What will you( AR FF) update part 4 17/8

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I'm sure ppl out here wil throw eggs, tomatoes on me for starting another ff without even giving a proper story line to my prev ff ALL ALONE.... Actually couldn't help.. i thought abt this story line and jus decided to pen down....
IMP:-There can be tons of mistakes in this so plzzzzzzzz forgive me. this is my 2nd ff the 1st one i just started two days back................


CHAPTER 1
A hot Indian sun
shone through the white curtains of Riddhima gupta's bedroom She turned over in bed, ignoring the sun's call to wake up. Not to be ignored, it shone into a mirror standing on the right side of Ridz's futon, reflecting a bright glare onto her sleepy eyes.

"Okay, I'm awake," she said groggily, sitting up. Satisfied with her acknowledgement of the new day, the sun dispersed it's reflection,leaving Ridz o rub her stunned eyes. Though she wanted to move the mirror, the glare served as a useful alarm clock. Sitting up in bed, she began brushing her black hair in the small mirror, talking to the reflection as to a familiar friend. "Did you enjoy my graduation?" Not waiting for a reply, she continued, "I'm so glad you could come! My parents meant to be there, but something came up. I'm sure they would have come, if they could." Her face fell a little, but brightened upon the next thought, "Mrs. Keerthi , our teacher, called us 'young women' at the ceremony yesterday. She never called us that before," Ridz added quickly, as if Mrs. keerthi address to her students was proof enough of her womanhood. Ridz picked up her certificate, and read it again, savoring every word.
The Sanjeevani Medical School hereby certifies that Riddhima Gupta has fulfilled the requirements needed to graduate. Ridz has honored her by finishing first in her class.

She ran her finger along it's edges lovingly, for this small piece of paper represented long hours of tedious work. A satisfied smile parted her lips. "They will be proud of me now."



PART 2

Ridz's bedroom was not actually a room at all. Wooden partitions fenced off a small square of space from a larger room, making up three of her walls. The bedroom was just big enough to comfortably accommodate a futon and a small mirror given to her by Mrs. Keerthi. The partitions stood up against the wall, encircling the only window in the small apartment. Izumi loved to set her room up around this window, for at night, she would stare dreamily out and imagine herself strolling through a garden,inhaling the fragrant honey of the nearby flowers. She would keep this picture in her heart as she slept, and would dream of it as a baby craving for it's mother. A peaceful smile would often creep across her face, making her look more beautiful and serene. And what a pity that parents never noticed this transformation in their daughter

She carefully carefully folded up her partitions, taking care to do it quietly. Her parents slept in a partitioned room against the opposite wall. Quietly, she put away the futon and placed her mirror on the window's ledge. She tiptoed to the kitchen, and knelt next to a stove.Unstacking some containers in the corner, she pulled out a bag of rice. She measured portions of the white grain into a pan, carefully rinsing it in the kitchen sink. She quietly set the pan on the stove and turned on the fire. Pulling out the chair she arranged the bowls and tea things on it.
Tiptoeing carefully back to the closet she stood there shaking her head. Her whole wardrobe consisted of suits some old and some new but what a way to dress on the first day of her womanhood!

After dressing, Ridz sat down at the table, and eagerly waited for her parents to wake up. Now that she was a woman, and no longer a child, they would be proud to have such a daughter. After all, had she not finished at the top of her class?

Both of her parents had seen the little notes that Ridz had posted around the apartment, in the hope that they would attend her graduation. Neither one had said anything about it, so Ridz hoped that maybe they intended to surprise her by coming after all. In vain, had she searched for them among the crowds of happy students and proud parents. As a faithful dog sits at his master's feet, hoping for a pat of affection, Ridz now waited for her parents, hoping against hope, for some sign of their approval

Ridzzi her mother's sudden burst of voice made her jump. "Why aren't going to college Leave now, before your father finds out!" snapped Mrs. Padma. Feeling the disappointed tears welling up inside, Ridz silently bowed her head. "I am dressed for college," she reasoned to herself, "she just forgot." However, this thought was of little comfort.

Assuming, that for once, her daughter had forgotten the time, Mrs. Padma went about eating the food Ridz had prepared. Ridz left quietly. The hot tears fell fast and thick, but no one noticed the small "woman" crying silently as she walked down the crowded street. She headed towards the zoo and spent her first day of womanhood chatting to the animals.


PART 3
Mrs Padma sat down and began eating the rice Ridz had had so lovingly prepared. She took no thought to thank Ridz for the meal. Padma had noticed the omission, however, for the voice of her childhood came rushing back, as if it had been yesterday.

thank you...(in a whisper) did I say it right, Daddy?"
How happy were those memories! Then her mind sped to the day she announced to her parents that she was getting married.

"Padma, he's not a good man. We forbade you from ever seeing him again because He 'is loud and stubborn

"But Daddy, I love him! and he loves me, I know he does! He wouldn't have asked me to marry him if he didn't!" Padma's father sat down on the sofa beside her and looked into the blue eyes of his only child.

"Daddy, where does it say that i can't marry someone who is a doctor and who is also stubborn
"I don't see how it's sin to marry someone I love!" As she said this, Padma left her parents' home, and turned her back on everyone who truly loved her. The next day she got married and left her home, to live with her husband in Mumbai. Padma tried to suppress these painful memories, but they came crashing through her consciousness as a giant wave pounds the sand.

Padma thought of the day Ridz was born. She was so proud of her baby! Padma could still see the abundance of beautiful, black hair crowning Ridz's tiny head . And those wide blue eyes! Nurses from every department of the hospital would come, and gaze at the beautiful Indian baby with blue eyes. Every feature of Ridz face was indian, except those clear pools of blue staring up at her mother. How special Padma thought her new baby was!

Then Padma remembered her husband's reaction to his new baby daughter
Ladki paidha hua.. he muttered angrily, "what do I want with a girl? I must have a son! I am the eldest son of my father, and someday, all he has I will inherit. I must have a son to pass on the honored name of my family, and keep the inheritance in my name!" Padma had never seen him so angry before. It frightened her. The days that followed Ridz's birth were check marked with vivid memories of beatings and abuse. It had never stopped, really. The day Padma was born, her husband stopped pretending he loved her. However, Padma would never admit this, even though she knew it to be true.

"He loves me," she would argue. "After all, we have been through a lot, and he has never left me. He would have left me if he didn't love me. That proves it!"

"Twenty one years," she sighed. "can it really be so long ago?" She took another bite of rice. "Someday, I want to go back to my home I believe Dad & Mom left the house to any children I might have. That's what it had said in the will, when they died. Knowing my parents, they were 'praying' for my children, and thought they would need a place of refuge or something." At that thought,Padma angrily slammed her rice bowl down on the lacquer table. "As if Ridz needed refuge!"

PART 4

When Padma woke up that morning, she noticed that Shashank hadn't come home. This was a common habit with him, and she learned early on not to question his whereabouts. So Padma ate her breakfast, without giving her absent husband one thought. If she had known why he was absent this morning though, she might not have had any appetite for the rice Ridz made.

Shashank Gupta, would usually spend his nights and mornings in a smoke filled room in Treasures Casino Majorda, gambling his inheritance away. Sometimes shanky won, but mostly he lost. In fact, he had lost more money than he realized, playing the addicting games of Pacific poker, and Blackjack. For several years, Shanky led a life of gambling excesses, causing him to sink deep in debt. His creditors had allowed Shanky to borrow money hand over fist, knowing his father was wealthy and the fact that he was also a world renowned cardiologist. Someday the old man would die, and leave his great fortune to his eldest son. This is what they were counting on, and so was Shashank
Today would be different, however. After spending three hours in front of a Pachinko machine's hypnotizing lights, Shashank felt someone tugging at his shoulder.

"What do you want?" he asked impatiently.

"Your father is dying. Come quickly." Shashank obeyed immediately.

Mr Veer Gupta had led a long life. Now he wanted to die peacefully, confident in the knowledge that the honorable family name would continue for several more generations. He had disapproved of his son's choice of wife, for he had hoped that Shashank would choose a woman of his own Status and Caste. The Social worker, blue ' eyed Padma , (with no heritage), was not what he had hoped for. But Mr. Veer knew how hard his son was trying to be worldly, and thought it was somewhat humorous. Shashank had a lot to learn before he would be as wise as his ancestors. Years would add wisdom to his son.

However, several hours ago, Mr. Veer received word of his eldest son's gambling fever and large debts. Many of Shankank's excesses were told him in great detail. The longer he listened, the angrier he became. This was no longer a laughing matter. His eldest and most honored son had disgraced the ancient family name, exposing it to ridicule. He must save face, (save honor), and do it quickly, for Mr. Veer knew that soon, he would die.

Shashank touched his fathers feet and knelt beside his dying father.

"Weariness fills my heart, for your disgrace has come to the doors of my house. The inheritance that you have so long taken for granted is given to Sanjeevani Trust. From this hour on, I have no firstborn son." A stunned Shashank stared disbelievingly at his father.

"Father, if I do not pay the creditors their money, they will kill me ... or worse!" Shashank was visibly shaken. Beads of sweat ran down in rivulets on his face. The "or worse", was in Shashank's mind, more terrifying than death.

"I have no firstborn son," his father repeated. Mr. Shashank would not even look at his dishonored offspring. Shashank opened his mouth to protest, but the words would not come. He knew his father would never reverse the death sentence he had just given. This was how Mr. Veer was going to punish his son. Silently, Shashank left his father's house for the last time

When Ridz returned home that evening, she found her mother standing by the window, sobbing. Concerned, Ridz started to cross the room, but Padma heard her coming, and motioned her to stop.

"Ridzi , the police were just here. Your father killed himself this morning. He jumped off a bridge ..." Padma's voice trailed off. Collecting her thoughts she added, "They found his body two hours ago." She stood gazing out the window, tears streaming down her face.

Suddenly, as if something within her snapped, Padma's sorrow turned into rage. She looked up to heaven and screamed, "You win!" Angrily, she began stuffing suitcases with clothes and small belongings. "Get up, riddhima. We're leaving!" Ridz was huddled on the floor, crying. She quickly obeyed.

Riddhima packed frantically, as if running from some evil person who was threatening her life. ButPadma , in her wrath against God's judgment, moved with a cold bloodedness that made Riddhima even more frightened than she was already. The packing was done without any thought. Soon they had everything within eyesight, jammed into four suitcases.

"Where are we going?" she asked. Padma didn't hear her daughter's frightened question, for they were in a taxicab before Ridz could close her mouth.

"To the airport", Padma commanded, "and step on it!"

"Which one?" asked the startled cab driver.

"The closest one!"

The cab ride was quiet, except for the occasional hiccup fromRidz , who had been sobbing all evening. With the oncoming of darkness, Mumbai city became alive with bright neon signs. The sidewalks were crowded with carefree people, coming and going from one store to the next. All this remained unnoticed byRidz . In one evening, her whole world had turned upside down. It seemed ages ago since she last visited the zoo, chatting to any creature who would listen. Her loneliness suddenly became terrifying. Ridz leaned her head against her mother's shoulder for comfort, but Padma jerked it away. She had not forgotten her first beating from Shashank came when he found out that Ridz was a girl, and not a boy. With a bowed head, Riddhima turned to the cab door for comfort.

Forty-five minutes later, they reached the airport. After paying the fare, Padma picked up two of the suitcases and told Ridz to do the same. They were a bit heavier than Ridz could easily manage, but with some determination, she was able to keep up with her mother's fast walk. When Padma came to a sudden stop, Ridz bumped against her.

"Sit here, and don't move." Ridz obediently sat down on one of the yellow benches, her eyes never leaving the ground. A single tear slid down her cheek and splashed onto the airport linoleum.

"What's down there that you find so interesting?" asked a voice in hindi .

Ridz understood Hindi perfectly, but was too shy to look up and see who was speaking to her. Maybe the voice was speaking to someone else, she decided.

"I said, 'What's down there that you find so interesting?'" the voice repeated slowly, thinking that maybe she didn't understand Hindi.

Ridz was now certain someone was talking to her. Slowly, she tore her eyes from the linoleum square she had been focusing on, and lifted her head cautiously to see who was speaking to her. Her eyes looked directly into the face of a grinning, young man. She blinked her eyes to see whether it was truly Mr Armaan mallik the owner of Mallik group of Business standing there. Upon seeing her blue eyes he let out a surprised gasp. They were the most beautiful pair of blue eyes he had ever seen! He couldn't help comparing them to fountains of deep blue water. She had obviously been crying, which was the reason he had spoken to her in the first place.

He had watched a girl in a red suit , approach the benches, struggling to carry two, heavy suitcases. He noticed the way she kept her head bowed, and had witnessed the solitary tear that told him she was crying. Feeling sorry for her, he decided to try and cheer her up. He was unprepared, however, for the look in Ridz's face. Feeling embarrassed, he repeated the question for a third time. But, before he had the words out of his mouth, ashort , heavy headed woman sat down next to the short, black haired girl. "Surely, that isn't her mother," he thought to himself. Padma's abrupt coming silenced him, for the young man decided it was time to end the one-sided "conversation." He prayed the girl would not get in trouble for anything her mother thought he might have said, for Padma's face betrayed that she was not happy. "Please God, don't let the girl get in trouble for something I did. And please, help me keep my mouth shut!"

God answered before he asked, for Padma had not noticed him. Her mind was brooding upon the fact that her Shashank had left her. ("He loves me," she would argue. "After all, we have been through a lot, and he has never left me. He would have left me if he didn't love me. That proves it!") Those words echoed in her ears.

Ridz was left in solitude to wonder about the grinningDelhi . She felt like laughing, every time she thought of him turning red with embarrassment. For the first time that day, she almost felt happy.

Mother and daughter sat there for several hours, waiting for their airplane, occupied with their own thoughts. No signs of affection or concern came from Ridz's mother, a fact that did not escape the young man.


P.S i have update part 4 of f ff.. i'm terribly sorrie 4 delay...
plzz leave ur comments/criticisms
thank you😊😊
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OYE HOYE!!!! new writer on the block huh?? it was awesome.... a gr8888888 update .... continue soon n am sorry cld not comment on ur oder ff... will in a while but just so u know i read it n it was seriously brilliant!!!!
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WOW Lakhshmi... another one???...lol...😳 loved the concept...continue soon


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nce updte wil b lkin 4wrd to the updtes
lkin da descirption
cnt wait 2 gt stuck into thsi aswel lol
updte soon
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wow didi
thanks soooooooooooo much for the PM
and continue soooon
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i lyk th intro...plz pm me whn u upd8
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ur a wonderful😳 šŸ‘ā­ļøwritter soits necessary that u mist continue it so please continue it and also send pm

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I liked your FF and please PM me when you continue
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sad part....plz bring armaan in2 th pic...i m missing him...😭
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Originally posted by: mossfur

I liked your FF and please PM me when you continue



thnxx a lott.. wil pm u nxt tym don' worry😊😊

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