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Posted: 17 years ago
#51

Originally posted by: yourmom

awww such an awesome part!- - -thnkxxx...glad yu like itt😉😉😉 angad is sooo swweet and cute....- - -hahah he izz..in hizz ownn style!!!hes afraid to be in another relationship cuz of one bad one while kripa wants to find someone who'll run a business with her...- - -yeepp!!!!bothh opposite butt deyyy opposite attractzz!!!.total opposite....its gunna be fun watching these to interact with eachother...cant wait 😊- - -hahah...welll tell mee if yu find itt fun or not!!!hahah!!!thnkxxx..nxt prt will bee up shortly!!!



Originally posted by: sujalangad_rock

kool partt - - - thnkxx adii!!!
so Mr. Angad is divorced... - - -haha he iz!!!!!
i wonder what will happen when AK meet...- - -hahah welll wait ndd yu will find out in daa nxt prt!!!!!lol i bet it will b a dyanamite... - - -hmm yu think!!!lol think again!!!!
btw is Alli going wiht KRipa???- - -hahah nopp nott rite now!!! idkk if she will join her lter on or not!!!dependzz lter on!!! so that she can b hooked up with Josh - - -hahahh hmmm welll we will see!!!!
continue soon- - -will doo in few minz!!!!



Originally posted by: *F^a^i^z^a*

awesome part;- - -thnkxx faiza!!!they have opposite thoughts and when opposites meet then the sparks begin;- - -hahah rite on..tookk daa wrddzz rite out of my mouth!!!! hmm kripa is looking for someone who likes business; eg josh and angad for no one;- - -hahah welll yu duntt knee yu have hitt daa mark!!!yu will soon knw wht i meann in daa nxt prt!!! lol he just enjoys life with sunrise and sunsets ;- - -hahaha...he sure doez!!! a nature lover;- - -rite on!!! he seriously needs to get a life; - - -hahah he will oncee kripaa enterzz hizz life!!!they both too boring in there own place; she needs to get out of business and he needs to open up to work and life; I liked the character; awesome part - - -hahah sure do!!!lol thnk faiza!!! glad yu like it!!!!

loved it. - - -thnkzz!!!

Faiza



Originally posted by: cutie13

gr8 part - - - thnkxxx cuite!!!
they both have opposite thougths - - -haha yepp ndd opposite attractzz rite!!!
but hey opposite attracts 😉 😆 - - -hahah damnn rite!!! tookk myy wrdzz!!!
cont soon- - -will do in few minz!!!!



Originally posted by: rima791

what an interesting part 😛- - -aww thnkxx rimaa glad yu like itt!!! loved josh's character 😉 - - -haha glad yu doo!!!
wow so angad and mishti had this thing 🤢 oh well its not there 😆 - - -hahah thk god rite!!!!
can't wait till AK meet each other well i guess this phone call will bring - - -hmmm well yurr wishh will cum tru in da nxt prt!!! wait 4 itt!!!somethign intersting 😳 - - -haha yu bet!!!
hope you cont soon and thanks for letting me know about MOTW thing 😳 👏 - - -srryy i wuzz bzzyy butt now imm baqq on track!!! ndd itz kk...congratzzz....


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Posted: 17 years ago
#52

Originally posted by: superstar15

its great to have u back - - - thnkxxx superstar!!!!and now u have 4 ffs to cont waiting for ur updates i read all ur ffs - - -hmmm in knww!!!!!lol i knww i doo..butt im on vacation soo imm like i can handle 4 fickkz!!!😉😉

Originally posted by: ShOrTy15

gujugirl--please continue soon!!- - -heyy...i will def cont in few minzz!!!! srryyy 4 da long wait!!! 😛

Originally posted by: ShOrTy15

hey where are you?- - - hmmm well i've been home..ndd bzzy latelyy!!! soo srry!!!

please update soon 😕 - - - will do in few minz!!!!😉

waiting...waiting...waiting 👏 - - - srryy 4 daa long wait!!!

good luck on your exams 😃 😃 😃 - - - thnk yu thnk yuu!!!

Originally posted by: koolaries4

amaing.. - - -aww thnkxx yuu koolaries!!!do continue when u r free..- - -i will do in few minz!!!

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Posted: 17 years ago
#53

Originally posted by: princessmiyaa

haha 🤣 i loved it...great start!!!- - - awww thnkxxx miyaa!!!lol glad yur lovin it!!!!😉 😉

kripa and aali's friendship is quite interesting and unique in a way!!! they blurt out everything which is needed to make a pure and truthful friendship!!! - - - hmmm..itzz real frndship!!! ndd very unique in der ownn way!!!!i luvv itt!!!it sure izz..ndd yur absolutely rite!!!

wow thank god kripa didn't take her two lousy broken engagement to heart...she will find much better guy..of course ANGAD!!! 😳 - - - lol...damnn ritee one!!!!

and angad poor guy just loves sunset... - - - hahaha he will love more den sunsett afterr kripaa enterz hiz life!!!!

josh is funny..will he be seen with aali or what - - - hahah he sure iz!!!! well i haventt decided abt doz 2 yet!!!!

loved it...great work there 😳 😳 - - - thnkxxx miyaa!!!!

it's ok take your time..and continue when you are free 😉 - - - hahah thnkxx thnkxx!!! sryy wuzz reall bzzyy!!! so cundtt cont!!!

Miya 😉 😉

Originally posted by: ShOrTy15

Another One 😃 😃 😃 - - -lol yeepp antherr one..of my borin fick...srryy yu gotta deal w/ it!!!!

wow--here i am trying to catch up to one then your other two --race and destruction--i had barely caught up now that you have started another one...i am lost yet AGAIN 😭 😭 😭 - - -hahaha awww soo srryyy nadia!!! butt itzz okk sweetie!!! take yurr time ndd itzz ok if yu cantt catch up!!!!!

no no--seriously i am not complaining..because you are a great writer and i can never get tired of reading it as much as i can 😉 😉 - - -hahah thnk yu thnk yu!!! butt im serious...do take itt easyy ndd itzz kkk if yu cantt comment daily...im justt gladd ppl still love itt nd read it!!!

this is totally different than your other three...it is nothing like chase where you're on a run for your life... - - -hmmm it sure iz....i likee mystery but wanted too be out of da way nd start sumthin diff nd new!!!hope ppl likee it as much as dey loved chase!!!

nothing like race where you thought of doing something better for yourself and yet ends up as a death list... - - -hahaha..i knw i knw!!!!

nothing like destruction where it's about sports and success...and a reporter who will get through thick and thin.. 😉 😉 - - -hmmmmm wow yurr on a rolll buddy!!!!lol hahaha..

i know i am getting sidetracked but i just wrote it down to make myself remember what each ones is about 😆 😆 - - -hahah itzz kk itz kk.i justt lovee readinn yurr lovly commentz!!!

back to this story...Mr right wrong--lol i love the title---very catchy...and like always goes along with the concept of your story 👏 👏 - - -hahaha....thnk yuu thnk yu!!!

Part 1:
wow kripa broke her engagement twice 😕 --it's good that she did..she didn't deserve the jerks either way 😳 😳 - - -hahaha rite on!!!!

love their genuine friendship..how no matter how many differences they have...or how they got two different personalities they're still their for each other 😉 😉 - - -i luvv derr frndship tooo!!!!! itzz imp 4 grlzz 2 have a frnd likee dat!!!whozz pure ndd lovely nd alwyzz derr 4 yu!!!!

hmm so kripa is going for man hunt--she will def get lucky..because she won't find any one better than Angad- - -hahaha hmmm letzz seee iff these twoo cann handle eachh other or wht!!!

i liked how kripa was battling in her mind and comparing herself to aliyah..was funny..it had me cracking the whole part.. - - -hahaha....gladd i cann crackk yuu up!!! cuz i wuz crackin while writin abt it 2!!!

Part 2:
wow so aliyah sure takes care of kripa like her own sister...and she actually cares about kripa's feelings..how sweet is that 😳 😳 😳 - - -she doez!!!!cuzz shez a tru frnd!!!

finally angad comes in paly.. - - -hahaha..he doez!!!

dude has got addicted to sunset and sunrise... - - -hahaha hez gunna bee addicted to whole lot more!!! wait nd see wht!!!

i loved how when josh was having a serious talk with his older brother angad kept on delaying his answers because he didn't want to answer them - - -hahaha lol i knww wht a era...younger bro havin a serious talk w/ older bro!!!lol...hahaha

and he fits kripa's list perfectly..he was rich but he just gaved it to his yonger brother because his life was pretty much messed up by none other than the GREAT MISHTI 😡 - - -hahah he sure doezz...cuzz either wayy dey're matchh madee in heaven!!!!!lol well mishti iss mishti after allll!!!

i feel soo bad for angad..poor guy is hiding under a shield.. - - -hahah i knwww hee def needzz kripaa 2 help him out!!!!

i think he will be perfect for kripa and vice-versa..they both can help each other get out of their shells.. - - -hahahh took wrdzz rite out of my mouth!!!

loved when the phone rings and josh was telling him who knows it might be his future wife..that was funny - - -hahah cuzzz joshh knwzz daa future!!!lol ndd he wuzz rite!!!

i think it's kripa on the line calling to make reservation and what josh said will be so true...but they have yet to see that.. - - -hahah yu thoughtt rite!!!!lol...rite on!!!

they couldn't be more wrong about the double meaning talk 😆 - - -hahaha....double meanin talk!!!

another great ff...will be reading this as well...lol now instead of two i got four up my sleeves...😉 😉 😉 - - -aww thnkxxxx nadia!!!!lol glad yur likin itt!!!

please continue soon - - -will do in few minz!!!

wanting to know about AK's first meeting and their views on each other- - -hmmm yu will soon knww abt emm in da nxt prt!!!!

loved it..amazing mind bl0wing- - -hahah thnk yu thnk yu!!!such wunderful commentz!!!

Nandia

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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: shockalot

WOW! That's all i can say to describe this! - - - gladd yuu like it!!!!You have some AMAZING writing skills! - - - aww soo sweet of yu 2 say dat!!! thnkxxx 4 daa complimentz!!!I adore the way you describe everything, - - - glad yu like it!!!and your sense of humour is just another plus point!- - - aww thnk yuu😉 I'm a very picky reader i must admit, but I'm really looking forward to how this story of yours turns out, it looks outstanding so far! Keep up the good work!- - - awww thnkxxx shazia!!!! 4 such lovely commentz nd compliemntzz....welll next prt izz cummin in few minz!!! do tell how it iz!!!😉

-Shazia-

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Chapter Two

Kripa didn't notice how lovely the little town was until she'd driven halfway through it. The four-hour drive down to the resort had been filled with thoughts of dread, panic, and the fancy clothes Aaliyah had talked her into buying as inspiration. She was still trying to decide to whether the best plan was to do a dignified sulk for the next two week or to wear fancy clothes and develop a better attitude, when she realized how charming everything around her was.

The shady old streets were lined with thick-trunked trees and the antique storefronts were painted in faded roses and blues and yellows with a gold-edged lettering in the windows. Stores with family names that had probably been there for generations. The whole town smelled of dust and honey-suckle, and Kripa drove through it all and thought of shoes and ice-cream cones and football games and all the things she'd read about but never known.

This would have been a lovely place to grow up, she thought. This would have felt like a home. Maybe my life would have been different if I'd started out in a place like this—a place full of dusty and sunlight and trees and possibilities.

And then she shook her head. Pull yourself together, Kripa, she told herself. You have a goal and a plan. Concentrate.

She turned right at a low slung while building that said Khanna's Place in pink neon over the double wood doors and slowed to look at it. It had to be a bar or a restaurant—the parking lot was the biggest she's seen in the town so far—but it was the most low-key bar she's ever seen, no signs for beer or ads for Wet-T-shirt Wednesdays, just an ancient handpainted "Welcome" sign in white on the knotty-pine doors. Even the bars in this town were clean and cute. She's landed in Disneyland Kentucky.

Past Khanna's Place, the road began to wind into the woods. The subtle light felt cool, almost sensuous as she drove slowly under the trees, savoring the woodsy smell. The woods were dim and secret, and when she shivered, it wasn't just from the chill of leaving the sun. There's something…exciting about the woods, she thought. Maybe something will happen here. Maybe I'll fall in love. Maybe everything will work out here. Aali said all I have to do is choose. Well, I choose to be happy and successful and…and unafraid. I'll be like Aali. Absolutely fearless. I'll even get up early tomorrow and find the lake, and I'll go skinny-dipping. I really will.

Then she rounded the last turn, and thought, Oh, maybe not.

The resort stood before her looking like a log cabin with a thyroid problem. Much larger than it had seemed in the brochure, it rose up in ranks of clustered cabins, carefully stacked like children's blocks at slight angles to one another, each with a private natural-wood deck.

Oh, no, Kripa thought. It's too big.

Even worse, there seemed to be at least a thousand people milling around. If she went skinny-dipping in the morning, she's probably turn up in vacation slides all over the Midwest—" And here's a shot of that crazy woman who used to go skinny-dipping every morning."

She sighed and pulled up next to the hotel entrance.

I hate this! Kripa thought. She steeled herself and walked through the big carved double doors into the lobby, looking cool and efficient in her silk suit, detached from everyone around her. One of the generic distinguished—looking men Aaliyah had promised her held the door for her as she went in, but she was concentrating so hard on maintaining her image that she noticed him as a possibility only in passing. Later. One thing at a time. Where had all these people come from?

The desk manager smiled at her as she signed the register card. "Welcome to The Cabins, Miss Shama."

"Sharma."

"Of course, Sharma. I'm Josh Khanna. We're really glad you're here."

Kripa repressed the impulse to ask why. Josh Khanna was tall, dark, and ruggedly handsome, and he was glad to see her. It would take a woman with an extremely bad attitude to assume that what this man was truly glad to see was her Visa card.

"You'll want to see my Visa card," Kripa said.

"No, no, that was all taken care of when you reserved by phone. You're in cabin 9A. Up past the tennis court there and beyond the croquet lawn. You can park your car right behind the cabin."

The croquet lawn. Well, it could be worse. They'd have to stop knocking balls around when the sun went down. And at least she wasn't staying in that rabbit warren of a hotel with God-knows-who….

From behind her, a lilting soprano bubbled, "Was that cabin 9A, you said?"

The manager said, "I certainly did, Miss Saxena," and Kripa turned.

Miss Saxena, young, brunette, and built like a Barbie doll, had eyes of cornflower brown, a tilted-up nose, and a genuinely sweet smile on her lovely full lips. She looked about twenty-five or twenty-four.

Great, Kripa thought. My competition. I bet nothing on her droops. I bet she doesn't even need fancy clothing.

"I'm Anjali Saxena," the Barbie doll said, holding out her hand to Kripa. "I'll be right next door in 9B."

"Oh, good," Kripa said.

"And I was wondering, if you'd mind, could you possibly give me a lift to the cabin? With my luggage? The bellboys here are real busy…"

"No problem," Kripa said. "I'd be happy to." She took her key from Josh and tried hard to ignore him when he called after them. "Don't you ladies forget the luau tonight?"

"Oh, we sure won't," Anjali squealed back.

Luggage said a lot about a person. Kripa realized as she walked Anjali to the car. She herself had one charcoal-gray suitcase and a briefcase. Anjali had three pieces of pink luggage. Guess which one of us has more fun, Kripa thought as she helped Anjali load her bags into the car. Then she began to drive to the cabin, going slowly to avoid all the people who dodged in front of her on the way, evidently having such a good time that they wanted to die where they stood.

Kripa glared at one of them. "This place had too many people."

"Oh, no." Anjali waved to someone. "I love people."

"I sensed that."

Anjali smiled at her. "They say it's a lot quieter near the cabins."

Kripa looked at her curiously. "I'd think you'd prefer the hotel."

"No." Anjali waved to someone else. "I'm planning on seeing all the guys I can while I'm here, and you know how nosy people in hotels are."

"What do you mean, 'seeing'?"

"Oh, you know—dance, talk, laugh… Have as much fun as possible," Anjali said cheerfully. "I'm getting married next month. This is my last chance."

"Oh," Kripa said after a pause. "Well, good luck."

"Thank you." Anjali turned and looked at her. "Why did you come here?"

Good question. She was going to strangle Aaliyah. "Oh, you know—to dance, talk, and laugh." Kripa glared at all the people swarming around her car. "Maybe go skinny-dipping in the pool."

"Are you allowed to do that?"

Kripa closed her eyes. Anjali really was as dumb as a rock. "If you get up very early," she said.

"Oh. I thought maybe you were writing a travel article or something."

"A travel article? Why?"

"Well, why else would somebody all businesslike like you be up here?"

"To meet men?" Kripa suggested.

"Oh, sure," Anjali said and giggled.

Cabin 9, when they found it after two wrong turns, was several yards from the croquet field, and Kripa cheered up when she saw how private it was. She was even happier when she took her briefcase inside. The bedroom, paneled in knotty pine, was compact but cozy, and Kripa dropped her briefcase on the patchwork—covered double bed with a sigh of relief. This was going to be fine. She needed a rest, and this was lovely. Even if she didn't meet anyone…

She stopped. Of course, she was going to meet someone. She had a plan. She squared her shoulders and went outside to unload the luggage.

Kripa was putting the last of Anjali's suitcases on the ground when a man strolled down the path with his hands in his pockets.

"Need any help?" he asked lazily as he came near her, and she was forced to turn and look at him. He was big, broad, and slow-moving, dressed in plaid flannel and denim. His hair was thick, dark and untrimmed, his black-brown eyes were lazy, and his nose had definitely been broken at least once in the past; it lurched slightly to the left over his full, neat curved lips. But the finishing touch for Kripa was his generous, cream-colored hat.

Unbelievable.

Then he smiled at her—a friendly, no-come-on smile—and she almost smiled back before she caught herself. Absolutely not, she told herself. You are not going to gall for some dumb, macho, good-looking good old boy. You have a plan. He is not part of your plan. Besides, he looks like good-for-nothing, and you're not interested in those types. Especially not this far north of the Rio Grande.

"I think I can manage." She turned to pull her suitcase out of the car. "Thank you."

"Well, hello." They both turned at the sound of Anjali's voice to see her standing at the top of the porch steps, slender and lovely, vibrating with pleasure at seeing a man.

"Anjali, this is…?" Kripa faced him.

"Angad." He touched his hat to Anjali.

"Angad, this is Anjali," Kripa said. "Angad has offered to help with the luggage."

"Well, you sweet thing, you," Anjali cooed. "I'd adore your help. Mine's the pink stuff down there."

"Coming right up," Angad said, and he bent to pick up all of Anjali's remaining pieces of luggage.

"You must be so strong." Anjali beamed at him.

"Nope. Just too lazy to make two trips." He ambled up the steps to the porch.

Well, there's the start of a beautiful relationship, Kripa thought, and took her suitcase into the cabin.

Edited by GuJuHoTnEsS - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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ok so its not me....this fan fic is hilarious!!
loved the sarcasm!! kripa is sooo mooody!! hehe and its amusing!!

Can't believe Kripa actually wanted to choose between being in a sulky mood or getting a better attitude…jeeez…what are we gonna do about this girl!!

But the skinny dipping comment was hilarious! haha!! then she changes her mind when she sees the crowd!! Haha!

And she describes the resort like a thyroid problem!! What is wrong with her!! she sees everything in a negative way…totally puts off my mood…well not really cuz her comic timin is funny!! hehe
and anjali...believed her when she said that! godd anju is hilarious toooo!!

I love kripa' view on her "Great, Kripa thought. My competition. I bet nothing on her droops. I bet she doesn't even need fancy clothing. "

This is Kripa is tooo much hehe

she is too bubbly and hyper
thas wat kripa needs...another person who is not soo sober and dull like her!

and haha anjali laughed when Kripa answered she was here to see men…any one seeing her state of appearance would be amused by that comment! Hehe…boy is this gonna be fun!

Kripa's reasoning for not falling for Angad was hilarious "dumb, macho good looking good old boy" she is full of compliments lol lets see what else yes she also said that he wasn't part of the so called plan…well watch her not following anything that part of her plan!! Hehe!

At least she found him attractive…well who wouldn't???

And anjali cooing at him…soo funny…and then her saying…you must be strong for carrying all the luggage and I loved angad's answer of being lazy….hehe thas Angad for you!

Great part! I looooooooooooooooooooved it very much!!!

Phew another long one! I think its this fan fic that makes me write soo much

Edited by desiqt8806 - 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: desiqt8806

reserved to comment in morning - - - lol...itzz okk sis!!!!!😉 tke yurr time!!!!

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hey excellent part..sorry cant comment lesiurly will do that at a later time..just read it...very interesting..thinkin that angad is a no good guy...wonder what will do when she finds out the truth...
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wsurely a new friendship on its way...
fab part
continue soon

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