tAmMy'SfAnfiC*No Continuation*Sorry Folks - Page 5

Awsome TAMMY!!!! It's really good! Aww. Bechaara mera Atul!!!

Komal

that was great continue soon plez

Ok...read Part 5 and Promo.

1st of all, before I start critizing you, a big round of appluause... 👏 For ur awsome work. Seriously it is awsome.

But I think that u should work more on detail, as when I am reading ur FF, than, all I can see is AR, AA, AnR, AtR, AS talking...and not much detail...it sometimes gets hard to make up in ur mind as to where they are, how they are looking and what they are doing.

2: I felt at some places...there arent enough dialouges as there are suppose to be...u said that ur hindi is a lil weak...understand...even I wouldnt be able to write in this much hindi...so what I mean to say is, that if their are places that u want dialouges to be, but u cant make out its hindi...than go ahead...and write them...in english...I dont think that anyone will mind.

Characters: I think that Atuls character needs to be a lil strong....he is soo not like the character of Atul...the jolly one in DMG...but ur point of view matters.
Anjali as usual is mean/ evil but this time, she went too far by calling Ridz adopted and now, I know exactly what will happen. An will leave and Armi will come there to see R crying and conclose her...aw...good.

After all, this FF is not bad...but there are still things...that I think that need to be better and I know...u will make this is brilliant FF! 👍🏼

And another...round of applause... 👏

I dont know if I should be saying these things to u and I am really really really sorry, if I offened you... 😳

Love: Ur Shifu di.

^^^no offense taken shifu di...i was thinking some of the same things when i typed...and i was feeling lazy (which i usually do) so i rushed thru it...but i promise you ill try to follow every point u wrote on the next parts!!

Originally posted by: Mosammad

^^^no offense taken shifu di...i was thinking some of the same things when i typed...and i was feeling lazy (which i usually do) so i rushed thru it...but i promise you ill try to follow every point u wrote on the next parts!!

Thanks for not taking offence...Aw...was just trying to help u get better..which I know u will...so best of luck.😃

Great ff.
liked it.
plz cont. soon

gd updat!
angie is soooooo mean! i hate her! 😡
plz contd..... sooooooooonnnnnnnnnnnn 😳

hey!that was a really gud part n yea,plzz post a lill bit long part n add lotz of AR scenes n cont.soon.

yea ill try...this was really short, nah?