FF 'TheUnWanted Feeling' UnChaaha Ahsas Updtd Pg 5 - Page 2

Originally posted by: lallulal2010

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Part 2

Savitri in her room has a bad dream and suddenly wakes up... She puts her hand on her chest wondering what could be wrong.................

Savitri self talk: Hmmm achanak kya hua nend toot gai ajeeb c bechaini kyu ho ri hai.............

Kya ho sakta hai.............

She looks here and there and decides to check on everyone...............

As she leaves the room the first room next to her is that of maan.......... She carefullu opens the door and peeps to see if maan is sleeping but to her dismay maan isn't dere...........

Savitri self talk: Maan apne kamrey main nahi hai' is ka matlab ye ajeeb c bechaini mujhe maan ki waja se hai zarur wo apni us kal kothri main betha ho ga she nods her head kya karun main is ladkey ka' Bed deekh k lgta nahi wo raat ko soya ho ga............

She starts walking towards maan workout room taking slow silent steps as she doesn't want to wake anyone up as she is about to reach the room she hears a sudden cracky noise............

Savitri ye kis cheez ki awaz hai

To her luck along the corridor are placed vases she juz picks one up and takes a deep breath and proceeds to her destination

At once she again hears da same noise and turns around holding da vase firmly and on seeing a shadow we hear two screams

Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa...............

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Maan in his room at once get shocked on hearing the screams he was about to get up but smirks and sits down calmly again and rolls his eyes' He has the expression on his face as to he knows what is happening outside the room and doesn't care at all

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Back to the scream its Divya and Savitri standing each holding one vase.............

Both look at eachother in shock

Savitri: Divya bhabi ap yaha

Divya: Haan kyu main yaha nahi ho sakti

Savitri rolls her eyes and says nahi

Divya a ha ha ha kyu............. Mera beta poori raat nahi soiya mujhe ajeeb c bechaini ho ri thi main tou yaha is liye ai take dekh saku k us ka gusah kuch thanda hua k nahi......... Tum itni jaldi kaisey uth gai Pooja k wakt to tum uthti nahi kya treadmill use krney ai ho.........

Savitri: Maan mera bhi beta hai and mujhe be bechaini ho ri thi isliye main be yahan isiliye ai........... k dekhu Maan ko hua kya............ Ap ne kaha maan ko gusah hai but kis baat p she inquires

Divya; Shruti ki shadi

Savitri just cant believe what she just heard......... Shruit ki shadi there is sadness in her eyes she asks divya to go back to her room and take some rest and she will talk to maan about it,,,,,,,,

Divya is very much worried as Maan had been working very much for the past few weeks to just forget about the whole marriage thing going on he even came home late and didn't catch any sleeps she tried to talk to him many times but he would just chnge da topic and leave................

Divya: Sambhal lena aisey kaisey chaley ga............. mujhe bohat chinta hai apne Maan ki

Savitri puts her hand smiling at her saying ap chinta na karey main maan ko samjhao gi wo samajh jaye ga

Divya trying to smile is just about to leave that savitri says aur haan app ne kya kaha tha ap ko boht chinta hai apne maan ki............. wo mera maan theeek haai divya bhabi........

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Divya just smiles at her and walks off.................

She loves the fact that Savitri is so close to maan and loves him more than her own children

She is sometimes a it jealous and sad that maan is much closer to Savitri and spends a lot of time with her cuz of the office but Maan loves his mother to the core and tries to give dem time equally he cares a lot about divya

If Savitri can read Maans face than Divya can read maan;s heart that's how his relation is with the two ladies..................

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Savitri enters the room seeing Maan gazing outside the window' She can see pain across his face and she doesn't like to see him in pain at all...............

Savitri: Maan kya dekh re ho is khriki se bahir........... Ap ko aisa mausam bohat pasand hai na..............

(In my version MSK loves rainy weather because of the darkness gloominess and thunder)

Maan: G' Dekh raha hun k ye mausam kis terha merey jazbaat ka sath dey ra hai..............

Savitri on hearing maan's words has streaks of pain across her face

Savitri in a very sad and depressed voice: Maaannnnn

Maan: Bus aunti g........... His eyes trun red in fury and his jaw line stiff than before he looks at her and than looks away

Main is baarey main koi baat nahi krna chahta

Savitri: but tumhe meri baat sunni ho gi maan kub tak aisey chaley ga

Maan Jub tak MAAN SINGH KHURANA chahey ga' Aur ab bus main is barey main aur koi baat nahi krna chahta ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

Savitri ap ko meri baat sunni hi ho gi

Maan theek hai Main hi yaha se chala jata hun

Maan gets up and leaves fuming............................

Savitri: Maaaaaaaaaaaan !!!! Maaannn!!!!!!!!

Self talk........... Bus main janti thi yahi ho ga Ab ye chaley phir se apne outhouse ki tarf Hayee Bhagwaan Kya karun main is ladkey ka Divya Bhabi un ko tasali di aura b......... Ab khud hi Maan agey bebus ho gai.............

precap Maan comes face to face with Shruti

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is shruti ur heroine????? it would have been better if u didn't change the heroine's name...........u know maan & geet sounds perfect...

Originally posted by: lallulal2010

is shruti ur heroine????? it would have been better if u didn't change the heroine's name...........u know maan & geet sounds perfect...

No dear Shruti is not the heroine and yes my leads will have the same name so dun worry dear Did you like it

superb!!!

waiting for geet to enter!!!

update sooN!!!

Originally posted by: anufa

superb!!!

waiting for geet to enter!!!

update sooN!!!

Thank you for the appreciation....

heyy..its intersting..but umm is shruti the name..its a goood name..but i dono another name would doo if dat is the main name..i really like ur ff..the wat savitri loves maan n also the realtionships between divya n savitri..nice!!u can add me to ur pm list?

Originally posted by: crazzy-girl

heyy..its intersting..but umm is shruti the name..its a goood name..but i dono another name would doo if dat is the main name..i really like ur ff..the wat savitri loves maan n also the realtionships between divya n savitri..nice!!u can add me to ur pm list?

Glad you liked it thanx for the appreciation..... Shruti is an important character 😉 dats all I can say for now

Originally posted by: Sash_RuLz

No dear Shruti is not the heroine and yes my leads will have the same name so dun worry dear Did you like it <div></div>

your fan fic is suberb......i loved divya-savitri relationship.

Originally posted by: lallulal2010

your fan fic is suberb......i loved divya-savitri relationship.

thank you I always wanted to see sucha realtionship on screen as my wish was never fulfilled I included it in my fan fic 😛