close was totally different n unusual

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neha gupta

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Posted: 12 years ago

#63

Originally posted by: ritzy09
Sweet part dear but i thought u sepnt lot f time talking about the ring's price which slowed the pace. I would have liked more focus on her career and how he goes about it. But I undretsand especially if this ring is going to be a reason for any MUs going ahead so it is ok...

reading past and present together is still a little confusing for me. Also they portray two different emotions and reading them togther takes away the depth from both. I will suggest you either finish past first or give it as large chunks of flashbacks at appropriate points in the story...

Just my suggestion dear. Please don't mind. I like the story and will read it anywyas so but just thought of sharing my POV.

thanks a lot dear...
and yeah i am getting ur POV about the story now...
no MUs di because of that ring...
there is not much past left...
now the story moves in present that's y i gave that song in the precap... now i'll focus on their budding relationship and her career...

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Salina Parbin Mazumder

@Shalinaparbin

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Posted: 12 years ago

#64

Wonderful update,,, 👏 👏 👏

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neha gupta

@neha5058

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Posted: 12 years ago

#65

Fanaa Hum Mohobbat Mein Teri

part-66

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Remya

@Remya_Pillai

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Posted: 12 years ago

#66

That was so lovely..
The way maan soothed her pain was superb..
He proved his words showing a big reality..
if he would have consoled her thru words, then she would left it like mere words.. But when he made her face the reality, her pain vanished in thin air..