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ninavi

@ninavi

Dazzler

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Posted: 14 years ago

#11

interesting

loved it

cont sooon

thnx for d PM 😊

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maaneetsangel

@maaneetsangel

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#12

congrats!!!!!!!! 4 d new one ...

awesome ... interesting concept ...

thnx 4 d pm...

continue soon ...

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Simran_14

@Simran_14

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#13

hey

great start

loved it

thnx 4 da pm

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known

@simi91

Rocker

Posted: 14 years ago

#14

congo shongo

new SS

beautiful start

love geet confident

do cont soonnn

thanks pm

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anks_ams

@anks_ams

Inactive

Posted: 14 years ago

#15

liked it.. pls add me to ur pm list:)

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roopali

@rsroopali

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#16

wow awesome

luved d part yaar

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MystiqueDew

@MystiqueDew

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#17

Great start ...liked it!!!

add me in ur PM list

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613528

Suspended

Posted: 14 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: drashsree100

Hey a brand new SS 👏

dear . I loved it . Looks like intense & dark subject . All 👍🏼 for it .

Just a small concern on my part I'm not offended or anything but just as a precautionary step advice ; there's a part where you used the word "Pak" & the fact that they blow up people ... I would suggest you don't name them coz you know in this public forum there are many girls from there . They may take it a bit wrongly ; one of my friends suffered using their country's name .

So I thought I should tell you . Seriously am not against it coz its just work of Fiction still I felt I should tell you 😊

Anyways update left me super exciting so waiting for more
Thanks for the pm ...

Thank's for liking it.

I know what you mean by people might take the 'paki' bit wrong. I'll just change that to stars. I kept it, because it really is an issue and this SS is based on that. All my Pakistani call themselves Paki, they just think it's a shorter term but I know it can be used as racist term. I used to live in a place called Rochdale, and the area I used to live was completely white. We were he only Asians, and the younger boys used to shout that out every time we used to walk past.

@Everyone else- Thank you so much :]

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613528

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Posted: 14 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: drashsree100

Hey a brand new SS 👏

dear . I loved it . Looks like intense & dark subject . All 👍🏼 for it .

Just a small concern on my part I'm not offended or anything but just as a precautionary step advice ; there's a part where you used the word "Pak" & the fact that they blow up people ... I would suggest you don't name them coz you know in this public forum there are many girls from there . They may take it a bit wrongly ; one of my friends suffered using their country's name .

So I thought I should tell you . Seriously am not against it coz its just work of Fiction still I felt I should tell you 😊

Anyways update left me super exciting so waiting for more
Thanks for the pm ...

Thank you for like it. 'Paki' is an issue in our society and places like australia and US. The area I'm writing about is quite racist, so I added it. I'll add a 'no offence' note at the bottom. I know what it's like to be called racist names, I've been called a Paki a million times (even though I'm Bengali).