TR OS~Tumhaare hain hum hai tumhaari kasam~

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guys... this is my 1st attempt to write something with my own idea... pls i want all suggestions and critics... honestly... pls guys...

Situation current track ka hai' rey tries a lot to manaaofy taani' har possible situation me try karta hai to win taani back. Bt fails always' qki taani ne psychologically ye decide kr liya ki she will never bother him again neither she will allow him to do so with her'

Ab as ndc me unka waapas entry hua hai' rey throws a party to everyone' night time at his home'

Taani dint agree to attend initially but later as everyone forced her' she had to come' as she is the chief reason for their re-entry in ndc'

Ab rey was trying so hard to win her back' use samajh nahi aa raha tha how to bring her back into his life' iss baar aisa kya karey ki woh manaa na kar paaye'

Here with the gang'

Vicky: guys' aap logon ko nahi lagta ki rey aaj kal bohot depressed ho gaya hai' nd bohot dull ho gaya hai'

Nil: haan yaar' main bhi notice kr raha hu' kabhi kabhi aisa lagta hai who forcefully apne emotions ko control kr raha hai'

Swayam: (thinks) shit' main itna idiot kaise ho saqta hu' mera affair toh shuru ho gaya' mujhe aur Sharon ko milaane me rey ne kya kya nahi try kiya. Meri behen ki betterment k liye ussne break up kiya apne dil ko patthar banaake, to c her successful. Ab main hu ki uski help nahi kaar raha to win her back' mujhe Sharon se milke kuch toh plan krna hi hoga'

Sab log ready ho gaye'

Here with girls' as usual tension me'

Aashi: main kaisi lag rhi hu? Blush zyaada nahi ho gaya na?

Neha: neha thinking' this earrings nt suiting me'

Simmi: Sharon yeh heels pehnu ki yeh?

Rinni: Sharon' main kya pehnu?

Sharon: guys' pls rey ke ghar hi toh jaa rahe hai' wear whatever u like'

Sharon phn starts ringing flashin name "majnu"

Here with taani'

Taani ko who saare pal yaad aa rahe hai jab who rey ke saath thi' uske break up ke baad bhi' ab rey ko uski parwa honey lagi' rey wants to patchup their relationship'

She suddenly started sobbing'

Taaani: q rey? Q mujhe confess kiya tht u love me? Q mujhe yakeen dilaaya tht tum mere bina incomplete ho? Q mujhe itna pyaar kiya? Phir q mujhse door chale gaye? Q mujhe aapse break up krne pe majboor kiya? Kya bigaada maine aapka aur aapke pyaar ka? Ab jab mai khud ko sambhaal rhi hu and mujhe aapki zaroorat nahi hai' toh q phir aap mujhe sab yaad dila rahe hai' phir aapko mujhse pyaar q ho gaya?

Nahi' mai aapse door hi rahoongi' kya pata ki aisa dobaara na ho' mujhme itni himmat nahi hai' ki koi aur baad me humdonon ke beech mu create kre' nd phir humdonon ki relationship me pro baa jaaye' isse accha hai tht I shud avoid u' I shud ignore u' aap mere life ki pyaar ho rey' main nahi chahti' aap mere wajah se phir se apna dil tod de'

Saying all this she went to dress up fr the party'

Swaron finished their talk on the phone and Sharon had an idea' Sharon invited 2 singers'(will reveal later)

Here at rey's home the party started and all arrived' all were seeing rey was smiling bt not with his heart' he was missing taani soo much he was feeling so alone in so many ppl'

Taani arrived in the last with a white sleevless top and jeeggings as she was nt so interested to attend the party' bt still she was looking so simple and cute'

taarey

taarey

Rey nd taani were caught in an eye lock bt taaani broke it soon' rey was feeling if someone was piercing his heart'

Suddenly there was a voice from somewhere' "wassup guysss"

(I am really sorry' I donno how many of u kno Sree ram Chandra the Indian idol of last season' and sugandha mishra a very popular singer and mimic also')

sree ram...

taarey

sugandha...

taarey

They both appeared in the spot light'

Sree: I kno ki aapsab bohot bore ho rahe ho' suggu' mujhe lagta hai hum ek interesting game khelna chahiye' watsay?

Suggu (sugandha): hum pehle apna intro toh de de' (then they introduce them selves to everyone)

Sree: so the game is that ki hum ek gaana gaayenge' aur iss gaane pe' who couple jo bina eyelock break kare aur bina ruke naachengey' who couple hi jeetengey'

Suggu: haan' and jiss couple pe hum log spotlight daalengey' uss couples ko hi stage pe aana hoga'

Suddenly light chali jaati hai' and taani ke haath me jo drink tha who uske top pe gir jaati hai' and'

Sharon: oh no taani' chalo' hum washroom chalet hai'

Taani: ya' ok'

Sharon was sooo happy sab as planned ho raha hai'

Sharon: arrey yaar, yeh toh nikal hi nahi raha' ek kaam karo' mere paas ek outfit hai'

Taani: short hai toh sorry Sharon main nahi pehen saqti'

Sharon: arrey baba' ek prom dress hai' plss use hi pehenlo' waise sab log acche acche designer outfits me hai' pls pls taani' apne bhabhi k liye itna bhi nahi kr saqti?

Taani' hmmm' ok' ab choice nahi hai mere paas'

Then she changes'

taarey

(VERY BAD AT DRESS SELECTION... PLS ADJUST)

neeche jaane ke baad' jaan boochkar Sharon taani ko rey ke paas chodti hai' nd andhere me pata nahi chalta' Sharon swayam k paas khadey ho jaati hai'

And then spotlight aati hai nd first taarey par girta haai' rey was happy beyond the zenith'

She was looking drop dead gorgeous! Rey asked fr her hand' bt she dint give' she was about to go' bt sugandha says tht'

Miss. Taani, agar aap chali jaaogi toh sab log saari ladkiyon par mazaak udaayenge tht hum me himmat nahi hai' taani took a deep breath nd gave her hand in his' both were caught in an eyelock' den later they went on to the stage'

Phir spotlight jaake swaron pe giri'

They also reached the stage'.

Phir slowly sree nd suggu started their song'

pls click the link...

http://soundx.mp3slash.net/indian/mere_yaar_ki_shaadi_hai/4(mp3pk.com).mp3

M: Resham Si Hai Yeh Hawaein Sanam
Aao Zara Paas Aaye Sanam
Resham Si Hai Yeh Hawaein Sanam
Aao Zara Paas Aaye Sanam
Jaage Jaage Armaan Hai Jaage Jaage Hum
Jaage Jaage Armaan Hai Jaage Jaage Hum
Ho Jaane Do Ab Faasle Kuch To Kum
Jaage Jaage Armaan Hai Jaage Jaage Hum
Jaage Jaage Armaan Hai Jaage Jaage Hum
Resham Si Hai Yeh Hawaein Sanam
Aao Zara Paas Aaye Sanam
Jaage Jaage Armaan Hai Jaage Jaage Hum
Jaage Jaage Armaan Hai Jaage Jaage Hum
Ho Jaane Do Ab Faasle Kuch To Kum
Jaage Jaage Armaan Hai Jaage Jaage Hum
Jaage Jaage Armaan Hai Jaage Jaage Hum

M: Angdaai Leke Hawaein Chali To Kyon Na Khushboo Bikhre Kali
F: Khushboo Hawaon Mein Kaise Bhare Kaliyan Hai Sharmaati Haay Kya Kare
M: Kya Pata Hai Yeh Kya Sharam Hai Ya Saja
F: Kyon Hai Betabiyaan Intezar Ek Zara
M: Ek Pal Ki Bhi Doori To Ab Hai Sitam
Jaage Jaage Armaan Hai Jaage Jaage Hum
Jaage Jaage Armaan Hai Jaage Jaage Hum

M: Chup Rehna Chaaha Tha Rehna Sake Phir Bhi Jo Kehna Tha Keh Na Sake
F: Tum Mujhse Kuch Bhi Kaho Na Kaho Aise To Khoye Huve Na Raho
M: Ab To Jo Ho So Ho Baat Dil Ki Suno
F: Kehti Hai Dhadkane Keh Bhi Do Keh Bhi Do
M: Tumhare Hai Hum hai Tumhari Kasam
Jaage Jaage Armaan Hai Jaage Jaage Hum
Jaage Jaage Armaan Hai Jaage Jaage Hum

F: Resham Si Hai Yeh Hawaein Sanam
Aao Zara Paas Aaye Sanam
Jaage Jaage Armaan Hai Jaage Jaage Hum
Jaage Jaage Armaan Hai Jaage Jaage Hum
Ho Jaane Do Ab Faasle Kuch To Kum
Jaage Jaage Armaan Hai Jaage Jaage Hum
Jaage Jaage Armaan Hai Jaage Jaage Hum
Jaage Jaage Jaage Jaage Jaage Jaage

Jab gaana chal raha tha' taarey were lost in their own world leaving everyone awestruck at their love in the dance' they couldn't notice tht swaron stopped dancing looking at taarey' after the dance' there was a huge and loud applause' taarey broke their last pose' nd shared an awkward eyelock'

Taani went running on to the terrace' and started crying her heart out'

Q main aapse jitna door jaanaa chahti hu' tum mere utna paas aate ho' main kaise sambhaalu apne aap ko? Meanwhile' rey faints after the dance'

Swayam took rey to his room, all the guests dispersed nd only gang was there with full of confused faces' here Sharon came on to the terrace and told taani tht each and everything about the break up was just a media to realize herself' her own self' rey ne yeh sabkuch apne pyaar ke liye kiya'

Taani ko samajh nahi aa rha tha kaise react karey'

Taani: main bohot buri hu bhaabhi' maine rey ka dil bohot dukhaaya' main unhe deserve nahi karti' I don't even deserve to live'

Sharon: taani' aisa nahi hai dear' dekho' rey pyaar ke liye tadap raha hai' agar tum marne ki baat krogi toh rey caant live'

And moreover rey ko ab tumhaari hi zaroorat hai' pls taani' rey faint ho gaya' tum hi use theek kr saqte ho'. U shud bring him into his normal self'

Here with reyam'

Doc: his body is burning with a very high temperature' bohot pressurize ho gaya' kisi baat ko leke psychologically bohot hurt hua yeh ladka' unhe sirf aur sirf ek peaceful and loving environment ki zarrorat hai'

All were there including taaaron'

Sharon looks at taani' she gives an assuring look'

Sharon talks to swayam and leaves taani with rey hoping tht everything will be fine by next morning'

Rey was mumbling in his sleep' "taani' I love u' pls mujhe chodke mat jaao' pls' main marr jaaunga taani tumhaare bina'"

A small tear trickled down his eye' she starts to break into sobs with guilt' rey ki iss situation k liye taani apne aapko blame kr rhi thi'

She sees the time and wakes rey up to give medicine' rey dint wake up' she thot who kitchen se paani laakey' phir rey ko uthaayegi' and then wen she left rey woke up' he was trying to reach his phn bt his hand slips the bed lamp' and it falls down with a lot of sound'

Taani comes running into the room' and shuru'

"rey aap khud ko samajhte kya ho? Ek toh itna tezz bukhaar hai' phir bhi aapko khud ka khayaal nahi hai' zaraa bhi nahi sochte ki kya hoga' abhi agar yeh pieces chub jaatey toh? Hey krishnaji' pls samjhaao inko ki har jagaah hero banna zaroori nahi hai' and blah blah blah'"

Rey: am I dreaming?

Taani: ji nahi' me sach me yaha hu' aapko bukhaar hai' and main aapki khayaal'

Rey: kya? Tum? Mujhe yakeen nahi ho rha!

Taani: her eyes starts to well up' nd wahaaan se jaane waali thi tht he shudnt c her tears'

Rey: stops her by holding her wrist'

Taani' kya hua? He gets up' pls don't worry main bilkul theek hu baby' nd hee wipes her tears'

She hugs him tightly' nd starts crying' rey' kya aap mujhe kabhi forgive kr saqte ho? Rey maine aapke saath bohot bura behave kiya' meri vajah se aap aaj iss haalat me ho' main bohot buri hu rey' I don't deserve u'

He the pulls her into a deep soft kiss' she was sooo feeling peaceful and relaxed' she was pulling him more to deepen the kiss' both were in a bliss' they dnt want to leave each other'

After breaking the kiss' she gave him the medicine' nd he slept on her lap' she was caressing his hair n both fell asleep like that promising to be with her forever and ever' (bukhaar toh uthar gaya)

taarey

here m done... ready to get all tomatoes nd anddey... if possible patthar also... pls like and comment...!

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Posted: 12 years ago
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res/ unres-

yipe me first

awesome os dear loved it so much
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Posted: 12 years ago
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resss/unres..!!

WooW..HIMA di it was awesome..!! 👍🏼

N dreSS SelEctiOn waS VEry GooD 👏 👏

First Attempt me yeh to hai aage aage dekho hota hai kya 😉😆

ThanKSsS For PM.!


Edited by Akanksha297 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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aww nice one hima

liked it

reality was thr in this😊
Edited by Nichuss - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#5
Awesome os
taarey dance superb
taani taking care of rey loved it awesome os
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Posted: 12 years ago
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it was too good
I said it u hav d potential to write
I m glad u took tym n wrote an os
I totally loved dis os
n one more thing u r too good wid dress selection coz I loved d white gown
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hima dr,well done.Glad to c d budng writer in u.D bichadan moments wr emotional.TR dnc,haye! Gosh,Tani kitni bolti hai,ws yelng at Rey fr nt tkng cr of hmslf,hw swt.Finaly,ty r tgtr,lvly.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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awesome os dear..!!!
u r seriously awesome writer..!!
emotional kr diya yr...

n dress selection was too gud..!!
kash aise real mein bhi ho sake..!!

luking forward for ur writings..!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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super awesome os ..👏👏
just loved to the core 😳
and the dress selection was good .. 👍🏼
and this was your first attempt ?😲
first attept mein hi itna accha ?😲
you are indeed an awesome writer 👏👏
I totally loved reading this ..
the pov's were beautifully described ..
emotions were portrayed beautifully too 👏
It was a superb concept .👏
keep writing 😊
would love to read more from you 😊

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Awsm I luv
Taarey dance luvly
Dress thanks for PM

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