my first os !!

it was quiet late in da night and da great Msk was returnin home after a very tiring day ...god dis week had been hectic lik hell ...he cudnt even give proper tym to his wifey his mishty not dat she complained coz she ws very understanding but he missd her soo much all dey could do dis past week ws share good morning and good night kisses but not tonight he thought smirking he thought ''oh mishty cant wait to b in ur arms '' as soon as he reached Km he almost ran inside and shouted ''jaaan m home ...mishty wer r u !?'' geet came nd flung her arms around his neck nd said '' aap aagaye maan chaliye get ready quick hume mid night se pehle wahaan rehna hai '' maan squeezed her in his arms but cudnt make out either head or tail f wat shez sayin''kya bol rahi ho jaan kahaan jana hai '' he said while nuzzling her cheeks nd neck .Geet had also missed him so much his touch his caresses she was loosing herself but den she gained control nd said ''arrey aap bhul gaye aaj pinky ki surprise b'day partyy hai cinderella theme wali nd m gonna b the fairy god mother !!!!'' she said .Maan was not at all willing to go in dat party coz goin in dat party wud mean wasting dis precious tym wit his mishty but he also knew how close geet nd pinky wer nd how much geet was excitd to b da fairy god mother coz she wud get to wear wings nd hold a magic wand he chuckled at his own thought and said ''geet jaan i missed u soo much nd tum party mein jana chati ho ..v'll go 2marro nd wish her ...aaj raat'' he cupped her face nd gave a peck on her lips nd said huskily '' tum mere saath party karlo'' geet's heart skipped a beat yes even she wants dis but wat abt pinky nd surprise b'day party no no she has to control ''maaan '' she whined and started pushing him but he was busy sucking and biting her cheeks neck collar bone ''maan suniye na ...pinkyy ohh maaan surprise paaa..ahh maaan!!'' maan pulled himself back nd pinned geet to da wall nd said ''dekho geet suprise b'day party jaisi koi cheez nai hoti arre b'day hai toh party toh hogi hee na ismein suprise kaisa haina'' dis left geet in deep thought she frowned her brows and looked oh so cute dat maan lost all control nd witout wasting even a fraction of sec scooped her in his arms nd took her to deir bedroom nd made passionate love to her aall night long ThisWas My first ever Os on maaneet plzzz lik nd comment !!!

really nice
keep it up

But leave some spaces after some line

nice attempt
but do cre whn write nxt time.pls give sapces nd dialoge give in bold also font chnge
all the best.
correct the misttake nd come with new one
will be wtng