If Only You Saw Me (2) - Page 15

Originally posted by: mayyo13

Ooh! Look Z and Sweety! Apa has done us a favor! Ab hum benaam nahin rahey! 😆
So lets straighten the facts:
- Leader: Zarin
- Members: Me and Sweety
- Biggest fans: Apa and Avi!

😆 😆

Originally posted by: Susegad

Good night girls

Mithe mithe sapne to you both.

Love you.🤗

Originally posted by: kaamchorni

Res till I get home.

Oh, just realised it's a new thread! Kudos :)

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The last two lines reminded me of an eyes-wide, freeze-frame sitcom moment. He's been craving for her to notice him and now that she does... 😆

How do you think he's going to react now? Apart from being embarrassed, that is!😆

I love the way you've played out Maan's life, his background and his troubles. It was a display of truth without the call for pity. I have no space to feel sad for him because there's too much admiration in the way. All this he's suffered and he and his family have still bravely picked themselves up.

When I was reading about their past, I was reminded of the quote 'All that glitters is not gold'. To an outsider now, Maan's life must look fantastic. A popular, loved boy, lots of friends, a successful family business, a loving mother and sibling. Who would guess at what's beneath the surface?

Exactly. All that glitters isn't gold. It so happens that from the inside, a person isn't what he appears to the world. There's always a reason for his attitude towards others. Perhaps, his life in his family is what made him the popular, confident and loved guy.😊

A lot of love for the Khuranas.

Mariam, the way you write is so refreshing. I love how unassuming your updates are, the innocent feel they have to them. I could read this forever

Thank you so much Zarin!🤗

Originally posted by: glassdoor

res😃

EDIT ~~

What are you not happy about? The chapter has come out perfectly.😊
In fact the flow is much better when too much editing has not been done.
That is my view.

Is this a lens, I wonder. For it seems to correct my skewed vision.
Is this a mirror, I then think. For it tells me how I see myself.

Then the realization sets in that it is just a piece of hour glass.
Made of sands of time that I melted so it does not slip my fingers.

😆 Just a little something that this update reminds me of.
The writing is very smooth and subtle. The humor is in the memory that it brings.

Very good. Keep it up!

Originally posted by: april12

Awesome update!

Maan use this chance to talk to her.

(Even my friend is in same dilemma, there's this guy my friend is interested in but doesnt know how to start talking or anything.)

Originally posted by: fatema_007

conngrates for the new thread 😊

Originally posted by: --Fairy--

Awesome ...

Originally posted by: Neeju

superb update pm me

Originally posted by: Susegad

O badhaiyya Doc, on the new delivery of the bundle of joy.🤣

Believe me its a joy for all of us😆

Oh BTW, I woke up today morning andextremely happy to see the the mithai box in my inbox.

I have already consumed it.

But now I am going to savor it and then review your mithai.😃

Welcome to the our world, baby dhaga😆