Arhi SS: Tewari & Sons, No. 23, Chandni Chowk (THREAD I)

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archmink

@archmink

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#731

i really like this story
its very unique and difff in its own way
i like how you had blend the past and present side by side ...
plz pm me when you update
i would love to follow this story

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canapoem

@canapoem

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+ 6

Posted: 10 years ago

#732

Originally posted by: shr1234
Poonam Raizada is creepy and so is her faithful servant. Despite being a snob I thought Arnav was somewhat sensible.. I mean now he knows what all his mom can do, as I think he too feels a bit liberated once mommy leaves the town. And Tiwari has entered too. Poor Khushi, so helping and simpleton, always at wrong place at wrong time :( Her ordeals have pulled her down from an aspiring professional to a struggling shop-owner, *sigh*

Creepy is indeed a new word used to describe Poonam and her chela. 😆

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Pramiti

@maverickmartin

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+ 6

Posted: 10 years ago

#733

Hello there! Hooked to the story from the first post, so I'll comment again when I'm done reading. Looks like I'm in for a ride. :D

By the way, Payal calls Arnav a firang while waddling around with an English hat on top of her bag-laden self? Ha. Ha.

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zainza

@zainza

Dazzler

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Posted: 10 years ago

#734

wow...i'm so glad i found this ff

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Japonica

@Japonica

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#735

YB please, please do not change ANYTHING about your writing- everything is perfect. Let your characters create the story just the way they have been doing since you first created them. They will lead us to the end at their own pace.
Readers who want to read will just have to follow them.

I laughed my head off at Anjali's marking formula. I am right now doing exactly that and am so tempted to use her formula😆

Khushi's stoicism brings a lump in my throat. I so wish she had just not gone to Lavanya's wedding, wonder what really made her go. But then I suppose when everything is against one, one just says sod it and lets life take over.

Edited by Japonica - 10 years ago

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Pramiti

@maverickmartin

Inactive

+ 6

Posted: 10 years ago

#736

Okay... well, that ended on a sinister note.

What happened to Arnav? What exactly did his mother feed him to get him so hostile towards Khushi?

Btw, so many chapters and yet not a thing about any actual budding attraction. Just a little tug and pull of invisible strings. Love that. :D

Poonam Raizada and her faithful lackey give me the heebie-jeebies. I see HP in my head as this man with a crooked, evil smile and cold narrow eyes. Like a non-subtly-funny Jeeves. With invisible devil's horns on his head and a mental expression of staunch, determined devotion.

Funny, that. :D

Anjali reminds me of my own cousin, actually. Semi-hippie. Refuses to marry, though. Not yet got her Jun.

I can't hate Payal. But I can't stand her. She's like one of those people that you wish to never meet around the corner. Never. Because you might scowl and let your true opinion about them show.

Aakash... I'm yet to decide on an opinion. Sound, sensible guy. Very likeable. Aimed for heartbreak, that's tragic, though.

Okay, I just realized I was talking about characters like they were real, live people - which just goes to show how brilliant your writing is. Perfect characterization and narrative.

Loved all I have read till now! Do you send out PMs? I would love to have owl hooting in my inbox every now and then. :)

P.S. Are you Bengali? Or have a Bengali connection? Cuz, well, Jun, Mrs. Basu. Cuz I'm a proud one. ;)

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Jay

@jduke

Rocker

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Posted: 10 years ago

#737

Radhika,

First and foremost sorry for my late comment. As usual another outstanding update 👏👏. Poor Kushi is struggling through out her life to meet the needs and ends. Anand Raizada and Poonam Raizada characters are poles apart. While former is simple and compassionate and later is strict and money minded. Did HP really think and inform to Poonam that Kushi was trying to seduce Sr. Raizada? 😡. Unfortunately Kushi wearing saree and wiping Sr. Raizada face in bedroom instigated already infuriated Poonam and pressed wrong nerves.

What is wrong with Arnav?. He seems less sensitive and truly inherited momma's genes. How can he think that Kushi barged into private space to pursue her job benefit from Sr. Raizada? Did Kushi accept KR intern or was it revoked under the influence of Mrs. Raizada? Tiwari guy and his acquaintance with Garima is still mystery. Looks like all Kushi's dreams with be shattered very soon 😭

Edited by jduke - 10 years ago