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andreamcl

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Posted: 18 years ago

#41

Hey! Once again an excellent part, somebody said something about 'both' your fics. Do you have another one? If so, please tell me what it's called so that I can go and find it! And yes, Bhargav's nickname was Mogambo!

As for story ideas... I'm trying to think up a reason for Pooja being out of the academy but am failing! By the way, your romantic scenes are especially excellent!

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twinkle gandhi

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Posted: 18 years ago

#42

please write pooja n alis romantic part afterall they are married ...

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RJOpal

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Posted: 18 years ago

#43

right i noticed the "both" comment but ignored it 😳 no, this is my first ff.... though i've written a teen love story more than a yr ago (wanted to publish it, dunno if i can though) bt i never posted it here..

thx 4 tryin to gimme ideas though! 😃 tonight i was out for hours with my family at the night market... so cudn continue writing.. i'll try my best to post the next part by tomorrow afternoon!

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RJOpal

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Posted: 18 years ago

#44

oh i wanted to share a weird but funny incident... i was so desperate for ideas that this afternoon i even asked my mom!! n at first she kept saying "bring a girl in the story (for the hero)" n wen i told her he was already with her she was quiet for sm tym... then she repeatedly after every few seconds kept saying "he can go to the underworld ppl n become one of them... then meet his partner (NAINA) in jail!" even after i told her he had missions n responsibilities (suuuch a long word! ) to fulfill... n that he was smthing resembling a saint.. 🤢 then i told her it was just a story so she stopped saying it... 😕

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andreamcl

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Posted: 18 years ago

#45

hehehe, your mum is tooooooooo funny. I think she's been watching too many movies! As for advice, maybe Abhimanyu could come up with some sort of excuse for Pooja such as he sent her to buy him some musical equipment 😆 😆 I can't believe I can't come up with anything more than that....

You can always make Naina and Raj stay somewhere secretly while they keep planning with the other cadets about the night of the ball! That way they can still be involved in the story while being alone for awhile!

And please do write a cute Ali Pooja scene from the next morning!

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RJOpal

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Posted: 18 years ago

#46

Promo:

As soon as Rajveer saw her he fell... literally... from the table he was leaning on.

SMACK!!! Everyone literally froze in midway of whatever they were doing from shock except for...

Umm the AP (are there any other jodis with these initials?? 😕 ) scenes will hopefully be in later chapters.. sry! anyway thx soo much for helpin me out! 😃

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RJOpal

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Posted: 18 years ago

#47

Chapter 5

KMA was now guarded with heavy security at every corner after the arrival of Major Bhargav, who had spotted a wanted man escaping with one of the cadets. This made the Truth Advocate Warriors' (that's the name Yudi had come up with for themselves… the others laughed at it at first but started using it as Huda called it "tau") mission nearly impossible.

"OK guys, we have to sort the present situation out before making our next move. What information do we have till now?" Captain Abhimanyu asked the three cadets. They were gathered in the games' room between classes, when Major Bhargav was monitoring a drill and Major Nair was out doing some official work. Dr. Shalini couldn't make it as a few students were injured badly from Major Bhargav's drill.

"We know that Phoolan… is with our Capt- I mean SRK (they were using these names for safety, as they were used to them)…" Huda spoke up first.

"And Mogambo saw them…" Aalekh continued.

"And no one knows where our Usool and Mobile Store are… but they're probably together, since nowadays you can find Usool with Mobile phones!" Yudi finished. If this was any other situation, they would probably be rolling on the floor with laughter, but this was different.

Thankfully, both Ali and Pooja were out of suspicion (officially… but Major Bhargav didn't accept Abhimanyu's explaination…)

*Flashback*
…"Oh Major, I completely forgot! How stupid of me… I sent Pooja to town to buy the bongos… they're a fantastic type of African drums… have you heard it?" – Abhimanyu…
…"Proof?" - Bhargav…
…"I left her off to the station sir!" - Suriji…
…"And maybe she had to stay overnight, since the only shop you can find those in is very far." - Shalini…
*End of Flashback*

***Thanks to Andrea (andreamcl) for the idea of Pooja's excuse! -RJOpal***

"Maybe I can help you guys with that!" a pleasant yet manly voice told them from the door. The owner of that sexy voice which had stolen one too many hearts was leaning against the doorframe arms crossed, and looking as dashing as ever with his clean-shaved face and army style short haircut, in tight faded jeans, plain white sleeveless T-shirt and a white jacket. Yes, you guessed absolutely right! It was our hero, our heartthrob, the one and only Captain Rajveer Singh Shikhawat!

Huda, Aalekh and Yudi rushed to meet him, while Abhimanyu stood up slowly, a small smile playing on his lips. He had accepted the fact that he couldn't be in his best friend's position, no matter how much he tried… so instead he had to make a space for himself. Rajveer came forward and hugged Abhimanyu.

"We didn't get to get acquainted last time." He explained. "Oh, Aalekh, could you tell Naina to come inside? I don't think the guards will be up anytime soon!"

In a simple salwar kameez, Naina wasn't looking very extraordinary or eye catching; but as soon as Rajveer saw her he fell… literally… from the table he was leaning on. He had lost count of how many times he fell for her, all over again, just at the sight of her. All he wanted to do now was hold her… all he could think about was of her – someone put a hand on his shoulder. It was Abhimanyu. He stopped his friend before he embarrassed himself.

"You can dream about her later, after we're done with the mission!" he whispered, and Rajveer just looked at him in shock. Abhimanyu ignored it and added loudly, "So how did you guys get here? With all the guards hanging around?" Rajveer and Naina told them of everything that had happened in the past few days…

*Flashback*
…Rajveer and Naina stopping at the temple after defeating Bhargav…
…Ali and Pooja's marriage…
…Staying over at Rohit's house – Ali and Pooja's marriage night…
…Bidding goodbye to the newlywed couple as they leave for Punjab, Pooja's home…
…Searching Rohit's house for anything useful…
…Finding a note written by Nair…
…Getting news of KMA from Chaubey…
*End of Flashback*

***Hey guys sorry but I seem to have a knack for flashbacks… but I can't help it! –RJOpal***

"What was in the note Sir?"

"How did you dodge the guards?"

"Chaubey? Isn't he-" Rajveer held up his hands, calming down the others.

"The note was telling Rohit to keep Pooja busy till lights are out when she visits him… Nair planned all this to get her kicked out of KMA. About the guards… the credit goes to... Cadet Singh!" Saying the last words, he looked up at her, immediately falling for her blush and the shy look in her eyes as she gazed back at him uncertainly.

Hearing him say 'Cadet Singh' brought back memories of the past… the innocent moments between a mentor and his protge… and the not so innocent feelings that had matured in the past few days.

Rajveer described how Chaubey had kept the guards at the back busy while they climbed inside, how Naina used some tricks to distract the other guards and used extra-strong chloroform (found from Rohit's storeroom) for the rest.

"Wow Cadet Ahluwalia… amazing performance! I wasn't lying when I said it would've been worthwhile to have you as my opponent… but unfortunately you are getting as filthy as trait-"

SMACK!!! Everyone literally froze in midway of whatever they were doing from shock except for Abhimanyu, who was shaking his hand in pain from the impact with Bhargav's face.

Edited by RJOpal - 18 years ago

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Bhumika amin

@ami_princess

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Posted: 18 years ago

#48

hey ist one to comment...ya...very good part.plz cotniue soon

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andreamcl

@andreamcl

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Posted: 18 years ago

#49

Yes!!! Go Abhimanyu!! I'm glad that he did what I always wished I could do.

And while the cadets might have been too serious about the situation to laugh, I certainly was! It was just too funny with all their code words, please post the next part soon!

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divya

@-Divyaa-

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Posted: 18 years ago

#50

wow a great part 👏 ,plzzzz update sooon 😛

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