SwaRon FF: Misfits [Chp 8 Pg 16 8th Jan'14]

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Sawyer_Tom

@Sawyer_Tom

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#31

Hey guys. So here's the next update. Few pointers though. My updates will mostly be weekly. But it may take longer. I can't promise for sure. Also, this chapter has turned out rather large so I apologize in advance for its length. Thanks a lot for all the encouraging comments.

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Kankshita

@thegameison

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#32

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This is an ingenious, quirky, mesmerizing and exceptionally intriguing piece of work. It's also a literary treat, delightfully flowing. In all regards, I pronounce you back in business, En. And I don't give squat what you think. I may be rusty in making my comments but the fact remains, I enjoyed reading the chapter so darn much.

Sharon liked empty roads. Almost as much as she liked stepping on empty soda cans. They were delightfully squishable, after all. At this, I decided I would quote all my favorite bits of the chapter to you and admire them descriptively one by one. But I found myself too engrossed in the chapter the next paragraph onward that I was unable to move so much as half an inch in my seat, let alone halting my read and copying phrases. That being said, there's rawness and humor and all things random oozing out of this sentence. 😆

Also, right at the beginning you draw such an uncanny contrast between the first installment and the prologue at the beginning. The background is dark but the chapter right from the start is exceedingly cheerful. And that's genius on your part!

I don't know where I am going with this comment, okay? In time, I'll learn to comment properly. For now, I'm going to tell you this - you have created three very dynamic and layered characters. I cannot even pick which one I'm more looking forward to reading. And you've been so descriptive in this one. With the right kind of flow, it does become not-boring-at-all to read about manorial architecture and about a sandwiched gas station.

Exuberant read, this one!

Kanks

Edited by epiphany. - 12 years ago

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Sawyer_Tom

@Sawyer_Tom

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#33

Originally posted by: marauder

Tu bada khus hai. Aur sab changa? FB pe bhi bas pics like karte firti hai aur fir gayab?

Can't help it. I'm so busy, I feel like I'm going to explode. 😒

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Sunil

@Suni1986

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#34

Amazing prologue nd lovely update

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Sanskriti

@SanskritiS

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#35

Awesome update 😊

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ANMOL

@Hp_TvD_mAnIc

Rocker

Posted: 12 years ago

#36

veryyy niccc loved it...

plzzz update soon

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Rohan :)

@RoHaNmAlHoTrA

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#37

that was so freaking awsm...

i loved the concept though...

but i never thought the chap wud be so nice and...

i mean the way each and every thing was described was like out of the world...

seriously...i never read something like dis before at least on IF...

if i m not wrong u wrote Living The Dream too...?

not lucky enough i read it after it had completed...

so i never got a chance of reviewing it

but that was awsm too...

.the most grt part of it was the decription and the way both of them pain was described...

it was so goood...

hatss off for LTD

coming back to dis...

the title is little confusing...

but the first chap cleared it all...

so the three friends ShaReyam...was again decribed wonderfully...

she got drunk haha...and the Manor..

wow sounds like a english horror movie...the difference is there are no aatma's here...

but again the description...nailed it...!!!

rey smokes...hmmm

she is going to become a legend??????

and yaa the way they became friends...swayam's mom's sandwiches... haha

very well written...

hatss off again...

pls pls pls pls pls pls pls pls pls pls pls pls pls pls pls pls pls pls pls pls pls pls

!!!!UPDATE SOON!!!!

Rohan :)

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Chaitra Joshi

@-Chaitra-

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#38

wow amazing beginning..

it was freaking awsome...

loved it...

waiting for u to continue

do pm me wen u update😳

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Varada

@damonTVDrocks

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#39

pheww... At last completed... Yeah, it was long but didn't want it to end... I just wanna read more and more... The way you described everything, I felt like it was all happening right before my eyes... 👏Can't wait to read more... Update soon...😛PS: Sane indeed is boring...😊

Edited by damonTVDrocks - 12 years ago