KriYaansh OS - On Fire - Updt Rey's POV on PG5

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Posted: 11 years ago
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A little something I wrote on the KriYaansh rain dance. Do let me know what you think!


On Fire


Her skin burns in the rain.


There is nothing except the sound of skin slapping skin and it drums in her head. She knows logically that there is a song playing somewhere that they're dancing to but she can't hear it over the sound of blood rushing in her ears.


She's panting even though the routine isn't that strenuous. Her breath's coming out short and her lungs feel constricted. She inhales deeply to stay afloat and instead feels heady. She's sure if she hadn't been training her body to move to the rhythm the way she has for years, she'd have given up ages ago, unable to keep up.


She doesn't know how long they've been here. How long she's been moving, spinning, crashing, drowning. All she knows is that when she moves away from him, her skin freezes, embraces the cold of the rain but when she spin back into his arms - it sizzles out.


She feels overwhelmed with sensations. Hot, cold, close, far, tight, loose, leap, jump, run, catch, spin. She isn't performing anymore, she doesn't know what she's doing anymore, at least not actively. She's given in. She's let her body go and it moves like it has a mind of it's own.


The way he touches her, she's surprised her skin hasn't melted off her body yet. Seeped into him. She's lived in her skin all her life, she was born into it but right here, in the pouring rain, is the first time she truly becomes aware of it. And now that it's come alive, she doesn't think it's ever going to stop singing again.


She feels branded where he touches her, the heat from his hands burn her insides. He touches her like he owns her. Like no matter where he holds her or how - her body will cave in and mold itself around his. When she runs back and wraps herself around him, she realises he might not be so far off the mark after all.


Afterward as she sits alone in the pouring rain, she waits for the stinging sensation to pass and wonders if she would ever be able to feel clean again - feel untouched.


He's marked her for life without leaving a single bruise. And there's nothing she can do about it.

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The Aftermath

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awesome os.. loved it.. thanks for pm..
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superb os...
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Beautiful amazing n really adorable os
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amazing OS dear...
brilliantly written 👏
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loved it..

u should give rey's pov also...
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This was really sensuous and passionate! Perfect Christmas delight 😊 👍🏼.Thanx for d pm!
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It was just amazing... ^_^
I really loved how you included as if they were making love in the rain... ;)

It was almost that... The way they moved and how they embraced each other in that dance was ethereal...

and that was just the way how you showed it... embracing the feeling...

It was magnificent the way you showed it... i really loved the fact about the realisation the way she was born wali line... ^_^

total beautiful it was...

awesome and blissful read it was... awesome CP..
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This was just brilliant! Super awesome!
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Reading that just gave me shivers! 😳

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