I am extremely sorry for not commenting earlier...my examz are finally over so I only caught up with your story today. These were my taughts on each chapter:
P.s I always have a lot of questions in my comments please don't mind them and u don't have to answer them I know they will be answered as the story goes along.
Prologue:
~I must say I like how u opened the prologue with your awesome descriptive writing skills it really set the mood of the story...
~Arnav is sort of a Prince and is into Politic's that's a change but a good one... Arnav in a kurta that's hard to imagine lol.
~Hhmm the word drugs enrage ASR, just like Shushil I also wonder why??I guess it has to do with the past.
~Enter our Khushi...so she's a 21 year old school teacher that isn't to girly and definitely not drooling over ASR interesting.
~"That stopped Khushi in her tracks, and she whirled around with contained anger," watch what you wish for Sarita. The man only visits when disaster befalls someone, so by wishing for his presence here you are wishing for something bad to happen to our people."--------interesting statement so something bad happens and that's when they meet...
CHAPTER 1:
~So Arnav is a politician that only does things to get votes and what's best for his party more like any other politician or is that just how he wants to portray himself ... The walls he built around himself probably because of his past has a little crack after his visit to Singrauli that's just tells us thaT ASR does have a warm heart somewhere deep down and it will take Khushi to unlock it .
~Really curious to know about the life Arnav left behind. What happen to Akash and Where is he?
Arnav is so formal to his mother but I already don't like her so uptight behavior I see she's going to be a thorn in Arhis love story since she still so caught up with status. I like Dadi she seems like a genuine women that know how to balance relationships and duties unlike Arnavs mother.
~I already like Khushi's character but I am starting to be in awe of Arnavs intriguing character and what I really like about him is that he doesn't have that royal air around him like his mother atleast toward the servants and in his way of thinking I like his good business sense and sharp brain,with Arnavs character one minute I like him and the next I don't approve of his behavior so really like how u portraying him :)
~Oh god who's the women at the end?
~Liked how u described his study and the entertainment room..- it helps in imagining.
Chapter 2:
~i am really enjoying this political backdrop it really keeps the suspense and drama going.
~oh boy so there's a shyam here also but no Arhi story is complete without our dearest villain.
~i smell trouble with Lavanya,Arnav should get rid of her soon but I don't think she's going to let go of him soon and since Arnav is a politician with so much rivalry I'm actually scared so many things can go wrong I just hope Arnav deals with lavanya properly she's a cunning women.
~i am adoring Arnav and Aman's bond .Aman is an important character here and I'm liking him so far ,felt bad that he lost his love but glad his so loyal.
~missed Khushi in this update.
Chapter 3:
~" Beta, you never can be too careful, each place has their own set of monsters."----totally agree with Shashi here,it seems as if Shashi is hiding something from Garima and Khushi and something is bothering him.
~Never in my wildest dream did I think Akash would turn out like that poor Payal,Akash another threat to Arnav.
~Omg they attacked Khushi's parents oh no!
Chapter 4:
Just reading the opening paragraph brought tears to my eyes...Khushi is an orphan :( but always knew something like this would hapeen because of the parting lines in the prologue.
I also feel something fishy here why did they attack khushi's family?
Khushi's rant to Arnav was too good she's so right am glad some1 left the mighty ASR speechless.
She asked him to marry her never expect that...Shyam go his dirty eyes on Khushi but I'm expecting Arnav to save her.
Arnav is kinda just doing his job I can't blame him politics is a dirty job.
Chapter 5:
I feel extremely sorry for Khushi its like evry1 wants to turn her tragedy into an opportunity for them I see human nature in that.What a turn of events he is ready to marry her...and that to the very next day..I think she might agree just to find the real reason her parents was murdered and get justice and being Arnav's wife will give ha that power wil have to read the next chapter to find out her reaction. I look forward to Arnav and Aman scenes in ur ff I love they bonding.
Chapter6:
A new journey starts here they are finally married how is his family going to react...Sarita is truly a friend for life I like ha.it was nice that Arnav went to the shukla's and officially asked for khushi's hand in marriage. From they clothes its obvious they come from two different worlds want to see how khushi adjust to Arnavs lifestyle.
Chapter 7:
Arnav is a true gentlemen and I c his already got a protective side to Khushi.
I C a friend in Aman for khushi as well I think he sees how perfect she is for his friend that's y he agreed so easily.
Arnavs mum's behavior was expected but liked how Arnav handled the situation and looking forward to see how she treats Khushi.
Like Dadi hope she forces them to have a proper Grand wedding some day I know now is not the time with Khushi still in mourning,
Aman handled the media well love him.
Chapter 8:
I'm not a fan of they age gap expected arnav to be in his late 20's aso but nevertheless I trust ur writing skills.
Khushi found a friend in payal that's good.
Like this teasing nature of Arnav waiting to c more :)
I trust Arnavs character that he is not so shallow to sleep around while being married.
I'm finally done that's one long comment but u deserve it. Really captivated by this story .I am enjoying everything so far beside the age gap lol but I'm looking forward to see how u unfold this story :)
Mind the typos typed this out on my mobile.
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