ur wish, my command k/a, l/kt, n/p, a/m

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Posted: 17 years ago
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umm... hello im new to this site and rite now i wanna add my new fanfic called "ur wish, my command". its mainly abt manthan/oc, kavya/anjali, laksh/kt, neev/prachi, adi/maithali 😊😊

the not so main pairings are abhir/bhoomi, angad/kripa, robbie/ kasturi 😊

im just messin around with the ides rite now so im not sure wat its gonna be for the body but yea. 😳

this isn't my first time writing fanfics but it is here so im not sure wat ppl here like so if anyone wants to give me a idea or something that would be great. 😳

thats all thnx

krazychik

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Posted: 17 years ago
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thnx for ur reply devdootcn
ok so here's the first part for my fic its the intro hope its good

**note- The kids are introduced at the end after all the families are introduced.

The main pairs-> Manthan/Sanjana, Kavya/Anjali, Laksh/KT, Neev/Prachi, Adi/Maithali
The other pairs-> Abhir/Bhoomi, Angad.Kripa, Robbie/Kasturi

The families:
VIRANI HOUSE--
Baa- The oldest member of the family. She is really sweet and caring to everyone. But everyone knows that LAKSH is her favorite. lol 😉 😉
Mihir- The only son of Baa, he is very kind. he really loves his family.
Tulsi- The wife of Mihir. She is a very sanskari wife, bahu, and mother. loves everyone. she is a sweet and kind lady.
Karan- The oldest son of Mihir and Tulsi. He is very smart in business, which is the reason his company is one of the best company in the world. Loves his family a lot and is a great father, son and husband.
Nandani- The oldest bahu. She is the wife of Karan. She is very sanskari and still very modern. She's an awesome bahu, wife, and mother.
Sahil- The youngest son of Mihir and Tulsi. He is also smart in business, which is why he's Karan's partner in business. He also loves his family a lot.
Ganga- Sahil's wife. She is also very sanskari and modern. She really cares and loves her family.
CONT. TOMORROW

I GOTTA GO SO I'LL ADD THE OTHER PART OF THE CHAPTER LATER SORRY BUT I HAVE TO DO MY STUPID HOMEWORK. BUT I HAVE A WEEK OFF SO I'LL WRITE A LOT IN THE NEXT WEEK. I PROMISE!!
Edited by krazychik92 - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Heyy Sounds Interesting! Got All My Fave Couples In It 😃 Lol Cont Soon!

,,xxx
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Posted: 17 years ago
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GOOD INTROS SEEMS INTERESTING 👏 CONT. SOON
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Posted: 17 years ago
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thnx guys that makes me feel more confident to kno that ppl like my idea i'll continue in a couple of hrs cuz i have to finish writin the next chap so i'll cont. soon
mucho gracias
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Posted: 17 years ago
#6

😉ok so this is the next part of the intro

hope you guyz enjoy

KHANNA HOUSE

Dadu- the oldest member of the family. he is alwayz joking around with the kids and keeps them out of trouble. he is a very sweet guy. everyone loves him.

Dilip- he is the oldest son of dadu. he is very kind, smart and and a great father. he is also a great business man along with the other main families. he alwayz keeps the kids from getting in trouble with his wife and bhabhi.

Naina- she is dilip's wife and the oldest bahu of the house. she is very sanskari and still modern. she is sweet, kind, and luvs messing with the kids.

Rohan- he is the youngest son of dadu. he helps his big brother in business and keepin the kids safe from their wives. he is really sweet, and kind. he luvs messing with the kids cuz its funny to watch them freak out. lol 😛

Veera- she is rohan's wife. she matches him, she is also sweet and kind. she also loves messing with the kids for the same reason as her husband.

Sharma House

Bade Papa- He is the oldest of this family. he is just like Dadu, messing around with the kids. he is very sweet and nice. everybody loves him for his gentle nature.

Gautim- he is the oldest son of the family. he is just like all the fathers, smart, kind, and a great business man. he also loves messing with his wife becuz he thinks her expressions are funny. lol

Damani- she's Gautim's wife. she is like all the other wives, sanskari but still modern. she gets annoyed by her husband's childish acts but secretly she luvs it. 😉

Raj- the youngest son of Bade Papa. he is also the same as his brother. he loves messing with the kids just to watch them all freak out. 😆

Mohini- Raj's wife. she is very sweet, and playful. sometimes she can be all wierd but still lovable. she is the kids favorite aunt/mother cuz of her childlike behavior.

Kapoor House

Dadu and Dadi- They are the elders of the Kapoor family. They are very sweet, loving, and kind. they love everyone equally or so they say but everyone knows that Sanjana is their favorite and weakness.

Vish- He is the oldest son of the family. he is very sweet but still strict especially towards Sanjana for a reason told later in story. he is also one of the best businessmean in the world. (see the pattern yet)

Shelly- the wife of Vish. she is very sweet. she loves everyone and is a great listener. sanjana was her little princess but now she is always mean to sanju for a reason told later in story.

Abish- the youngest son. he also helps his brother in business. he is the ideal uncle and father. he never gets mad and just listens to u calmly and give awesome advice. he is the kids favorite uncle/father.

Priya- abish's wife. she is just like her husband except she is not patient @ all. she's alwayz doing something to keep her busy and keep her mind frm straying. she is really funny.

that's all the parents, now time for the kids.

VIRANI'S

BHOOMI- she is 26 yrs. old. she is married to her love Abhir. she is really playful and sweet. she loves her family and friends.

MANTHAN- he is 23 yrs. old. he is a playboy but not that much. he can be really sweet and kind, but he only showz this side of him to few ppl. He is one of the hottest guys in college. gurlz fall for his charm and hot body. 😉 😉 😳 😳

PRACHI- she is very sweet and innocent. she's 24 yrs old but has the heart of a little kid. she is everyone's angel in the virani house. ppl are alwayz lookin out for her, like her guardian angels. her best friend is neev. she loves him but doesn't want to ruin their friendship so keeps it a secret.

LAKSH- he is 23 yrs. old. he is alwayz looking out for his big sister Prachi. he is also one of ther hottest guyz in college. gurlz fall for him becuz of his sweet nature. he is a flirt but he only lookz for his little kt. he luvs teasing her and making her jealous. 😉 😳 😆

KHANNAS

ANGAD- he is 26 yrz. old and married to his love Kripa. he is the ideal husband, son and brother. he loves his little sis kt and cousin maithali a lot. he is alwayz lookin out for them.

KT- she is 23 yrz old. she loves her bro angad a lot. she's a sanskari and sweet gurl. she loves laksh but is afraid of telling him. she loves playing around with laksh.

KASTURI- she is 26 yrz old and is married to robbie. she is a sanskari and sweet girl. she loves her sister maithali and her cousins angad and kt a lot.

MAITHALI- she is 23 yrz old and really sweet girl. she loves annoying/fighting with adi. she loves him but cant tell him. she is sanskari and modern too. she loves watching the sunsets a lot.

SHARMAS

KRIPA- she is married to angad. she loves joking around and loves teasing her brother adi. she is really sweet, kind, and playful. she is 26 yrz old.

ADI- he is 23 yrz old and one of the hottest guyz at college. he loves flirting with other gurlz to make maithali jealous. he really loves her but is afraid of telling her. he is really sweet and kind.

ROBBIE- he's 26 yrz old and married to kasturi. he loves his family and friendz a lot. he is the ideal bro, son, and husband. he is really sweet and nice.

ANJALI- she is 24 yrz old and in love with kavya but wont tell him incase it breakz off their friendship. she is really sweet and kind.

KAPOORS

NEEV- he is 24 yrz old and is one of the hottest guyz at college. but he only loves prachi. he loves to annoy her and get her all jealous. he never told her that he loves her becuz he thinks she'll hate him. all the gurlz at skool fall for his sweet and witty charm. he is a flirt like laksh. he loves his sister a lot and misses her really badly.

SANJANA- she is 23 yrz old and lives in california. something happened some yrz ago that separated her from her family. now she is coming bak to india and faces her family again after a long time. she is very sweet, playful, energetic and atheletic. she is really nice to ppl but can be mean when she wants to. she was really colse to her brother neev, cousins kavya and abhir, and her dadu, but now they have a big misunderstanding btw them.

ABHIR- he is 26 yrz old and married to bhoomi. he is really sweet and nice. he loves teasing bhoomi. he loves his cousin sanju a lot and really misses her.

KAVYA- he is 24 yrz old. he is a big flirt and one of the hottest guyz at college. he loves anjali but hasn't told her yet. he loves making her mad by flirting with other gurlz. he loves his cuz sanju a lot and really misses her.

THERE I FINALLY FINISHED THIS PART. HOPE U ALL LIKE PLZ LEAVE COMMENTS I REALLY APPERICIATE IT.

Next chapter- the gang is coming bak to college & meets a new girl thatz familiar. will neev, kavya, and abhir realize who she is?

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Posted: 17 years ago
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liked the introduction of characters continue soon
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Posted: 17 years ago
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ok guyz sorry abt the delay but lets say i had a brain freeze lol ok so this is the next part where the college students meet a new girl who is familiar to some and unknown to others.

note- all families live together in a humongous mansion

Scene- The morning light came through the windows of the mansion lighting the hallways leaving only the cornors still draped in darkness. Suddenly we hear some voices praying. We go down the corridors and the stairs to see ppl standing in front of a mandir inside the mansion. Eight women looking in the mid-or-late 40s are praying in melodious voices. The other people stood behind them listening to their prayer. Soon the prayer ended and the women turned around and showed their faces. It was Nandani, Ganga, Naina, Veera, Damini, Mohini, Shelly, and Priya. The bahus of Virani, Khanna, Sharma, Kapoor families. They were wearing traditional saris each with different color. They touched the elders feet and gave out the prasad.

Ganga- arre, yeh bache abhi tak so rahe hain.

Nandani- Of course kal raat ko itni party jo ki thi. you kno it was their last day of freedom.

Shelly- i swear yeh bache kitne bade ho gaye lekin abhi tak pure childish hain.

Mohini- hain yeh toh hai ab chalo ja ke utha de in ko.

So the daughter-in-laws went to wake their children. Lets see who wakes up first.

First Nandani went in her sons room. It was all black with grey, blue, and red splashs everywhere. The bed was massive with red silk bedsheets and black silk blanket. There was someone sleeping on it. The face couln't be seen but the person had black short spiky hair.

Nandani shook her head and smiled. She went to the bed and started shaking the person.

N- Manthan uttho, subha ke 7 baj rahe hain.

M- ma sone do na plz, bohot neend a rahi hai.

The guy turned around and showed his face. It was the Manthan Virani, heartthrob😳 of many girls and the envy of many boys. 😆

N- Manthan uttho warna main tum par cold pani dal do gi.😆

M- You wouln't 😕

N- wouldn't i?😉

M- Uggh ur evil mom totally evil.🤢

Nandani laughed and pushed her son to the bathroom. She left the room and went to the kitchen to start making the breakfast.

Next we see Ganga entering a room. Its painted dark pink with light colored flowers everywhere. The bed was big and fluffy with once again pink. Ther was no one in the bed. Ganga looked around and heard the bathroom door open and out stepped her daughter Prachi.

P- arre mom aap?

G- han woh tumko uttane ayi thi

P- well im alrady awake ma, aap ja kar us bandar ko utthayo.

G- jati hoon.

P- bye mom

Ganga leaves and goes to another room. Now this room was different. It was clean but still messy. You could tell it was a guys room. There were magazines and clothes on chairs and the table. It was painted blue. The bed was of course big, blue and fluffy. Someone was sleeping in the bed. It was her son Lakshya ot Laksh or kisna or total hottie. 😳😳😳

G- laksh, beta wake up

L- umm... kt let me sleep sweety.😆

G- main kt nahin ho sweety, main teri ma hoon.😊

L-kya? ohh mom aap yahan kya kar rahi ho. 😳😳

G- tumko wake up karne. chalo ab niche breakfast karne a jao.

L- ok, i'll be there soon.

Ganga leaves the room leaving her very very cute son still blushing.

Next well lets say all the mothers woke their children up and went to make breakfast. Of course they didn't wake their married children because it was the young wives job.

At the breakfast table, everyone is calmly eating and chatting amongst themselves. Pretty soon, the office men leave for their office and the kids who are still students go to their cars for college. The women are left to take care of the elders and the house.

AT COLLEGE-

When the gang gets to college, all the girls well scream and run to the guys and the guys go to the girls complementing them/asking them out. The girls ignore all this and go to their table. Anjali was wearing blue faded jeans and a black tank top. She was of course looking gorgeous. Prachi was wearing a white salwaar kameez. She looked very beautiful. KT was wearing a red salwaar kameez. She looked stunning. Maithali was also wearing a salwaar kameez. It was green and looked marvelous on her.

The guys had finally gotten away from the fangirls. They joined the girls on their table. Kavya was wearing blue jeans with a black shirt and blue jacket. Neev was wearing blue jeans with a white shirt and a black jacket. Laksh was wearing blue jeans with a red shirt and no jacket. Adi was wearing blue jeans with a green shirt and a white jacket. Manthan was wearing black jeans with a black non-sleeve shirt. The guys looked killer with their hot bodies, looks, and their sexy clothes.

This gang of 4 beautiful girls and 5 sexy guys ruled the college. After the departure of Abhir, Bhoomi, Robbie, Kasturi, Angad, and Kripa, their siblings have been ruling this college and the people who go there. The gang starts talking about everything and anything. The guys talking about which girl was hotter, and the girls how the boys were so annoying. Brriingg, rriinngg went the bell. All students get up and leave for their class. Suprisingly Kavya, Anjali, Neev, and Prachi had the same classes. They went for their senior class. And Adi, Maithali,Manthan, Laksh, KT had the same classes. They left for their junior class. We follow the juniors because well we have to meet the unknown girl, don't we? Lets go.

We enter room B2 which is the english class. The teacher Mrs. Kakad, was very old and crazy. She kept on giving lectures and totally ignored everything around her. Students in her class threw notes at each other, talked or messaged on phones and she clearly did not give a damn at all. But she also gave lots of projects and stupid nicknames to some students who happened to be who else but our lovely gang.

The seating arrangement was like this: Some students in the first couple of rows, and at the way back sat our gang. It was 3 students to each table. Adi, Maithali, Manthan to one table and next to them was Laksh, Kt, and no one. The final bell rang and class started. Mrs. Kakad stood up and just opened her mouth to talk but was interepted by a knock.

Mrs. K- Come in

The door opened and the principal, Mrs. Agarwal entered with a girl and a boy. The boy had black hair long like Laksh's and green eyes. He was wearing ripped blue jeans and a dark green tight shirt. He had muscles and was tall as probably Angad. He was really handsome and had the rugged look with him. The girl had waist-length black hair with red streaks and tips. She had blue-green eyes. She was wearing a grey tight tank top and ripped faded blue jeans. She was as tall as Anjali. She had the air of innocence and mischief around her.

Mrs. A- These are the new students. They are in your class Mrs. Kakad and i hope you'll take care of them. This is Karan Roi and Sanjana Kapoor.

With that said, she leaves the room and everyone turns their eyes to the newbies.

Mrs. K- Well Roi can sit next to Chawela and Singh, and Kappor you sit next to Virani and Khanna. Raise ur hand ppl i just called.

Laksh, KT, Risha and Randy raise their hands and the new kids sit down. Laksh and Kt tried to talk to Sanjana but she just ignored them or answered in one word like no, yes, so. It really Irritated them both and you could tell by their expressions. Soon the bell rang finally ending the torture of listening to Mrs. Kakad. Laksh and KT went to the others and walked out of the class still annoyed.

Adi- hey wats wrong u guys??

Laksh- you know that girl who was sitting with me and kt

A- yea wat abt her?

L- she wouldn't talk and only say one word replies it was so annoying yaar.

A- oh that suks hey look there she is

The gang looks where adi was pointing to and saw the new kids walking together and wispering to each other. They go by the gang and hear the girl speaking.

Sanjana- dude im telling u that was them, i remember them, we lived together all my life how could i mistake them? trust me

Karan- ok ok but dudette y didn't they realise who u are?

S- who knows? lets hope it stays that way

K- y? don't u want them to kno who u r?

S- no i dont cuz if they kno then my bhai's will kno im here and they'll keep on questioning me abt u-kno-wat

They walk away and leave the gang wondering who they are.

ok thats all im gonna type today i'll type later the rest of the part. plz comment and tell me ur likes and dislikes.

gracias y hasta manana maybe

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Posted: 17 years ago
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ok im not continuing this anymore becuz obviousily itz not liked as i hoped so this story is finished

thnx to those who took a min. to reply to me i rlly appreciate it thnx again

bye ppl
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hey pllzz un do that..its luvl..did see it b4..pllzz continue 😭

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