Originally posted by: skm27395
Indecent Proposal
Sooo sorry for not commenting on this earlier. Finally my exams have finished and i can breathe once again :P Hope this comment makes up for the immense time I took to post it :P
Chapter: 7
You SUCK BIGTIME at being a boyfriend
That line uttered by Vidushi went in and out of Parth's head when he pondered deep and somewhat planned how to correct Vidushi's perception and opinion of him. Ohhh I love the line "pondered deep and somewhat planned" Not that it matter to him personally, justified Parth but he was genuinely a likeable guy and everyone admired him one way or other. Hahaha, sure it doesn't matter to him... that's why he's thinking about it so much. I literally laughed my heart out at the "genuinely a likeable guy" part because really, he was a jerk to her! The complete opposite of likeable... dislikable... if that's even a word..This girl calling him "Not Boyfriend" material irked him to no end and bruised his ego. Typical male behaviour... it's always about their ego isn't it?
"Try Try Till you SUCCEED" she had challenged him didn't she? He thought he will show her how good of a boyfriend he can be though a fake one. Awww, now this is cute. I can't wait to see how he manages to convince Vidushi though, he will have to be the PERFECT boyfriend to change her opinion, and I'm not sure that Parth has it in him :P
He didn't see for the rest of the weekend as she was out of college and it angered him when she didn't even inform him. Psht, that's so typical of Parth. Really, she shows concern about his whereabouts and she bites his head off. But the moment he does the same to her, it's supposed to be ok. He knew he was her fake boyfriend but still didn't he deserve a call or a simple text saying she was out. Still, I admire the concern he has for her. Maybe he's not as bad a boyfriend as Vidushi thinks. Then he recalled about his task and took out his phone dialling her. She didn't pick on first try so he called again and this time she took to which Parth first shouted "What the hell Vidushi? Agar bahar jaa rahi thi to atleast inform to karna chaiye." 🤣 Hahahaha I can just imagine the look on Vidushi's face... and Parth's face when he's yelling.. His love for her is so obvious! Then realizing his error he changed his tune and talked sweetly and caringly with honey dripping in his voice "Mera matlab mein kitna pareshaan ho gaya tha. Atleast bata ke to jaana tha. Okay. Abhi kahan ho tum?" Parth... and honey dripping from his voice... not possible! To this Vidushi replied from the other line "What is your problem Parth? You are not my real boyfriend okay? And even if I would have called to inform you, you would have thought I am being clingy and all. DAMN STRAIGHT! That's exactly what I mean by him being hypocritical. I'm glad Vidushi called him out on it. Anyways mein abhi busy hu to tum se ake baat karti hu." Saying this she disconnected the phone making Parth fume with anger at the audacity of the girl and how she acted. Absolutely love the word "audacity"... Vidushi sure is audacious!
Parth was pacing like a tornado and destructing everything in his wake as he waited for Vidushi to come back at the college entrance gate so he would just leap at her for her behaviour earlier in the evening. Meh, this is like the daily story between them so I'm not surprised he's waiting to yell at her. He didn't want to admit but he was pretty tense that it was late in the evening and he had been waiting the whole day for her to call back. Awww cutie. He's playing the role of the concerned boyfriend perfectly. He tried calling her phone the entire day but after few initial missed call she switched off her phone. He felt like a reluctant stalker by waiting on her all day and calling her but he rationalized it to himself thinking he was just proving a point and it was all ultimately for the bet and he was not really so concerned for her. Hahah, yes Parth that's the reason why. We all believe you. (*stares sarcastically*) The view he next saw made his mind spin as he saw Vidushi getting down from a red motor bike which had a black leather jacket clad person in the front. What what what? She's on a motorbike with another guy. MAJOR PLOT TWIST! She waved at him murmuring something when that guy pulled her close and hugged her. YES! I love jealousy tracks! That scene chilled Parth to bone and then fuelling his anger as he wanted to throttle Vidushi to let a guy touch her and thump that biker for laying down a finger at his girlfriend. Umm... this is getting really violent right now... really violent. Fake girlfriend he corrected himself. By the time Parth reached towards them running, the biker sped off in air and Vidushi was turning around. Her heart skipped a beat when she saw Parth standing so close to her red with anger and murder screaming in his eyes. Parth may not say it directly, but I'm sure she can see the love and concern in his eyes... She squeaked and cheerfully started off "Hi Parth. Didn't see you over there. So how was your day?" to which Parth just glared hard at her baring his teeth and snarled at her "Had a good time did you? Seeing you are in such a good mood as compared to your mood at our date. OH SNAP! My entire day was spent calling you as you might have guessed from the number of my missed calls and texts and voice mails on your phone and sitting here like an idiot for hours waiting for you to make your gracious presence. Is it weird that I find Parth yelling really really hot? I mean, sure he's being a bit rude towards Vidushi... but damn that angry young man look was literally made for him! But let's talk about your day which seems more interesting. To aaj pure din tum kahan thi?" Vidushi who was completely baffled with this unexpected reaction of Parth just stood there like a statue infuriating Parth even more who roughly shook her and angrily bit out words from his mouth Of course he has to go shake her. Is there ever an argument between them that doesn't result in Parth manhandling her? "Bolo damnit. Kahan thi pure din and kiske saath? Aur woh ladka kaun tha jo tumhe yahan chod gaya?"I wanna know the same thing... Vids isn't the type to get over Parth so easily.. Vidushi angrily hit him and freed herself only when Parth released her but not too gently and said "Is se tumhe kya? Akhir tum hote kaun ho mujhe se ye puch ne vale. Aaj tak kisiki himmat nahi hui mujhe se ye sawal karne ki. So what do you think of yourself? You think you can get off asking me these question then you have to think again because I am not the kind of girl who tolerates all this bullying. Aur tum to mere real boyfriend bhi nahi ho phir tumhe kya hai. Mujhe to lag raha tha ki aaj tum celebrate kar rahe hoge a Vidushi free day' par yahan dekha to tum mujhi pe badak rahe ho. Tum akhir cahte kya ho? Tum mujh se pyaar nahi karte, pyaar to kya pasand bhi nahin karte to phir tum itna meri life mein dakhal dene ka haq kyun cahiye? Mujhe kya lagta hai tum unn baccho ki tarah ho jise khud ko ek toy pasand anhi hai par woh dusro ko bhi use khalne nahi denge. Really I can never get you." Umm... WOW! That was literally the best speech I've heard of Vidushi's... She's finally standing up for herself and I can actually feel all the anger and hurt she's feeling while reading that. Seriously girl, hats off to you just for that speech in particular.
"I don't want you to understand me. Tum bas muhje itna batao ki kyat um mujhe par cheat kar rahi ho?" asked Parth in a cold voice barely audible to anyone else but to Vidushi it ringed her ears who just gave him a disbelieving look and stormed off. He's her "fake" boyfriend... Even if she is cheating, does it even count as cheating? But the "could voice barely audible" part really got to me... I feel bad for Parth because he genuinely cares, but he hasn't fully understood that yet. "You just can't walk away Vidushi without answering me. Jawab do mujhe" said Parth tugging Vidushi on her wrist and pulling her back and caging her in his arms as she failed to tug herself free from him. "Caging her into his arms" awww every girl's fantasy! She said "I can't even look at you right now and don't even want to talk to you. Abhi mein bahot gusse mein ho to tum abhi muhje akela chod do. I will not answer this or justify my action to you or anyone else. So just let me go. And FYI even if I cheated on you on my FAKE BOYFRIEND in a FAKE RELATIONSHIP then it wouldn't have been cheating. So just back off from me. I want to end this fake relationship right now." WOAH! Another awesome speech from the vixen Vidushi... I love the way you write her angry lines... seriously all the aggression and frustration she feels seeps through. I really feel like clapping for you right now.
Parth spun her around and with a quick, harsh sound he bent his black head and Viushi fell back, trembling as she felt the warm moistness of his mouth taking possession. WHAATTT? I was SO not expecting that... OH MY GOSH he actually kisses her... but he does it forcefully... but he's still kissing her... so confused right now, but I'm loving every second. "No, please," she almost whimpered, but although she made the protest her eyes had closed and she was quivering as his head moved against her. Absolutely love her reaction. Her mind wants her to stop, but her body just doesn't comply. The intensity of her own reaction took her entirely by surprise. "Now do you want this Fake Relationship to end? Now you want to answer me." As much as I love the kiss, Parth is an idiot for doing that. "Get your hands off me!" Vidushi flared, frightened and angry, her eyes dilating. Eyes dilating and all ☺️ "My hands are going where I choose, not where you dictate." Parth muttered with a thick intonation increasing as his eyes kept moving on her. Ok this is getting so much hotter by the second. As sadistic as it is, Parth's forcefulness is just making him more hot! Tears spilled from her eyes. She swung her had toward his cheek and slapped his hands away as he tried to put his arms round her. She ran past him, sobbing and stumbled out of the door. Parth stood staring after her thinking THERE IS ALWAYS A NEXT DAY. WHAT DOES THIS MEAN? Has be finally realised he's fallen for her... or is he still confused? Or is he just saying there's always a next day to find out about that other guy?
I've really missed reading this FF... can't wait to read the next bit and I'll have my comment on that chapter very soon. Awesome job Shreya, keep at it girl.
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