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mints23 thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
#51


Aww Chetna... will update Sins before I update this one!! 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
#52
I edited my comment on page 1 and as promised, this is my tribute to you Mints, for writing this story
and you, Vandy, for being the very nicest person ever, and a truly good friend - the very best!
Love you both
Enough of the mush now - I blame this story!😉

SHATTERED (by Khushi)

Smiles and blushes – a few moments stolen-

Some tender, some full of fierce passion!

An unspoken emotion, so new, it had yet to grow…

Moving slowly, to one another, in a dance so slow.

When there arose a spectre from the past,

In a flash, my dreams broken, I became an outcast.

Ignoring the pain, I asked him why?

My questions, with an answer, he did not dignify.

I waited, I smiled, slowly mending fences broken that night;

All the while, breaking inside slowly, 'twas my plight.

My breath, my life, the man for whom my heart beat-

At last, telling me, he thought me a cheat??!!

Those precious moments I cherished so much

His looks, his smiles, his very touch –

Always being there, whenever I did fall

Did it all really mean nothing at all?

Was it all just a clever ruse, a trick, a ploy?

Was his love just a mere decoy?

Love and trust must go hand in hand,

Or else will slip through our fingers, like sand.

My heart breaks from the very pain,

Of having loved this man, all in vain.

Tears trickle down, fury comes now, no more words-

He never cared, he never shared, 'tis silence that hurts…..

Suddenly, my breath, my every sense knows he is here

But what is this now? I feel no fear….

A pain so deep, it has bled me out

Empty now, so cold – there's not a doubt.

I look at him, there's naught left in me,

I am now as bare, as a wintry tree.

Broken and destroyed, I am, to my very soul

Shattered – mayhap, never again whole….

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Posted: 12 years ago
#53
Part 3 of my "comment"
Told you it was really long...😆

REGRETS (By Arnav)

A rage so strong, only harm could it do

Walking away, emotions bubbling in a brew.

One memory that hurts, that makes me bleed

So much that to her, I paid no heed.

Faint whispers of other memories come,

Telling me truths, that turn me numb.

I should have known, I should have guessed,

Eyes so guileless, her love I should have trusted.

She gave me joy, even when I gave her pain;

In me, she put her trust, to love in sun or rain.

Bits here and bits there, the facts are now so clear,

My mind so sharp, usually ' now draws back in fear.

Undeserving of her love, I certainly am,

Caused her pain, so deep and so often.

So badly now, do I need to make it up to her

Not just now, our entire lives, until forever'.

I wish to give her the very world,

Never again to hurt her by deed or word.

For her, only for her, I will try with all my might

Her life, and her pain, I have to set it right!

All alone now she sits, do I dare?

To show her anew, how much I care?

She stirs now, I know she knows that I am here.

Her eyes, her beautiful eyes'.they are so clear.

Empty now'..blank'of all that I hold dear.

No! My heart, my soul screams in fear,

Of having lost her, maybe forever'.

What can I do, not for me, but just for her?

Silence again reigns ' in my barren heart and soul

An empty space, there's nothing but a hole.

At any straw, my heart wants to clutch,

But, my love, I have hurt her so very much-

Do I dare to be the one to heal?

Once again, to make her feel?

Regrets for a path wrongly taken;

Regrets for every angry action;

Regrets for pleas that went unbidden;

Regrets for a trust that was cruelly broken;

Regrets for the pain, for breaking the heart

Of the only one, who had given my empty soul a start'.

PS- it might seem incomplete
thats because your story is too
please continue
Edited by chitrajay - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#54

Originally posted by: chitrajay

Part 3 of my "comment"

Told you it was really long...😆

REGRETS (By Arnav)

A rage so strong, only harm could it do

Walking away, emotions bubbling in a brew.

One memory that hurts, that makes me bleed

So much that to her, I paid no heed.

Faint whispers of other memories come,

Telling me truths, that turn me numb.

I should have known, I should have guessed,

Eyes so guileless, her love I should have trusted.

She gave me joy, even when I gave her pain;

In me, she put her trust, to love in sun or rain.

Bits here and bits there, the facts are now so clear,

My mind so sharp, usually ' now draws back in fear.

Undeserving of her love, I certainly am,

Caused her pain, so deep and so often.

So badly now, do I need to make it up to her

Not just now, our entire lives, until forever'.

I wish to give her the very world,

Never again to hurt her by deed or word.

For her, only for her, I will try with all my might

Her life, and her pain, I have to set it right!

All alone now she sits, do I dare?

To show her anew, how much I care?

She stirs now, I know she knows that I am here.

Her eyes, her beautiful eyes'.they are so clear.

Empty now'..blank'of all that I hold dear.

No! My heart, my soul screams in fear,

Of having lost her, maybe forever'.

What can I do, not for me, but just for her?

Silence again reigns ' in my barren heart and soul

An empty space, there's nothing but a hole.

At any straw, my heart wants to clutch,

But, my love, I have hurt her so very much-

Do I dare to be the one to heal?

Once again, to make her feel?

Regrets for a path wrongly taken;

Regrets for every angry action;

Regrets for pleas that went unbidden;

Regrets for a trust that was cruelly broken;

Regrets for the pain, for breaking the heart

Of the only one, who had given my empty soul a start'.

PS- it might seem incomplete
thats because your story is too
please continue



C,

Brilliant I knew you are...but this was outstanding !
I am left speechless...seriously, what do I say apart from I am in awe and if you ever stop writing it will be a loss for all of us...
I am hoping no am demanding now in full PC mode to see your story posted!
Take a now my friend!
I speak for Mints too...
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Posted: 12 years ago
#55
Amazing. You potrayed their feeling so beautifully. So sad and beautiful. Pls continue :)
mints23 thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
#56

Originally posted by: chitrajay


For her, only for her, I will try with all my might

Her life, and her pain, I have to set it right!

All alone now she sits, do I dare?

To show her anew, how much I care?

She stirs now, I know she knows that I am here.

Her eyes, her beautiful eyes'.they are so clear.

Empty now'..blank'of all that I hold dear.

No! My heart, my soul screams in fear,

Of having lost her, maybe forever'.

What can I do, not for me, but just for her?



Chitra, This is my favorite part of those beautiful poems you have written...
I can't believe all this talent was hidden for so long... You are just brilliant...
What a lengthy chapter could do... the same was done by these few lines...
Total emotional atyachaar!! 😭
It was brilliant C... and if my writing is going to inspire you to do this...
I promise I am going to write forever!! 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
#57
That was absolutely amazing
i got something i wanted to see in the show and i got it in an OS (better than nothing)
it was well written, filled with emotion that connected
Khushi has literally had the life sucked out of her
she could bare everything but knowing the truth which showed how he truly saw her
he finally realises and yet he is still selfish in thinking how would he live without her..yes he realised that also but he was set in motion to stop her from leaving him and his life, to stop it from being plunged into darkness but her look showed him its no use

loved it👏
mints23 thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
#58

Originally posted by: ayshaomar

That was absolutely amazing

i got something i wanted to see in the show and i got it in an OS (better than nothing)
it was well written, filled with emotion that connected
Khushi has literally had the life sucked out of her
she could bare everything but knowing the truth which showed how he truly saw her
he finally realises and yet he is still selfish in thinking how would he live without her..yes he realised that also but he was set in motion to stop her from leaving him and his life, to stop it from being plunged into darkness but her look showed him its no use

loved it👏


Thank you!! This is what I had wished from IPK...
A good revelation followed by Arnav's guilt and redemption and Khushi's hurt...
which unfortunately got totally side-kicked... 😉
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Posted: 12 years ago
#59
hey mints dii...when u update khamoshiyaan...
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Posted: 12 years ago
#60
simply beautiful and touching. Loved it. Please do continue...

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