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honeygrape

@honeygrape

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#131

gosh...this again is another good idea...you know when you do things like this our tendency to put up proper comments also increases...good job dear...and yeah about LT am very very exciited about that story of yours...so waiting eagerly for the future updates

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Kalpana

@Kalpana_KaCy

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#132

Kalpana's Ramblings Part II 😆

Chalo aur thoda ramble karti hun! Ab baari hai mere darling DFL ki!

Yesterday's chapter was horrible frankly speaking! Ek toh pehle 4000 words literally bore kiya. I mean I could have written that in 500 words too, but as I said in above post, DFL takes me off the track. Ab dekhona, ek 35 chapters ki story ko 65 tak leke aayi hun! Aur agar har ek part ko count karein toh 100 toh cross ho jaayega! DFL just makes me ramble! I wish I could write it as crisp as LT! Ek toh yeh problem aur upar se 500 words mein MG ka argument khatam bhi kar diya! Aur likh sakti thi na! Jahaan bol na tha wahaan nahi bola aur jidhar garaj nahi udhar bake jaa rahi hun!

Now a proper critical evaluation of the chappy: The first part i.e. from the start to Geet entering the house was not that good written. I mean the transition from scene at KC to scene at KM and from KM to KC was not that smooth. Bahut kata kata lag raha tha! Who else thought that too? Jhoot mat bolna! I for one hated that part. I mean plot was good. But the writing was not that great.

After that, the song part was okie dokie! Half of it is copied from chapter 45 ( you remember when Soni went through the diary and realised her love for Maan) But I have to say, I cannot believe I could write it so beautifully. The parts which I copied from Chapter 45 where Maan's thoughts are written, those parts are written so beautifully. Kya yeh sach mein maine likha hai? I could not believe my eyes. Maanna padega! Kabhi kabaar achcha likh leti hu main!

And then came the MG argument, and I have to say that is my fav part. I always complain in my PMs to some of my buddies that most of the time I don't feel the heavy dramas scenes come out as good as I imagine! But this! This was simply perfect. Just the way I imagined! I never thought I could actually write heavy dramas scenes the exact way I imagine. But this time I did it. So happy about that!

So all in all, start kuch khaas nahi tha par end ek dum perfect laga! Aur kisko aisa laga? Toh bol do! Main aapki raay sunne...err...padhne ke liye bekaraar hun!

Thank you folks for reading my ramblings!

Take care and wait patiently till my next update,

Kalpana

P.S. I am off to write the next chappies!

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Kalpana

@Kalpana_KaCy

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#133

Originally posted by: honeygrape
gosh...this again is another good idea...you know when you do things like this our tendency to put up proper comments also increases...good job dear...and yeah about LT am very very exciited about that story of yours...so waiting eagerly for the future updates

Thank you for reading my ramblings! And wow! I did not know my newest antic would make you want to write proper comments! Chalo ek aur faayda hua itna ramble karne ka!😃

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Kalpana

@Kalpana_KaCy

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#134

Arre! Ek announcement hai sunlo! Agar kisi ke paas Maan aur Geet ki Jeep waali pictures hain (serial ke start waali) toh mujhe bataado! Lutt Jaawaa ka banner banaane ke liye chaahiye! Aur haan! Pictures jahaan hai wahaan ki link doge toh bhi chalega! Samjhe??????

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-lakshmi-

@-lakshmi-

Inactive

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#135

Originally posted by: Kalpana_Writer
Arre! Ek announcement hai sunlo! Agar kisi ke paas Maan aur Geet ki Jeep waali pictures hain (serial ke start waali) toh mujhe bataado! Lutt Jaawaa ka banner banaane ke liye chaahiye! Aur haan! Pictures jahaan hai wahaan ki link doge toh bhi chalega! Samjhe??????

i coulnt give u the link becoz i googled them😃

hope u get the apt one

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chavvi16

@chavvi16

Stunner

Posted: 11 years ago

#136

I agree with your analysis of LT

But the other one. Not so much

I loved maan dialogue from chapter 45

Their argument just loved that

Dev Tara plan awesome

Kya dimaag lagaya

Must say you must be the only writer who managed to have maneet argument in just 500 words

And yet it said it all

Just one mini request don't let geet let maan get away with this

Nor khushi to arnav

After all they put the girls through man

Pay back toh banta hai please

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Kalpana

@Kalpana_KaCy

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#137

Originally posted by: chavvi16
I agree with your analysis of LT
But the other one. Not so much
I loved maan dialogue from chapter 45
Their argument just loved that
Dev Tara plan awesome
Kya dimaag lagaya
Must say you must be the only writer who managed to have maneet argument in just 500 words
And yet it said it all
Just one mini request don't let geet let maan get away with this
Nor khushi to arnav
After all they put the girls through man
Pay back toh banta hai please

Don't worry! Sabko apna apna payback milega! Aur sabki baraabar band bajegi! Na Geet Maan ko chodegi aur na Khushi itni aasani se Arnav ke paas aayegi! Everyone will get their dues!

About your response to my DFL monologue, I am not saying the idea was not great! I am not pointing out the flaws of my plot! My plot simply rocks! Poora IF forum ghoom lo par DFL jaisi dhamakedaar story nahi milegi! This I know! It is the writing technique which I am finding flaws with! See the transition. I could have written better. There is no smooth flow from one scene to other. The scene change in the starting seems a bit abrupt. I am saying this by comparing it to all the chapters I have written till now. That part could have been written a lot better by me! What do you say? This does not seem like my best work, right?

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chavvi16

@chavvi16

Stunner

Posted: 11 years ago

#138

nope mujhe toh theek hi laga
but guess you know better
after all its your story dear
agar laga ki it wasnt smooth enough am sure you wont listen to me
so i guess all i can say is you can work on it i guess
dont know what to say there

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Kalpana

@Kalpana_KaCy

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#139

Originally posted by: chavvi16
nope mujhe toh theek hi laga
but guess you know better
after all its your story dear
agar laga ki it wasnt smooth enough am sure you wont listen to me
so i guess all i can say is you can work on it i guess
dont know what to say there

Haila! Bura maan gayi kya? I was just arguing for the sake of arguing! I love to argue! It is my fav timepass! Please argue back, na? I was enjoying it!😆

P.S. If you are happy with the work then cool! I am happy too! After all, reader khush nahi toh story likhne ka kya faayda! But if you are ever unsatisfied with my work toh bol dene ka! Hichkichaane ka nahi!

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chavvi16

@chavvi16

Stunner

Posted: 11 years ago

#140

Originally posted by: Kalpana_Writer

Haila! Bura maan gayi kya? I was just arguing for the sake of arguing! I love to argue! It is my fav timepass! Please argue back, na? I was enjoying it!😆

P.S. If you are happy with the work then cool! I am happy too! After all, reader khush nahi toh story likhne ka kya faayda! But if you are ever unsatisfied with my work toh bol dene ka! Hichkichaane ka nahi!

main bura mann gayi

aur mujhe hi nahin pata chala😕

haila yeh kaise hua ji

acha ladna zaroori hai

chalo agli baar se ladenge theek hai