A full-blown gasp is what came out of my mouth when I saw this Pm this morning. I was astounded, which was quite quickly followed by a massive grin on my countenance.Coming to the fan fiction, it is quite brooding, I think. The prologue keeps one eluded, wanting to read more.
The fact that Sharon Raiprakash cried was evidence enough of the hurt and pain and the 'gaping hole' as you put it, in Sharon's chest for Swayam's betrayal, and her pain, and that HE was the one who caused that pain, made it so difficult for him to bear, for, he loved her. Even the cat seemed to sympathize with him, and she WAS quite humane. 'The day she was named' thingy makes me think SwaRon are well, together somehow, but its still a mystery. Even when his temperament was anything but normal, he took his time to acknowledge how beautiful she looked, soaked in rain, and clad in white, albeit not her presence. The way you described the place, a black ruin, the way both of them were at that moment, in ruins, smithereens, was aesthetic. It makes the reader think and also makes them wonder about the gravity of the situation, that left them both, forlorn.
I have always loved the way you delve deep into the psychologies of your characters and its just not a superficial picture, even though its just the prologue that is up and that takes skill. 👏
All in all, its very good. Please continue soon, and will you have an updating pattern like Kankshita as well?
Edited by gargicool - 12 years ago
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