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Jenny, loved it...loved the contrasts of the two ...Khushi and her childish innocence juxtaposed with Arnab and his internal conflict. He is fighting the attraction that he sees growing in him for her hating the fact that he is feeling something over which he seems to have no control ( almost like the Arnav on the show) the internal conflict that he is battling manifesting in his manner and behaviour towards her, his frustration over the situation along with the helpless he feels, from wanting to protect her innocence to these desires he is having ...
On the other side her proximity with his brother a constant reminder of their age difference and somewhere feeling envious too, loved the scene of the mango orchard where his irritation comes out towards his brother for following Khusi's instructions whereas the real issue was his brothers closeness with her...making him feel older and more far removed from her. Loved Khushi's defiance and fearless attitude...I could just imagine her pulling rank over Pranab. Getting him to do what she wants and him being at her beck and call, further aggravating Arnab and his already disturbed self...
I loved how he is at the age where he feels things around him, be it the hopeless situation of politics, his realisation of the opulence and stand his father has in it. The inability to do more than he wants, his opposing views and the the fame and name that he is stuck with wanting to break free to follow his own principles and opinions...
I liked how when he finds her in his room he reacts that came out so naturally, she asking him innocently if he likes hers, not understanding the implications of her words, bit he knowing the purpose with which she is sent to him,...and if he gave in to what was expected, he loses his respect for himself and the values he stands for... him cursing himself for seeing her with desire and attraction and feeling disgusted and angry with himself and his ability to see her in that light , just as it was almost predicted or expected making him no different from the others and in his head still something that he opposed...but did not expect to feel the way he is. I hope that is what your were trying to portray when he takes out his anger which he actually what he feels for himself on her, as she is vulnerable again reminding me of the Arnav from the show...
So typical of the elder women to get him involved in a domestic life to curb his behaviour and keep him in wht thier idea of control is...seeing the tension between the ideologies of father and son. The contrast between their thinking. I liked how in the beginning he goes to ask his mother about the doll, realising the reason for his fathers absence...and his mother used to male dominance not needing too much convincing to return the doll.
His father and his differences, the feeling of worthlessness, the atmosphere around him.
The internal battle in his head over Khushi...all written so clearly and vividly depicting the essence of that era and lifestyle brilliantly . The authenticity in the details...all written so well and clearly !
I liked how through your narrative you covered the passing of time...
I liked the last bit too, it could be him being impulsive or irrational or just fighting internal demons and ofcourse the examples being set by his father...I have a feeling that just thinking that by going ahead with what he has set out to do, it makes him similar to his father, and that will deter him...I would say too early for thoughts of Khushi to stop him right now...
Eagerly waiting for the next part...
Oh forgot to add, the part where affected by his behaviour and words she goes to thammi asking how one becomes a woman...I could feel her desperation and distress, not knowing fully what the implication and connotation of those words are!
Edited by vandana.sagar - 12 years ago
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