*Completed* Th#2 SS: Hold My Hand Ch. 4+NOTE pg. 1

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Seethu

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Posted: 12 years ago

#131

First of all, I really admire the way you branched out of the normal subject to give us a new concept.. You've conceived and depicted it very well ...

The first few chapters were pleasant with emotions, relations , feelings etc .. but the previous chapter kind gave away the fact that Khushi might not exist in real.. Yet , the last chapter was very gripping and I was literally glued to each and every word of it .

The way you projected the illness was very brilliant .. Coming to the story being rushed to end ,I didn't feel it was rushed as we already started getting different ideas about Khushi's existence and any further drag would have spoilt curiosity..

Great work !!!

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incarnadine

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Posted: 12 years ago

#132

Just caught up with the last 2 chapters..

Loved this SS! So unique! Yes, you definitely did a fantabulous job by showing Khushi being there, without actually being there! 👏

Chapter 3 was cute, sweet, romantic..and quite scary!

Arnav-Khushi's 'date'..

The conversation between Anjali and Arnav..

Then Arnav and 'Khushi' off on a romantic boat ride...

But then, Arnav falling off from the boat 😒

Chapter 4 has left me so sad..

Arnav schizophrenic!

I was actually crying while reading that Khushi was just his imagination 🥺 and all the while I was wishing it wouldn't be true..

So Akash and Shyam have a very valid to reason to get angry at Anjali. She was quite responsible for Arnav's state..

Anyway, I would love to have the mechanic as the real Khushi, coming into Arnav's life, and giving happiness to the man who has faced so much..

Loved it!

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Arjuhisis

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Posted: 12 years ago

#133

nice one zehra - I loved it dear

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tinsel

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Posted: 12 years ago

#134

Wow! Beautiful ending to a beautiful story👏👏👏

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Aaradhaya1688

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Posted: 12 years ago

#135

That was one helluva
Updatw

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aquagal

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Posted: 12 years ago

#136

Oh God!! I feel so bad right now. From Socha Na tha it turned into 16 Park Avenue 😭😭😭😭😭😭
My heart goes out to Arnav. But it looks like his condition is result of two people - His Dad & somewhere Anjali.
Yeh kyun hua?? Sapno ki duniya mein rehna hi acha tha...
No Khushi and still she comes at the end again. This girl with gray green hazel eyes it looks like has imprinted herself on Arnav's brain that he imagines this face again & again.
The open ending was good but I still can't decide - to go for a realistic one or to go for a dreamy happy ending that he finally got what he has imagined so many years.
I guess I'll go for a realistic one that even the mechanic Khushi was an outcome of his brain because he saw two men in blue coming & now there was only Khushi around.
How painful it would be for his loved ones to see him in such a state and how painful it would be for him to feel the hurt & pain of losing again & again!!! 😭😭
I don't like unhappy endings, it makes me sad...😭

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VYGA

@VYGA89

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Posted: 12 years ago

#137

Thanks for writing this.
Its really good to read something different.
I felt so bad for arnav and Anjali..
Hopes the girl in the end is
Khushi,the original khushi.
Would you write Epilogue.

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Aysha

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Posted: 12 years ago

#138

That was very very clever

i knew something was wrong with Arnav as the family take extra care of him but wouldn't have guessed him to be a schizophrenic

amazing last chapter - taken by surprise

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IamSwapnali

@IamSwapnali

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Posted: 12 years ago

#139

waiting for answers to my doubts

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vandana.sagar

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Posted: 12 years ago

#140

Seriously, this was brilliant...I actually don't even want an epilogue...I think it was a perfect ending...but then if you do feel the need for one am sure that will be as gripping and captivating!

Edited by vandana.sagar - 12 years ago