For Dr. Khurana, with love, MG SS, pg 177,178

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Susegad

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Posted: 12 years ago

#21

Dr. Love is in the house.😳

Avi, i was pleasently...ummm lets make that hotly surprised to see this OS.

Right from the beginning of the OS i could feel the palpable attraction between these two. Dr. Flirty Is hawt. Apni saas ko bhi nahi choda😉 Dr sahab ek teer se do nishane laga rahe the. Buttering up his MIL and manaofying his Geet.

But through all their roothana manana, I could feel the strong undercurrent of the love they felt for each other.

Badla legi Geet, aur badkle ki aag mein Maan ke saath, saath hum bhi jalenge.

Awesome Avi. Bilkul maza aa gaya.😃

Hume badle ka intezaar rahega😉

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sweetkj

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Posted: 12 years ago

#22

Originally posted by: had2bu

Tu aise reactions degi toh main kya karu...
I don't know if I should post the rest..😳

There is only one more part though which has most of the story...

This was just testing the waters..

coming from you is new.. 😆

water level is under control...

aane de..!!

waiting eagerly for the next part now..

abb toh comment uske baad hi !! 😉😆

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angelic_cute

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Posted: 12 years ago

#23

awesome update dear

loved it

maan manofying geet

please pm me

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chavvi16

@chavvi16

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Posted: 12 years ago

#24

oh teri kya baat hai
awww he was like damn my mishty is mad at me because of the useless minister
awww that was one hell of a dinner preps there
man thats so cute when she left him high and dry
but what else could she do
hope you continue soon please

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kaamchorni

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Posted: 12 years ago

#25

Updated on page one :)

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Divya

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Posted: 12 years ago

#26

awesome os

are there gonna be more parts? me hopeful

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640638

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Posted: 12 years ago

#27

Originally posted by: kaamchorni
Oye boy, oye boy Geetji,
Tune dil ki baazi marli!

You already know of my affinity for parathas, Avi, and lately I've been craving for cake too... ;)

No, on a serious note... wow. It was really very very very well done. You have a natural gift. Subtle, engaging, brilliant...

Your characters have an easy charm, as does your writing. I was swept away with the flow and allowed it to lead me. The little details leapt out and took form without prompting. I could see it all unfolding before my eyes.

Sex and sexy scenes are relatively easy to write, especially if they are standalone as a chapter in themselves. But having one embedded successfully in the midst of a chapter and ensuring that it is elevating the story takes a certain degree of skill, one which you very clearly possess. You retained the innocent jesting and playfulness of the present while maintaining the sensuality required in the scenes from the night before. The result was beautiful, sexy, thrilling and heartwarming.

Take a bow, Avi. Take several.

(As for the guessing game... there was more of a mixed air for me, rather than distinct. But the lip biting and coyness reminded me especially of Vidya. And there was also the gentle teasing from the man. So... Vidya and Gaurav?)

Thanks Zarin for reading it. Glad you liked it. At today's rate I am not writing another one anytime soon😆. Glad I have finished it already otherwise I would not have been able to continue. What you said about the ahem ahem scene was very hard for me to write. I don't think I have been so uncomfortable about any paper that I wrote than those paragraphs, (oh yes there is more to come in the next part, be warned). I am glad you liked Dr. K's playful nature. Thode badmash hai, thode nadaan hai but Geet ki jaan hai.

As for the guessing game, there are at least seven of her characters here and quite a few scene snapshots or props. Devi will be back after the weekend, lets see what she recognizes... Mums the word till then.

Thanks again Don Chu 🤗

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640638

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Posted: 12 years ago

#28

Originally posted by: april12
awesome os
are there gonna be more parts? me hopeful

One more long part mostly by Monday. Thanks for reading it.

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Susegad

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Posted: 12 years ago

#29

Avi was thinking about your OS as I was kneading roti ka atta(clear clarifiaction all by myself, I'm alone at home😆) Aur mujhe gana yaad aya Shikdum wala and I thought, OMG it's perfect for your Maan & Geet😉

Koi nahi hain kamre mein, kya haseen mila hain paal

Aaj shararat karne do, Kaam baki karenge kaal.

Yeh gana leke kuch likh na, bohot maza aayega😆

Waiting reeeally eagerly for part 2😉

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Posted: 12 years ago

#30

Originally posted by: Susegad

Dr. Love is in the house.😳

Avi, i was pleasently...ummm lets make that hotly surprised to see this OS.

Right from the beginning of the OS i could feel the palpable attraction between these two. Dr. Flirty Is hawt. Apni saas ko bhi nahi choda😉 Dr sahab ek teer se do nishane laga rahe the. Buttering up his MIL and manaofying his Geet.
But through all their roothana manana, I could feel the strong undercurrent of the love they felt for each other.
Badla legi Geet, aur badkle ki aag mein Maan ke saath, saath hum bhi jalenge.
Awesome Avi. Bilkul maza aa gaya.😃
Hume badle ka intezaar rahega😉

Thank you Nisha!

I like sharaarati people in general even kids, the naughtier the better.

The love story is the gist of the story and hope you guys enjoy the next part as much.

Glad ke mazaa aaya.

🤗