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Nandz

@Nandz

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#41

Oh m so glad you decided to turn in it into a TS!

I had read the first part of the TS as os for the competition! And at that time it had figured in my most liked ones! The story was extremely well written and definitely managed to touch all the right chords!!

Arnav and khushi belonging to two different nations and how they had spent 8 days together ! There wasnt much verbal interaction but they had what they needed at that time! Each other's support!

I remember , for one moment in the end i had thought khushi had died, n my mood had become so sullen , till i came to the last bit where you had revealed that both were alive, n still cherishing memories of their time spent together!

At that time i had so wanted to know what happened after that or what all could have happened! N m so glad you decided to turn in to a TS!

Loved part 2!!

Even after 9 years arnav is still somewhere longing for her and not been able to love his wife!!

Waiting to see what happened to khushi and where she is!

I hope you give it a happy ending!!

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1chilly

@1chilly

Sparkler

Posted: 11 years ago

#42

Anu, you made me cry.

I can't understand why you don't write more.

You are one of the rare writers who describes a scene so well.

The dream was so vivid and real.

And the story is so realistic.

He obviously couldn't have married her immediately.

And he wouldn't have lived alone.

So he got married and had two kids.

Loved the scene where his daughter gave him solace.

And then how she went back to sleep in his arms.

Beautifully written.

Waiting for part three.

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IronButterfly

@IronButterfly

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#43

Life has moved on but some where he is still the same.

I'd like you to continue this, make him meet her?

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mpuhan

@mpuhan

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#44

brilliantly written. Hope she comes back into his desolate life again.

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shree10

@shree10

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#45

unres ===
Anu thanks a lot for continuing.
It gives me hope that there might be happy beginning for Arnav and Khushi and also a caring mother to dote upon Arnav's little girl!
The description of a dream was so vivid and felt almost real!

Arnav's regret of not having loved his wife was so touching! Waiting eagerly for next update!

Edited by shree10 - 11 years ago

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arpitasharma

@arpitasharma

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#46

Bookmarking! Will read it soon! And by soon, I mean, really soon!

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Achu

@arshy4ever

Inactive

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#47

Anu... This is amazing dear... You deserve more, I know... But I'm in a hurry now... 'll comment later with whole my heart..Pakka...😳

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_disha_

@_disha_

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#48

When you decided to continue this OS i didn't know what i was expecting but this is just above and beyond all that.

To show a leap of around 9 years with a much married Arnav was a very practical and realistic approach. It was heart wrenching to see Arnav with his little daughter remembering his wife with a touch of regret of not having loved her like a man would love his woman.

The nightmare was quite alarming and obviously his heart still yearns for Khushi.

Now waiting to know where she has been over the years.

Great Job Anu !!! You need to write and write often !🤗

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Crazy4Sobti

@Crazy4Sobti

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#49

Yes you shouldn't set deadlines I can't agree more on that because somebody promised an FF in first week of Nov. Oh! wait never mentioned which year

Now this 🤗🤗, when you suffer from bouts of or 😭 or 😔.

Let me start with a "Thank You" for giving two more parts to this story. Honestly I was totally satisfied with the way part one ended as it gave me hopes that one day they will meet and be together. But what better way to see the hope as a reality that too in your words. So, I am happy.

You totally maintained the poignancy and intensity of emotions from the first part. The father-daughter bonding brought tears to my eyes. Subhi saying "papa" and unknowingly giving the calm Arnav needs and Arnav saying "Sorry" which she may not understand, it was so adorable.

Arnav still remembers her even after 9 years. Indeed its a "trespassing memory" that refuses to leave him. Wonder where Khushi is? Didn't she say she will look for Arnav? Will she come looking for him? Can't wait to read more.

Anu, you are a natural and should write more. You bring ease and depth to a story without much effort and that too on your phone.

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Ananya

@Anarocksick

Rocker

+ 7

Posted: 11 years ago

#50

My comment for part 1 -

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/96300375

Now for part 2 -

The dream seemed so real, and so tragic. I loved how you wrote it...

So Arnav is married and it has been nine years... I liked how to led the story and didn't make them meet sooner. It seems more real this way. But it wasn't easy then, and it wouldn't be easy now. But how I want them to meet... I wonder how many sparks would fly,,. oh make them meet.

I don't know what to expect, and I don't know if it'll end on a tragic note...It might just. But I definitely want to meet...perhaps just for Khushi to reassure Arnav that it wasn;t his fault that he couldn't save her.

I also wonder where Khushi is...is alright? She was alone in the world then, I wonder is she ended up marrying somebody...