Destiny Prevails :: A Mahabarata FF ( updated ch 3 on Pg 5 ) - Page 4

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Yipee! I'm first!!!! *does the chicken dance* Oh my my...I was dying for an update from you! What took you so long huh? Oh silly me...your college!!
So who is this anonymity that hit both the Heptacle and Achala and Subhadra?? And Subhadra takes away Achala's pain...that was so sweet. Twins!! Undoubtedly!! But again the question remains pretty same...who is that anonymity? Continue soon dearie! I'm hungry for more!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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continue soon it is confusing😕
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Posted: 11 years ago
#33
Achal's Hair Was Too Cute !!! Aww, Poor Subhi She Took All Pain ? Loved Achala's Concern !! Who Hit The Panadav's Car ??
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Whose voice is that? Mystery, mystery. Loved Subhadra-Achala bonding. Just make it longer and faster next time.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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achala and subhi they are very very cute... they r d best bro sis combo...
and abt d accident... is it karn...coz hee s d 1 wid invisible power..
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Posted: 11 years ago
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who is that mystery man?
please update soon.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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I was looking for your post, finally got it.😳 Could you please Pm me if you update again coz I just love your story...😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Achala ran towards his friends to help them, when he hit something big & fell back. " Achala " subhadra shouted & ran to help him.

" Karna " Sahadev replied reading his mind.Everybody tensed up & got ready to strike back. Karna revealed himself his cover blown.

" yup it's me, & I have come back to take what is mine " Karna said looking at Arjun

" stay away from him " Bheem replied moving to stand protectively in front of a confused Arjun. " And it was his & will always be his " Achala replied coming from behind.

Karna stiffened seeing Achala ' my job can't be done now ' he thought ' I need to go now '

" I'll be back " he said looking at Arjun. And he vanished from their sight. Everybody relaxed a bit.

" Arjun " Achala saying this hugged him tightly. Subhadra went to yagya.

" what are u two doing here ? " Dharma questioned

" Subhadra just came back from an outing with her friends, I just came to pick her up " Achala replied
" come on now Bhadra is waiting for us " Bheem & they all started moving. " I will drive " he added in the end.

The cave

The cars slowly moved o in & out of the trees, & finally they reached the cave where they usually meet for the customary meetings. Bhadra stood at the entrance,
" what took u all so time ? " Bhadra asked them.
" nothing just a small ant came in our way " Achala said, everybody started laughing loudly, Bhadra could just shake his head on his younger brother's antics.

Subhadra ran into Bhadra's arms " bhaiya " she said & hugged him tight.

" so ymy princess had fun ? " he asked
" yup loads " subhadra replied
" come on now , all come inside " Bhadra called them all inside.
" subhadra you go and show them their rooms, Achala u come with me " Bhadra said

Everybody nodded & went.


" So who was the ant? " Bhadra asked

" Karna " Achala grimaced, a tensed expression on his face " He wants it " he said.

" We need to protect Arjun " Bhadra said

" Yes, but we need to tell him first " Achala said

" and it would be better if you tell him that " Bhadra said

Subhadra moved on showing them their rooms. " Yudhishthir bhaiya this is your & Yagya's room " she said showing the one in the right side. " & this one is Bheem bhaiya & Nakul's room " she said showing the one on left.

" Nooo " Nakul cried " Not me...not with Bheem Bhaiya "

" Shut up, & come on now " Bheem said swinging his arms around Nakul's neck. Everybody laughed at their retreating back.

" Dhrish & Sahadev, this one is yours " she said " & paarth this one is yours " she said turning back " paarth..." no one was there behind her.

She opened the door in front of her & there he was arranging his things. She entered his room it was messy ' just like Achala ' she thought & shook her head.

" We always stay here, then why do you bother to show us our rooms?" Paarth questioned looking at her.

" I like to do that. " she replied & turned to go out, when her leg slipped on something

" Aahhh " she shouted, a pair of hands shot in the air to catch her.

She slowly opened her eyes to see her savior & that's it she just kept on staring at the hazel-eyed boy who caught her.

Outside Panchgani

The Cottage

" Urghhh " Karna threw a vase in frustration

" I was just an inch away from it " he said looking at Duryodhan " why does this Achala has to come every time in between? "

" Because he knows what we are looking for & he is also looking for that " Shakuni replied " but you don't worry, the biggest plus point we have is Arjun doesn't know about it, so it will be easy for us to snatch it away from him, just wait for the correct time " he said playing with his beard & closing one of his eye.


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Posted: 11 years ago
#39
it was beautifully written yaar!!!* its sooo amazing and awesome:D I loved the romantic part the most.😳😉.in which mahanayak catches hold of subhi.❤️..and they both stare in each other's eyes.!!!!:D☺️❤️and arjun's brown eyes!!!!☺️❤️hayye maar dala😳😆
i'm first!!!
and bheem and nakul part was awesome and hilarious!🤣😆😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
#40
Wow !! Brilliant !! Oh, So It Was Karna ! LOLzz Ant !! What Is That Thing Actually ? Arjun's Dhanurvidya ? Loved The Villains' Frustration !!

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