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Posted: 11 years ago
Anu

i am really really stunned. You have written it with so much sensibility. The relationship , just not coz of the age difference but respective ages too, is difficult to write about. You have handled it with so much care and sensitivity!
That bedroom scene was really endearing as much as the knitted handkerchief. :)
Edited by Anupama. - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
Jenny...I'm still in awe of the way you're writing this story. You have obviously read so much of that period, and know so much about the lifestyle, people there, that whatever you write, I want to believe. I know there are things in the story which are not exactly applicable or even accepted in the present day, but considering the time period the story is set in coupled with your beautiful writing, it makes total sense and a very pleasant read.
This chapter was lovely. Loved how how you gave a little about Khushi's sister. I feel for her poor soul. She married so young. Died so young. Barely got to see her childhood.
I feel a little bad for Pranab too. He's falling for Khushi and doesn't even know it. And it's heartbreaking to even think of his poor wife... who obviously is still quite young to understand anything. I just hope things go smoothly for them.

Khushi lives for Arnav, I've realized. Her everything starts and ends at Arnav. She wants to do everything for him. And it's very important for her to get his approval. Loved how she made him a handkerchief with an 'A' written on it, and the way Arnavr received it was ever more cute. The kiss was so lovely and sweet! And I loved how you stopped it at the kiss. It's just not the time to take it to the next level now. She's so still so young.. so much time it took for her to realize her giddy feelings. Very, very sweet scene.

I'm pleasantly surprised to learn that Arnav is taking Khushi with him 😊

Edited by Anarocksick - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
very very nice update...

you beautifully described those days...soo much innocence and purity in ARHI moments ,each and every line u wrote about them...i do not have words left...her wait, his thank u kiss😉😉😉😛😛😛😛😛...very very touchy...

so pranab is also married, he is getting attracted to kushi,at his age it common i guess...

u r update is one thing and our fellow readers and (writters )will give the detailed review..i will wait for them also ...

Aqua Sandhya, Meera, Vgedin, kondhili,vandana sagar,disha,( i like u r pictures yaar in each nd every story) EXPELLIARMUS,Eccentrica, Rasgulla_sp...
no wonder u guys all of them become amazing writters...iam not offending any one sorry if iam miss any body, these are the people will take first spots right detailed review thats how i know. them..😊😊😊😊😊😊😊...

thank u for giving us nice update...

cheers...
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Edited by kushiarnav1 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
Wonderful Update!! First gift for Arnab from Khushi and their first kiss means cheek kiss.. It was a bliss to read you writings you know.. I never thought that Khushi is Arnab's second Child wife.. Khushi lost her everyone... Feeling sad for the poor soul... But now she has her Arnab babuu with her.. And after the kiss Khushi's explanation about her increasing heart beat was funny and cute.. Pranab was attracted by Khushi's charm.. Don't know what will the result of all this.. Waiting for next..
Edited by RockDiya21 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
I read it in one breath...I loved the ARSHI moment..I guess u have done a lot of research on bengali novels,culture as well as movies.hat's off to you...👏👏👏👏
Edited by dieforasr - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
arre wah!!! updat jaldi aa jao!
res...
edit~~~~

Haila!!! forgot that i resed here!! sigh...me n my short memory!!!😕

commented on pg136😳
loved the update:)
Edited by -HEAVEN- - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Such a lovey update! My god! I cannot term those moments as first sign of bonding! It was purely impulsive! I just hope he wouldn't regret it later! I'm sure he wont because he was satisfied with her reaction to his actions!

And how things changed from khushi to his khushi! How he now includes her in his every thought and action!

Sad to read one died of chiken pox and the lady is just concerned that the kid dies with bangles! Senseless people! And more so the second wedding! Eww!

And pranab hmm poor guy! But in a way they seem more fine as the age says so! But arshi! So ya!

Cheers
Edited by TwilightStar_JP - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
Updated on pg 126:) Hope you like it!
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Posted: 11 years ago
Phoole phoole dhole dhole
Bohe ki ba mridubay

Piko ki ba kunje kunje
Ku-uhu, ku-uhu, ku-uhu gaaye

Ke jaane kishe'r o laane
Pran-o kore haaye haaye

It is one of my favorite Rabindra shongeet.

I love this. Because it is set in a time period in my favorite city that I really love, for it is picturesque and the best, and the worst times that Bengali culture (and the nation) went through the motions of change.

I adore your narration of this. The naivete of Khushi, the clash of intent, need and rationale within Arnav. It's amazing how you describe the mental picture of the people of that age, the nuances of social and familial relationships. I also like the mention of courtesans as women who were desired, not just because of their sexual liasons, but because men found pleasure that is not just of the body, in their presence.

I cannot wait for more of this. Another obsession this will be, for sure.
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Posted: 11 years ago
Awesome update! this one was pretty good then teaser...i was worring over arnab thinking about he being too old for khushi...this time around he is addressing her as his khushi😊

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