THE LOCKET(5) MG FF, new thread link pg 1, COMPLETED 1 - Page 69

Originally posted by: reachsky2011

Aur woh Suniye

Originally posted by: reachsky2011

Tortoise bhi slow hai yeh

Originally posted by: Madhuri53

beautiful update...loved the way you expressed his feelings for her and her refusal to see his feelings...dheere dheere hole hole dono me pyar ho jayega...

glad to know her pov...her narration of their ride was diff from him...her imagination & love for movies, srk & yash chopra was nice...regarding the notes, she should have guessed when he told that there was non at that time...but loved her prayer to fulfull his all wishes...

i loved the last scene where he puts earrings lovingly...

hope their love story gets in next gear little fast...

loved the verses by koolsmile, perfect for the situation...

i dont have any issues for your style of writing, i enjoy both maaneet & devtara equally and first time enjoying devtara very much

Originally posted by: palindrome

First of all thank you so so so so so much for giving us such long and cute,serene and beautiful chapter...Though,It was the longest chapter by far i guess but still when it ended, There was a craving to read more and more...Feeling was similar to the time when clock used to struck 10 of the night and screen used to freeze at Maan's or Geet's face at the end in GHSP...😊

I like this maaneet,I love them ,I adore them..and I want to hug both of them right now...and before them,I want to hug you tight for creating them and presenting them in such a beautiful way...🤗

Haiyee... Avi dead and gone...😃 For my Palin to say such words... am floored...🤗

There were many things in this chapter which straight went into my heart..Like Geet missing her grandpa and hopes he would be able to enjoy these wonders of Mother nature one day..Thought it was a one line from you but It has told alot about Geet's character especially her caring nature and maturity that she has gained before her age..Usually our parents think this way whenever their kids are not with them ...!!!

Then Maan buying a shawl for Dadi though It was actually for Geet as he knew she had no woollens with her ...His "Hmms" in reply to geet's questions...and his wish,"meri har dua tum ho geet.."..Despite being little cheesy,the context and situation in which these words were uttered by him,brought a silly grin on my face as something warm covered my heart.....

It is a very slow paced story so every time I post it I am scared as to the rush to the next step in their relationship comments. Just like in life every small thing matters and I am trying to make that happen here. I am never as nervous about Dev-Tara as I am about Maaneet. Some readers have gotten used to the fast paced hop into bed romances and for them to stay with me for so long in this story makes me feel happy.

Sharmeen's presence and Naureen's magical lines were cherry on the top...😳

Naureen is a sweetheart and Sheen is my gundi without whom my threads would be almost empty... I am glad to have them in my work...

It was indeed Maan's best birthday,i guess...😆 and he got his birthday gift too.. He got a chance to put that ear ring in her ear lobes..

There was more than one gift here Palin. That is why I titled it the first gift. She gets a glimpse of paradise because of him and he gets to spend a day with her as he has been wishing for. The earring and the cable ride were bonuses , it was his birthday after all😉😉

Her face was flushed when he said "Hi" and My face was like this "😃😉",when he said "Hi"...!!!!

Chapter was "bliss" for a reader like me...LOVE you so much avi...🤗

Originally posted by: Onir

Avi I just typed the comment and accidentally backspaced and everything just got erased...
and now my brother is sitting with the lappy ... so can't type a comment for now...

I'm so sorry...will comment at night for sure... 😳

Originally posted by: Loquacious_Aash

SRK <3

Originally posted by: dqno1

Na koi picture, na koi emos...

😭Mere saare hard work pe pani pher diya tum ne...😭

Avi roothing and mooh phering from Sona...😭