Arhi FF : Peek-a-boo #1 [ Completed ] - Page 7

Originally posted by: ssyahoo

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Great start to your story! Khushi has created quite an impression from the first meeting and cannot wait to see what wonderful story you will be unfolding.

I love the way your updates are filled with so many emotions! Looking forward to chapter 2

Originally posted by: pixiegirl

Oh Mints this was just beautiful... I am sorry, I was so busy never had the time to read this before, but now that I have, I can't wait to read more... So Arnav's got the first jhatka so to speak... 😆

Please update soon...

Originally posted by: chitrajay

Finally!!

Peek-a boo!!!!😳

Originally posted by: vandana.sagar

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Mints,

Another one, we are truly blessed! In such a short time you have given us stories from 3 different genres...

So Peek- a- boo...love the name, the concept and love the connotation of the name...am looking forward to the way you feel adapt the story around the title!

Loved the character sketch...loved the faces to the names...it was a brilliantly presented one...

Love the description of Delhi, a city so close to my heart and you have done full justice to it and that the best part of the city. The Parliament House and the then the Raizada Mansion I could feel the opulence of the house and felt like it was so real...that driving around I could actually see it there!

Loved the introduction to Raizada Senior and all that he stands for and is...the insight into his life and his beginnings... his relationship with his family, his mother, his wife and children...I can already feel the love and respect they share...I see a house where everyone lives for each other yet not cramping anyone's style!

Loved the mother, she seems so lovely, the kind you want to turn to!

Loved that Sr Raizada credits his wife for what he is today, her loyalty, love, support and faith in him for which he is grateful and now he wants to devote his time to her to make up for the past especially now that he has an able heir...our Raizada Jr!

I loved your Arnav. I loved him totally ...his exuberance for life!

He values what is he and what he has, he lives his life to the fullest and loves it too, but never taking his circumstances for granted and appreciating it all. I loved his introduction him in his car, listening to that song...perfect.,

Love his idea of love and love that his parents have set such a great example for him, that he is in love with the idea of a girl who he could feel the same love for as he sees reflect in his parents even now...that something special, which maynot be able to be described but he know and waits to feel it for someone especial ! He is a normal guy, has his share of relationships had not seen nor met " the one" ! Love his devotion to his mother ...I loved that touch, how he would do anything for her...and that he was happy to be a Mumma s boy! Loved how Mumma though her Arnav was just perfect as he was!

Loved that he is his fathers pride and so glad that he is able to live up to him expectations of his father...happily and willingly...and not out of a sense of obligation !

Anjali can see her as an asset to her parents too...and love her characters sketch..waiting to see her part in the story ! I sense a great bond between the siblings too! Love that she is independent.

Loved how you wrote their first meeting, he rushing to do something that was important for his mother...and the frustration of the traffic and on top of that being delayed by an un necessary interruption...loved how from the moment he hears her speak he is reminded of home...and feels her presence so vividly that he is drawn to her...and he cannot wait to see her it's like he almost willed her to take out that helmet and see her beautiful hair...it's as though he is smitten before he has even seen her face...and then her action of swirling her hair, it's like he is mesmerised ...by his very own angle so pure and innocent in white...and then he is done for when he sees her...her simplicity and beauty...makes him feel some thing that he has been wanting to for a while now. The desire he feels incomparable to anything he has ever felt...it's like apart from her and him there was no one else...everything else paled by her presence...

I love how he is so struck by her vision that he does not even realise when she has disappeared , the sound of cars horns breaking his reverie and bringing him back to the present... and then he realises he is never going to be the same again...his life had changed ..her thoughts her face her eyes and she in totality had captured him completely...the smile on his face validating what his heart felt!

Originally posted by: mayurisb80

wow Peek a boo is a beautiful change ..a fresh change ...we have a different ASR here ...cant wait to read more of Peek a boo

Originally posted by: ranogill

please update soon