LRL by reet(rn fic) updt by GAZAL on pg2 - Page 6

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Posted: 17 years ago
#51
wow too good
what a emotinol update
update asap
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Posted: 17 years ago
#52
the expressions r so good...................it brings tear in my eyes....
continue
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Posted: 17 years ago
#53
nice and quite an emotional part.. liked it a lot..
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Posted: 17 years ago
#54

THNK U ALL ON BEHALF OF REET....

ok den here it goes.........

njoy it....

After a quite long time…naina..n rajveer detaches frm each other….dey both starts feeling awkward……she asks…sir….aap ihaa kaise aaye….??usdinke baad aapne kisiko koi contact nehi kia…yeh sab kya ho raha hai sir…..kisne kia tha woh hamla….????????

Rajveer steels a deep breath actually…seeing her concern…..he expected more from her …at this time….. something more above dan concern…. Wat it is…..he himself is not fully aware of d fact…. But something more…dis was d most close moments dey shared…of derr relnship…

He looks thoughtful….he was thinking

Shayed avivi naina concern se jyada kuch nehi feel karti…..mere lie…ahesanmand hai sayed…par naina maine tumhare kya kar paya hu…kuchvi to nehi….aur jo vi kiya hai…who meri jimmedari tha…..u shouldn't be thankful..to me….kya hai mere naseeb me…??

…kya who mujhe kavi nehi chahegi..kya mai mohabbat kevi layek nehi….mere dost ko chin lie gaye…mera carrier tak chin goya…saare samman…jo apni balbutepe maine hasil kiya tha…palvarme chin liye gaye…ab naina mili hai wapas itne dinoke baad

…….usdin jo hua court me uske baad vi kya tum sirf itnahi kahogi…aur kuch nehi…??.

Naina kab samjhogi…???…ek tumhi sahara ho mera…aur koi nehi bacha hai…bas sirf tum…kya mai tumhare peyar ke layek hi nehi hu…naina…a lump rises on his throat…..aur saha nehi jata vagwaan…marne kiu nehi dia….?

Sir … sir kya soch rahe hai…?? kahiye na…kya hua hai aapko…ap mujhse baat tak nehi kar rahe hai…naina sounds worried….and a bit complaining voice…. Her voice brings him back frm hiz thoughts..

Ha…kya kahi tumne???

….aap kya soch rahe ho sir….kya hua kahiye na…??aap iha kaise aaye?…naina complains...
Wohsab batien badme vi ho sakta hai….pahele tum change karlo…pure vig gayi ho…thand lag jayegi…aur mujhe vi janna hai…raat ke 3 baje tum yeh ghani jangle me kya kar rahi thi…he curts naina in midway….sounding concerned…its an order cadet singh…!!!

naina shivers at dis..after such a long time….she has allwayz cried at night…recollecting dese small memories…she had so many things to tell him..to surrender herself….but wen d time came…she is feeling damn uncomfortable…she doznt know why….

a hesitation……a uncertainity…whether she should admit her love or not…if yes how…..she was not ready to deal with..she is feeling so many things but couldn't express any of dem….he is so near to her but still so distant to her…she mutters …shayed avi waqt nehi aaya.....

She obeys him and tries to find out her bag…...Ohh here it is… ..she streaches out her hand to raj...to give it.....

He by habbit tries to lift it by his right hand… and rapidly it fells down frm his hand….ahhhhh….!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Sir…wats wrong wid u…!!!! kya hua hai aapko…?

kuch nehi cadet singh don't worry…kuch nehi hua hai mujhe aap change kar lijie…

Sir stop lying…and tell me wad happened to u…??r u injured..? she groans…and for d first time… shows right on him…tell me wat is d matter actually.....

Dat automatically brings a curve in hiz lips…nothing cadet singh…goli lagi thi…nikal nehi paya….

wad…?.........!!!!!!!unlogone aapko goli mara tha…!!! aap ko goli lagi hai..??aur ap itne din usgolike sath ho….?sir aap jante hai aap kya kahe rahe hai…oh my god…!!!!!!!!!!!!!

her face pales widin a second…..kaha lagi hai…kaha lagi hai goli…louder dan first time….why don't u answer sir..?!!!!!!!!

bolne kaha de rahi hai aap…????bas sawalope sawal kiye ja rahi hai…!!

Naina…first..change….or u will get cold…!!!!rajveer tries to divert…

Sir aapko nehi lagta kuch jyada ho raha hai…!!!naina has got angry…
He gives it up…ok…shoulder pe…!!!jidd karma kab chodengi aap..?

Jab aap batein manne lagenge..!!

rajveer gets amused by her word..cant help grinning..

She comes close to him…..she touches hiz body wid concern tries to find d wound out….

It makes him feel her breath…her fingers are untying d buttons of hiz tee shirt…he stops breathing... her touch is arising passion in him…he tries hard to control himself….he wants to touch her badly…press her ...hug her tight....…with himself..touch her lips…

Finally….she has been able to strip off d shirt from his body…and..she tries to find out whr is d wound…d semi darkness of d house…makes her unsure….she is touching his n**e chest by her soft finger…rajveer is loosing hiz senses…ohh….his breathes grew more faster….she partly understands his condition….but apprehends it as uneasiness..

She gets too close to him and bents him down to her self too see d wound…she is now standing..just in front of him..bending as if hugging…he feels d urge to love her wildly…

but controls

Sir aapko kitni golia lagi hai….yeh ekse jyada lag rahi hai…

3 nai……cadet singh..! he sounded drowsy…

She is beautiful…her wet black kammej is kissing her body…her beautifull curves are prominent…d contrast of her fare glowing skin and d black kameej is simply attractive…

reflection of d fire on her face made her more adorable...he keep on staring her ..........he was unable to restrict his thoughts...naina...his love is so close to him ...touching him....so closely......as he is allmost half n**e now...as if putting fire on him .........

she is stunning...i hav to admit dis…he thinks…forgetting totally about his wounds…lost in hiz thoughts…
okkkk done for d day.....
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Posted: 17 years ago
#55
WOW 👏
WHAT A UPDATE 😃
TOO GOOD 😳
U R MEGICIAN 😛
UPDATE ASAP 😊
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Posted: 17 years ago
#56
kaise likh lete ho itni khubsurat update.....yaar superb.
the expreesions r mindblowing
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Posted: 17 years ago
#57
a very good update... well written.. pls update soon...
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Posted: 17 years ago
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THNK U ALL ON BEHALF OF REET......

HERE IT GOES ....NJOY......


Sir…!!!!

Haaa…kya…rajveer shakes hiz head…..to cut his thoughts out…

Sir …goli nikalni hogi avi…isiwaqt…infection ho gayi hai…buritarase…mujhe halat thik nehi lag rahi hai…kahin kuch galad na ho jaye…
aap koi doctorke paas kiu nehi gaye….??...u shoulnt be so careless….she gets nervous..seeing hiz condition….

U must be kidding cadet singh…!!!!i m a absconder murderer ….who will treat me…???
Rajveer smiles…

Naina feels d grief lied in hiz smile…d deep pain..

Wad should I do now…….?...naina feels d intensity

u can try it urself…rajveer replies…

Me…??....naina looks at him in disbelief…

Yes…and only u can do dis…raj anounces.. confidently…

No sir I cant…agar kuch ho gaya to???agar jyada khun bahene laga to…???maine kavi nehi kia yeh…agar aapko kuch ho gaya to…??..

.she cant loose him again….she cant pay dis anymore...

Everything in ur life has a first time cadet singh…rajveer gazed her eyes...or wanted to pass confidence...

No sir…it will pain u…

Naina be confident…I blv in u…plz try to understand…u hav to do dis…..raj assures...

Naina…has no choice but to take d risk…she understands…dat now everything depends on her…hiz life is depending upon her….

She finally agrees …ok ..par kaise…???ko sharp cheez ki jarurat hai sir..goli nikalne kelie…woh kahase milega…??

Ruko… dekho…uhape ek chaku rahe sakti hai….he indicates towards a lil lump of clothes.

Chaku….chakuse goli……its unhygienic sir !!!!!.........already infection fayl gaya hai…halat aurvi kharab ho jayegi…naina almost yells..

Cummon cadet singh ab mai aapke lie scissor s aur medical equipments lana vul goya to aap goli nehi nikalenge….rajveer tries to lighten her up…to encourage her…

usehi thoda aagme tapalo…..kam chal jayega……!!!
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she doez dat…and comes back to him…she is getting more nervous…she sits facing him…..wid trembling hands she pulls him down…

rajveer lies in front of her….keeping his head towards her lap…

Kya naina hath kiu shake kar rahi hai tumhari….jaise confidence se goli marithi truck me aisehi isbaarvi maar do….Raj says sarcastically...…to see her reaction…in a sarcoustic tone…filled wid deep pain..

She completely fridges at d comment…keeps mum…and den tries to get up…hurriedly...

but rajveer quickly catches hold of her hand and made her to sit back again….

she was so hurt at d comment dat doeznot look at him…faces other way… to control her tears…d sentence has stabbed her heart…she shivers in an unsaid pain….

Rajveer hasn't expected dis much…!!!!

God knows wad happened to rajveer seeing her like dis…he unfolds his heart to her for d first time…
he just puts his head down on her lap….and pressing it says….

bachalo……
ek akhri baar……
aagayi ho har baar ki tarah bachane isbaarvi……
ab marne to dogi nehi ….
akkhri waqt pe aahi gayi ho…hamesha ki tarah….to..bacha hi lo…
waise marna to hai hi mujhe….
par agar tumhare hathse ho jaye to kya baat hai…….
aisi maut mujhe jindegise vi jyada peyari hai…
par pata nehi kiu aj jeeneko jee kar raha hai……bohot salonke baad…
he whispers……in a magnetic tone…..
jindegi ya maut kuch to deti jao….i hav lost everything…at least tum mat jao……..
[is dis dat rajveer who was begging 4 death a few minutes ego …!!!!!!!!!!..........]

Dis make naina cry…sir….plz….chup ho jaiye….aapto mar jayenge aapko kya fark padega….jo piche chut jayega aapne unke bareme kavi socha hai…??

Kya sochu naina….kaun hai mera…koi nehi ronewala age piche……koi nehi…kisiko jarurat nehi mera…..rajveer says….fighting wid hiz own ..emotions..

Plz sir chup ho jaiye…naina moves her fingers through hiz soft stresses ..smothens it...wid a grt adore...….takes a small pause and den finishes…sayed hai sir …par aap use andekha kar rahe hai….

Rajs heart missed a beat…

Den she bend on him to tak d bullets out….she tries to feel confident…closes her eyes for a moment to gather confidence and den pushes d knife on d wound….and ….bring d bullet out of it…within a second …

aaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhh…..aaah...raj clutches nainas thigh…dat made her shivering….

but she hav no time to think about dat…she hav to do d same wid d rest two bullets…she quickly doez dat…

wid her shaking hand as raj yells in pain…

in no time after d last one she throws d knife away far…..and taks him in her arms…hugs him tightly…as if she is trying to take hiz pain……rajveer cries not only in physical pain...

raj's tears soaks in her lap….she tries her best to comfort him….rubs his back……moves her fingers through hiz stresses…tries to console him….

she feels…like heaven…as raj is so close to her……thik ho jayega…kuch nehi hoga aapko…mai hu na…aapko kuch nehi hone dungi….fikr mat karo…mai hu na apke sath…mat rou sir…plz…apki halat mujhse dekhi nehi jati….dat was enough….raj breaks into tears……he required dat badly….and clungs to her….

Itna to naseeb ho hi sakta hai ek teacher ko…..???????
DONE GUYS.......PLZZZ DO GIVE UR VIEWS..........
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Posted: 17 years ago
#59
superbbbb ud aur raj ki lines to bahot acchi thi so ,emotional very nice 👏
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Posted: 17 years ago
#60
too good
great update
a very emotinol one
especially raj dailouges
reet rocks

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