The Seven Year 'Hitch' - Thread 2 link pg 1 - Page 8

Originally posted by: .Maggie.

Finally got a chance to read this and can I just kick you for telling that you can't write. Bahaha. If your first work and which according to you is so amateurish would be like this, then I can't wait for the one where you'd say you're happy with a work you write. Anyway I will postpone my lecture to some other time. Let me jump to dissect it Doc

😊 Glad you read it... & liked what I wrote. Please don't kick, as I still feel my work is quite immature w.r.t. awesome writers like you who pen down all such beautifully, so much so that I can feel the emotions & the whole scenario so clearly. So I can never feel that my writing has been at par even slighteset bit to those works that I have read here on IF.
Let me tell you that the title itself conveyed something to me. Tell you what you and Zarin have picked up themes which might not be everyone's cup of tea, because everyone or at least most of the crowd would like to read a simple story with happy ending, but you two had made us think about after that supposedly happily ever after. That prickly times when everything you had built on for so long in your marital life seem to fall apart and you don't know what you want to do or what you can do anymore.

There's more to the title... You will know soon. 😊 The life after happily ever after is something that intrigues me a lot, as it's then it is all tested & endured. I hope I will be able to convey it all as I perceieve it & will be able to connect with you all reading it. *Fingers crossed*

Maan here, a person who's guilty of his deeds and who wants to make it up to her but didn't know how to made me feel for him. It wasn't his fault that he was a man of few words but at times you need to speak only to keep the other person from hurting more. You should show them at least by your actions that you care.

Yes his guilt is eating him, he wants to make it all right but sometimes words are needed to heal & cure even if actions sooth you. Maan here couldn't act nor speak leading to more misery & distress. That extra mile Maan will have to cover now to restore it to the best.

And Geet here is brilliant. I am in awe of the lady, the strength of her character. Her apologizing for hurting him not once expecting an apology for the hurt he caused her instead shows the beauty of her heart, while she telling him that though she didn't mean to put the words in the way they'd come, the meaning wasn't too far from reality showed her honesty. Often we say things, which we very much mean but we may not mean in the way they'd come out, and she had recognized and made that clear between them, and that's what had made me love the woman.Geet here is very strong in character yet very passionate about her love. She is not one to take things lying down, but yet her love for him gives her a shade of softness, tenderness... & she knows only they can tend to the wounds they've caused the other intentionally/unitentionally & thereby lead to healing of the scars formed in their relation.

I can't take those words back, as once spoken they hold their own existence, own meaning and power...
Happy that you noticed this line. It's something that I strongly emphasise on & believe in. I had added it subtly in the monologue as this single line held power of all that could ever be encompassed in million other ways . 😊
So true. Words once spoken can't be taken back and many times the uttered words change the entire relation you've built over years.

Yes very true. This was exactly what I wanted to put across.

The lack of warmth or her turning her back, small gestures and things like these might prick him, and might give him an impression that they might not share the same bond anymore, but if he'd try, he'd definitely be able to build a new bond with her altogether. And I for one can't wait for that. Loved it Doc 🤗

Be rest assured that this all made him realise a many things & his own lackings & capabilities. These all will fill him with the hope & zeal to win it all over.

Glad & very evry happy you liked it. 🤗 That too this coming from someone like you who herself writes so well that I get so entraped in the writings, makes me feel very good. 😃

Also I have started reading WOL ... First few parts, & I'm loving it will comment on it as I'm done reading all parts. But don't know where exactly to..

Originally posted by: khwaishfan

fab update! Congrats! superbly written

Originally posted by: nihatri

interesting hai lekin wat happened between them

wonderful start

waiting to know what happened b/w them

Originally posted by: impoojaverma

wonderful start

waiting to know what happened b/w them

Originally posted by: dqno1

THAP THAP THAP!!!

Waiting for Tuesday...😊

Originally posted by: Kittya_Cullen

I doubt we've ever interacted directly before. I think I was perusing one of H's or S's threads when I came across a comment referencing your foray into the line of writing fiction. Since I've seen your comments before, and observed the way in which you note the details within a story that others might not notice, I decided to peep and see how that would translate in your own work. I must say I am very happy I did read.

I guess no, we haven't directly interacted before this. I guess it was H's thread that you're referring to. To be honest even I have read some of your comments and Have loved your flow of words & the way you convey them all in a beautiful manner. Thanks that you noticed my comments & even liked them, but the credit solely goes to the awesome writers whose work were the source from where all those comments came into being. Also it feels good to know that My this SS was a worth a read.

I loved how you introduced the story. You contrasted the familiar with the present, showing how much Maan's life had changed. The lack of focus on the things that usually held his attention, suggested that something had become so horribly wrong that even the most normal action could not be performed. Additionally, the lack of light and how helpless he appeared to be when it came to correcting that nicely foreshadowed the other things to come. When we finally get to his interactions with his wife, the silence that grabs control of his tongue as he struggles to formulate the correct words to add to the moment was so poignant. The descriptions, the thought processes, all very wonderfully done. Also, the movements from the conversation to the preparation for bed, and the actual responses to Maan from Geet were quite telling all on their own. It makes it quite clear that whatever changed the balance of their relationship has affected Geet far deeper than even she might have realised. Her efforts to "be" the same are all counteracted in some way by her subconscious--though whether it is as an act of self preservation, or a further extension of her trying to protect him I am unsure of. For now, these are just my basic observations and surmises.

You analysed all that I wanted to convey about their past & present depicted, also their bond & interaction at this level of whatever was disclosed. For what transpired that lead to these changes, you will know soon in coming parts I guess.

Before I leave, I must say that I really enjoy the image you've projected of Geet so far. Her clarity when communicating, and the presence that resonates in her words says quite alot, and the overall interactions between her and Maan portrayed their relationship excellently. I am sorry that I don't have time and energy to really expand on my thoughts and observations, but I just wanted to let you know that it was an enjoyable read.

Geet here is very strong yet a person who loves completely & unfailingly. Not a doormat but also can't hurt her soul & life - her husband. You don't need to say sorry, you took time to comment here & pen down these beauiful words on how this part appealed to you makes me feel very good.
*a big hug * 😊