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My heart is beating in my chest as fiercely as it might have if I had been Khushi. I think you've outdone yourself, S with this chapter - because this one is all words - each placed with the accuracy of a professional, aimed to create the emotion and succeeding every bit of the way.
What starts as an idyllic tired journey along the winding slopes of the Himalayas, blissful almost as seen through Anya's eyes, rapidly changes into the mountain storm that comes out of nowhere as they realize Khushi is missing. The transition to Arnav's panic, the immediate thoughts in his head about what he should have done, about how he should have behaved so normal when you are faced with such a situation. And then finally the sheer exhaustion of Khushi's state with a throw back into the chain of events, fear, anger, indulgence, awareness all culminating into pure panic, desparation edged in every thought, every move, the pain that shoots up her leg as real as the pain in her heart - the fear for life, the question on mortality - a brush with the unknown, the unseen...
it takes desperate situations for people to understand what something or someone means to them. And in the wake, in the near wake at least, people will try and make it count. Of course, it is the near panic that also sets loose actions that aren't entirely rational. To that effect, I fear for what happens next.
A BRILLIANT chapter, S - everything you set out to do, falls right into place - if the chapters are an indication of your evolution as a story teller - you've come a long way today - :)
Take a bow!
Edited by meera30 - 11 years ago
Indian Mythology
