Eternal Lovers discntd. :[ - Page 2

Originally posted by: ~Rinki~

u want me too? well i thought ppl didnt like it so i stopped...but if u want ill continue this one asap just tell me if u want me to k?

yes this one and enthralled too i loved both

awesome.. awesome! bravo~ loved the story immensely...

please do continue asap!!!

awesome work rinki!

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Originally posted by: superstar15

yes this one and enthralled too i loved both

haha thanks a LOT!! lolz umm im working on this one rite now hoping to make a long part nd when i finish this part ill work on enthralled i'll probably have it up either tomorrow or the day after depending on my pace and if i get to use the comp.

Originally posted by: lil_desi_goddes

awesome.. awesome! bravo~ loved the story immensely...

please do continue asap!!!

awesome work rinki!

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oh wow! lolz u are soooooooo sweet and kind

im glad u liked it will cont asap

thnx a lot im glad at least some one likes it lol

Note- in the beginning I said that prem's moms name is Maya but im changing it back to Gayetri so ignore the maya mom in the last parts…from now on Prem's mom is Gayetri, dad is Lalit, Heer's mom is Teji and dad is Balraj so no confusion ohkayz? If you have a problem and don't get it ask me and I'll clear it up. ~Rinki

Part 4

The next day came with a bright and happy atmosphere. The adults were already downstairs chatting and eating when the kids barely started waking up. Heer came downstairs and greeted the elders. After a few minutes, Gayetri told Heer to go wake up the others as they had plans for today. Nodding, she walked upstairs and headed to wake Prem first.

~~Prem's room~~

She knocked first and when no reply came she opened the door and entered silently. The room was empty and the sound of the shower on was heard. She smiled and walked to the messy bed and placed the pillows right and folded the blanket and made it look perfect. Seeing some clothes on the chair, she picked them up and walked to the closet and hung them up. She turned back to see a notebook lying open on the table. Her curiousty won over and she picked it up. Sitting on the bed, she turned it to the date of yesterday.

Today I met her…Heer. She seems nice and sweet but looks like she doesn't have a voice, she didn't speak at all yesterday during dinner. Hay bhagwaan mujhe tumne kaisi patni di hai…jo bolti bhi nahin!

"Main bolti nahin hoon…uski ye himat, kaisi bate kar raha ha. Bol toh aise raha hai jaise khud bola ho…hn chup chap to khud tha aur mujhe gungi bana diya!" she said outloud. Looking back at the journal, she continued reading, unaware that the sound of shower had stopped.

Par ye toh admit karna hoga…woh hai to bahut khoobsurat. Bilkul ek pari ki tara hai, long black hair that I want to play with, dark eyes that reflected her innocence and purity. Haila!! Who gungi ho ya na main uski khoobsurati se hi khush hoon. After all main uske saath humari ankhon se baat karlonga.

Her cheeks turned red at his indirect complement. She was about to read ahead when she heard a voice from behind her. "Reading someone's personal journal without permission". Turning around she met with a shock…Prem stood with just a towel with drops of water sliding down his chest…damn what a body. Shaking the perverted thoughts away, she stood up and looked at the ground, her face a permanent dark red. He grinned mischeiviously and walked up to her and lifted her chin. Her heart started beating faster and faster and her breathing became deeper and heavier. Her eyes met his as he leaned his head down, closer to hers…closer and closer. His lips were next to her ear as she felt herself being hugged by him.

"Tumhe meri har cheez pe haaq hai…ab toh mera sab khush tumhara hua…chahe woh meri journal ho ya main khud". He leaned back and looked at her face, her eyes staring into his. He grinned once again with mischeif and said, "As for me in a towel only, aadat dal lo darling shaddi ke baad isse bhi kam mein dekhna hoga". She looked at him shocked and surprised, he was flirting with her and here she thought he was sidha sadha. Just then she heard Teji calling her so she looked at him and spoke, "Ma bula rahi hai".

"Toh?"

"Mujhe jana hoga".

"Kyun?"

"Kyunki ma bula rahi hai iss liye".

"Kyun?"

"Koi kam hoga".

"Toh?"

"Main jaon?" she looked at him and asked quietly unknowingly asking for his permission. This did not go unnoticed by Prem though and he smiled sweetly and nodded. She smiled back and ran out of the room, stopping at the door and looking back at him, she touched her lips and sent him a flying kiss. He tripped and fell on the bed at that, she laughed and ran away.

~~Fast Forward~~

Everyone's awake and in the living room.

Tannu was talking with meher when she realized something. She jumped up suddenly, shocking the others and scaring some of them. Teji looked at her niece warely and wondered what she was up to now.

Tannu- ma ek baat mujhe batao ki shaadi ke cards aur murahat ka kaam hogaya?

Teji- haan hogaya

Tannu- kab

Teji- bahut pehle tum chinta mat karo main aur tumhare papa sab kuch pehle se hi soch chuke hain theek hai?

Tannu- okay! If you say so ma, hey meher chalo!

Balraj- ab tum dono kaun si shetani karne wale ho?

T- kya bade papa aap bhi na! hum aur shetani! Never!

B- tannu main tumhe jaanta hoon bacha

T- hehe well hum dono to shopping karne jare hain, you know for the engagement, the rasams and the wedding of course!

B- theek hai tum Prem, Heer, Preet aur Zaib ko bhi saath le jao

T- in sab ko? Lekin kyon?

B- so they can keep you controlled and make sure you don't do something naughty or stupid.

T- ugh theek hai

All the youngsters got up and left for the mall. The others made Heer and Prem go in one car and them in another. The four were having fun listening to songs and talking about anything and everything. In the other car though, Prem was driving silently while Heer stared at her hands quietly. The silence was tensed and made the two uncomfortable. Both reached to turn on the radio in sync and their hands touched sending shocks down their backs. She moved her hand back but he held it and placed it on his thigh. She looked at him, he smiled while staring straight ahead and she seemed to understand as she didn't move it until they got out of the car. Everyone went their own ways separating into small groups without a thought.

~~Premeer~

As soon as they entered the store and walked their way, somehow their hands found each other and held on tight. They browsed and found their perfect clothes for everything, matching with each other. After buying the clothes they walked outside with Prem carrying the bags on his insistence. As they passed the food court, Heer saw ice cream and pulled at Prem's hand like an impatient child. He looked at her and to where she was looking and seeing the ice cream raised his eyebrow. She pulled him towards the shop impatiently and he followed smiling at her childlike antics. She ate at her cone with the eagerness of a 3 year old while he watched shaking his head.

~~Preeher~~

The two of them were busy fighting to notice it was only them. Meher asked for his opinion and he started going on how that dress was ugly, didn't suit her, blah blah and blah.

Meher- if you know so much about fashion and what suits me why don't you choose one for me?

Preet- fine I will

He looked through the choices and after five minutes took out a silver lengha. It was embroided lightly in unique and different designs, it looked absolutely gorgeous. Meher gasped and took it silently praising his choice. He smiled with triumph and they spent the next 15 minutes helping each other with the choices.

~~Zainnu~

She walked towards the ladies section leaving him alone. He went to the men's clothing section and started browsing. He couldn't choose which ones to get. The same was going on with tannu and they both walked towards the middle meeting each other.

T- did you find something?

Z- no you?

T- nah. Ok how about I choose for you and you choose for me?

Z- kay! See ya in 15 minutes back here and remember to get enough pairs for the rasams along with the sigaai and shaadi

T- kay later.

They walk away and start browsing in the clothing for each other. Exacty 15 minutes later they met back in the middle and showed each other their choices. Somehow they managed to match on every single outfit which was surprising and shocking to them. After buying the clothes, they left the store and looked for the others but after not finding them they went to the food court. They found the others there eating and laughing together, they joined them and soon the group was chatting about different things at the same time.

~~Fast Forward~~ back home

When the group of six entered the house laughing and chatting, they saw the adults sitting in the living room with a couple and three kids. The kids ran upto Prem, Zaib and Preet and hugged them yelleing, "Mamu". The girls looked as the three guys each took a kid and picked them up. Soon the girls were acquainted with the newcomers. They were the juneja's daughter, Kulraj, her husband, Rohit, and their three kids, Rhea, Karan, Arjun. The kids were adorable, Karan was the oldest at 7, Rhea was 6, and Arjun was 4. Though the three loved there mamus equally, they were more closer Prem since they wouldn't leave his side at all.

Tannu excused herself and walked upstairs quietly unaware of the eyes watching her every step. She went to her balcony and sat on the swing deep in thought. "Yeh mujhe kya ho raha ha? Kyun main usske bare mein sochne lagi hoon? In thode dino mein woh mere itne kareeb kaise aagaya? Zaib…kya kar diya hai tumne mujhko?" she wondered outloud. They were teasing each other and fighting playfully but in the middle of their fights she would notice him watching her with a smile and a look in his eyes that made her shiver, she also noticed her doing the same, staring at him during dinner or when everyone sat together talking, she would look at him laugh and mess around with Preet. Downstairs Zaib was thinking the same and wondering about what he was feeling…was it love or just inflatution?

That's all folks! Well for today lolz.

Preview- skip straight to the engagement and flaskback to some "moments" between Zaib and his Tannu.

What do you think? Is it love or just a crush? Comment and tell me if you liked. Nd sorry for not making it longer but I have to do somethings around the house so I can't type a lot for this part but next one will hopefully be really long…depends on your comments!!!

one more thing i dont mean to offend anyone with the "gungi" part its just a joke btwn prem and heer plz dont take it to heart. i didn't mean to offend any1 with that nd i hope you understand that it was just a part in the writing and nothing more...thank you! ~~rinki

so nice! all are bonding! soon they all will fell in love

with each other!!11

Will be waiting 4 that day!!

continue soon!!!!!!!! 😛

awesome part cont soon plz!!!!!!! 👏

Originally posted by: ami_princess

so nice! all are bonding! soon they all will fell in love

with each other!!11

Will be waiting 4 that day!!

continue soon!!!!!!!! 😛

thank you!! dnt worry i'll show the love btwn them in the nxt couple of parts i will cont tomorrow since im almost done with the nxt part so look out for it! 😊

Originally posted by: iqbals4ever

awesome part cont soon plz!!!!!!! 👏

thank you so much! 😳😊😛 will cont asap!

Part 5

~~Engagement day~~

'Tannu!!!' Heer screamed as tannu once again teased her about Prem. Tannu and Meher giggled at her expression and ran downstairs to greet the guests, and to run away from Heer before she hit them. Downstairs the guests watched as two laughing girls ran downstairs. Tannu was wearing a black lengha with the blouse being backless and held by two single threads that were criss-crossed across her upper back and tied at the bottom, it showed her toned stomach. The long skirt had small designs at the edge and ran up the skirt in simple yet beautiful designs. Meher was wearing a blue lengha with the same style as tannu, they both had their dupattas draped on their left shoulders, half in front and half in back.

The two were matching with Zaib and Preet, who were wearing a black and blue sherwani respectively. The last days went by really fast as the invitations were sent out, and with Tannu-Zaib getting closer. Heer was soon brought down by Teji and Prem was mesmorized by her beauty. She was wearing a pink lengha with white sequences on the dupatta, blouse, and the skirt matching with Prem's white sherwani. The two sat in the chairs and were given the rings to exchange. Applause ran across the room along with Preet and Zaib's cheers and whistles. Everyone was chatting and complimenting the couple when music was heard.

Ek kunwara- masti

Hey hey hey hey hey hey hey
Hey hey hey hey hey hey hey hey hey

Some guys started singing and dancing. Everyone turned and looked at them.

Ek kunwaara, phir gaya maara
Phas gaya dekho, ye bechaara

Preet started singing pointing to Prem who glared at him.

Ek kunwaara, phir gaya maara
Phas gaya dekho, ye bechaara

Zaib sang coming up to Preet and grinned at Prem who was shaking his head.

Do din ki hai ye chaandni
Phir kaari kaari raat hai
Tu maan jaa dulhe raaja

They sang together coming to Prem and Heer and dancing a little. They ran away from Prem who was trying to hit them.

(Tak ser khaaji, tak ser khaaja
Kal teri shaadi tera baj gaya baaja) -2

Some girls started singing as Preet and Zaib danced like crazy.

Ek kunwaara, phir gaya maara
Phas gaya dekho
Ye bechaara..!

Preet and Zaib sang together and shook their heads as if something really sad had happened.

Ankhiyon ke pinjre mein bandh karke
Le gayi jo tujhko pasand karke
Soni soni meethhi baatein chand karke
Kismat apni buland karke

Preet sang coming to the couple. He elbowed Prem and motioned to Heer as he sang.

Hey hey hey hey hey hey hey
Hey hey hey hey hey hey hey hey hey

Zaib and Preet sang dancing around the smiling couple. When they stopped and bowed everyone applauded and cheered. Prem took them by their ears and pulled softly and smacked them. They looked at him and said sorry while laughing and ran away. Prem looked at Heer who was laughingly shaking her head at the two brothers. He smiled back and held her hand squeezing it gently. Teji called Heer to come talk to other ladies, as she left Prem kept on watching her the entire time which didn't go unnoticed by the other kids. Once again music started but this time it was only Preet who was singing and dancing.

Waha Waha Ramji, Jodi Kya Banaai

Bhaiya Aur Bhabhi Ko, Badhaai Ho Badhaai

Sab Rasmon Se Badi Hai Jag Mein

Dil Se Dil Ki Sagaai

He sang pointing at Heer and Prem who was staring at her like a lovesick puppy.

Aapki Kripa Se Yeh, Shubh Ghadi Aai

Jiji Aur Jija Ko, Badhaai Ho Badhaai

Sab Rasmon Se Badi Hai Jag Mein

Dil Se Dil Ki Sagaai

Meher sang dancing around Heer and the other ladies. Heer smiled and kissed Meher's cheek when she hugged her.

Mere Bhaiya Jo, Chup Baithe Hain

Dekho Bhabhi Yeh, Kaise Ainthe Hain

Preet sang to Heer while pointing at Prem who scowled at him.

Aise Bade Hi Bhale Hain

Maana Thode Manchale Hain

Par Aap Ke Siva

Kahin Bhi Na Phisle Hain

Prem smiled as Preet sang and gave thumbs up to Heer.

Dekho Dekho Khud Pe, Jiji Itraai

Bhaiya Aur Bhabhi Ko, Badhaai Ho Badhaai

Sab Rasmon Se Badi Hai Jag Mein

Dil Se Dil Ki Sagaai

Meher sang when Heer smiled and looked down. Heer scowled at her and was about to smack her when she ran away and pulled her ears in a sorry. Heer smiled and hugged her.

Suno Jijaji, Aji Aapke Liye

Meri Jiji Ne, Bade Tap Hain Kiye

Mandiron Mein Kiye Phere

Pooja Saanjh Sawere

Teen Lok Taintees

Devon Ko Yeh Rahi Ghere

Meher sang walking to Prem and pulling him towards Heer who was doing aarti in the small open temple type thing. She told Prem as Heer walked with the thaal to the people in the room. Prem ran his hands over the fire and took the Prasad from Heer. After 2 more hours, the guests had departed promising to come for the wedding. Now left alone, the adults went to sleep as they had to get up early tomorrow. Kulraj sent her kids to sleep since they were yawning and her husband joined the kids leaving her to spend time with her brothers. They were all sitting around the living room and watching the TV while chatting. Prem and Heer sat with Kulraj on the sofa, Preet, Meher, Zaib, and Tannu sat on the loveseats away from the others eyes and were messing around with each other. Zaib and Preet were poking the girls and tickling them making the girls wiggle and laugh as they were ticklish.

Tannu- Zaib stop'hehe'hahaha'stop na!

Zaib- not until you tell me that tum mujhse pyar karti ho

T- why would I say that'ahahaha

Z- because you know you do

T- haha ok ok haha k stop and I'll say it

Zaib stops and waits for her to get her breath back. After she can fully breathe she looks at him waiting for her to say 'I love you'. She smiles at him and then stands up still looking at him she walks backwards, sticking her tongue at him runs away laughing. The others watched confused as Zaib chased after her yelling her name, they ignored it as them joking around and didn't think about it again. Outside in the garden Zaib had caught up to Tannu and now they were lying on the ground staring at the sky. Tannu thought back to the last couple of days and how she was falling for him. She had to talk to him about it, sure they flirted but she needs to know what he feels.

T- Zaib main tumse bahut important baat karna chati hoon

He sat up and looked into her eyes'eyes that reflected her inner feelings and he saw the love she had for him. How many times had he seen that in some girls' eyes? But this was the first time it affected him like this, taking his breath away as her eyes twinkled and shined with adoration for him, and his for her. 'Tum mujhse pyar karti ho'. She looked at him shocked and surprised.

T- what?

Z- that's what you wanted to tell me, that you love me

T- i'

Z- well I want you to know that I love you too

Tannu looked him and smiled and asked him, 'what makes you think im in love with you?

Z- your eyes

They both were standing and he walked forwards as she walked backwards.

Z- the way you search for me in a room when im not there

T- ''''''''.

Z- the way you start breathing heavily when im standing close enough for me to hear your heartbeat get faster

T- well aren't you an expert?

Z- no I can just read your eyes and your feelings better than you can

T- well I don't love you

Z- don't you?

T- nope'no way!

She was smiling as was he. They heard Meher calling for them to come back inside, so she ran away leaving him alone to think about her and her mischievous smile. Later on when everyone was asleep, Tannu lay there thinking about Zaib and their little confession. She was glad that their feelings were in the open now. Her cell phone rang breaking her thoughts; she looked at the caller Id and smiled when it read Zaib.

T- Hello?

Z- Don't you love me baby?

T- Zaib go to sleep its late

Z- Nope not until you tell me your answer

T- Goodnight!!!

She hung up and turned to sleep when she heard noises. Turning around she saw a ladder peaking from the edge of the balcony. Shaking her head, she walked over and saw Zaib coming up the ladder. She waited for him to get all the way up with her arms crossed. When he came up, he saw her tapping her foot with a raised eyebrow looking at him. He smiled and led her inside. They ended up spending the next couple of hours talking and falling asleep on the bed. She lay cuddling to his side with her head on his chest and her arm around his stomach while his arm was around her waist; they held each other tightly and closely.

how was that? hope ya'll liked and enjoyed. please comment and tell me what you thought of it! thank you!!

Preview- next part will be straight to the wedding as i want to get to the part where the twist starts muahaha! *cough cough* anywayz comment and i will update sooner with longer parts! ~~ <3 rinki